Greg's Had Enough
A story of loneliness.19 total reviews
Comment from Louise Michelle
I had no idea he was supposed to be a real ghost until I read your reply to one of the comments. I think if you ended it with something like: Of course he own Mum didn't even reply, the reader would stop, think and then get it.
It's a sweet, haunting image and when I first read it, it made me sad thinking about abused and neglected children. Too bad I didn't realize he was a ghost. Best Wishes, Lou
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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I had no idea he was supposed to be a real ghost until I read your reply to one of the comments. I think if you ended it with something like: Of course he own Mum didn't even reply, the reader would stop, think and then get it.
It's a sweet, haunting image and when I first read it, it made me sad thinking about abused and neglected children. Too bad I didn't realize he was a ghost. Best Wishes, Lou
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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No worries, it was probably not clear enough.
But the deeper meaning was the one you understood: those children everybody ignores.
Thanks for reading.
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Maria. Another terrific write by you. I think there are times when even we flesh and blood humans feel we're invisible to some. A creative dribble for the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Hi Maria. Another terrific write by you. I think there are times when even we flesh and blood humans feel we're invisible to some. A creative dribble for the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Thanks so much, Marilyn.
Comment from Ulla
Awe, Maria Jose, this is heartbreaking. Such a lovely little sweet boy and he feels all but ignored. That's different kind of bullying when you they make you feel you just don't exist. Good luck in the contest with this stark story. All best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Awe, Maria Jose, this is heartbreaking. Such a lovely little sweet boy and he feels all but ignored. That's different kind of bullying when you they make you feel you just don't exist. Good luck in the contest with this stark story. All best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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But you noticed he's a real ghost, didn't you?
Thanks for reading.
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I confess, I didn't. I'll have to read it again. I feel bad. My only excuse is that I'm so tired. Had a late night last night with good friends. I'm getting too old for that.LOL
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:) Don't worry. You're not the only one who hasn't noticed. Probably my bad.
Comment from Scarbrems
Aww, poor Greg. A sweet, sad little story. Haven't we all felt invisible at times? Bless him. Trouble is, I want to know what happened next, lol. Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Aww, poor Greg. A sweet, sad little story. Haven't we all felt invisible at times? Bless him. Trouble is, I want to know what happened next, lol. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from 24chas
This was a good write, Maria Jose Garcia. It was told beautifully and was very truthful. I've seen kids like this one and I feel for them. Nice job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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This was a good write, Maria Jose Garcia. It was told beautifully and was very truthful. I've seen kids like this one and I feel for them. Nice job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Thanks so much for reading.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written dribble flash fiction about a little boy who is inviible and no one seems to see him around because he is a little ghost stuck in the world of the living unseen.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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A very well-written dribble flash fiction about a little boy who is inviible and no one seems to see him around because he is a little ghost stuck in the world of the living unseen.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Thanks for reading, Sandra. Have a great weekend.
Comment from Stephanie Launiu
You've told the sad story of Greg in 51 words. You've met the contest requirements, but more than that, you've called attention to other children like Greg who are spending their whole days unhappy in our school systems. Society needs to make sure our children don't feel invisible. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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You've told the sad story of Greg in 51 words. You've met the contest requirements, but more than that, you've called attention to other children like Greg who are spending their whole days unhappy in our school systems. Society needs to make sure our children don't feel invisible. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Thanks for reading, Stephanie. Even though that's my moral, my Greg is a real ghost...
Comment from Irish Rain
Whoa, quite creepy.
The question...are they ghosts?
Or does Greg simply feel like a ghost?
I think they must be, if even the teachers ignore him.
I see a children's book in this.
'The little ghost in School'...
Loved it!
Blessings...
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Whoa, quite creepy.
The question...are they ghosts?
Or does Greg simply feel like a ghost?
I think they must be, if even the teachers ignore him.
I see a children's book in this.
'The little ghost in School'...
Loved it!
Blessings...
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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He is a real ghost... but there are many children out there who feel like this.
Thanks for reading.
Comment from Sugarray77
Maria, I enjoyed this short little story. Your punch line is adorable and we understand why he is being ignored... haha.. so cute. Good luck in the competition!!
Melissa
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Maria, I enjoyed this short little story. Your punch line is adorable and we understand why he is being ignored... haha.. so cute. Good luck in the competition!!
Melissa
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Thanks for reading, Melissa. Have a nice weekend.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Greg will eventually be noticed by his teacher, most kids like keeping their heads down and not being noticed! He he he, loneliness in a child is sad, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Greg will eventually be noticed by his teacher, most kids like keeping their heads down and not being noticed! He he he, loneliness in a child is sad, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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No, he won't be noticed... He's a real ghost!
Thanks for reading, Dolly.
