Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 464 "Kings and Queens"Small and Specialty Poems
14 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This shows those members of royalty that are fair and just. I like that each stanza is a cinquain. You also remind us of the castles we so wish to visit. You forgot to mention crimson as a royal color.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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This shows those members of royalty that are fair and just. I like that each stanza is a cinquain. You also remind us of the castles we so wish to visit. You forgot to mention crimson as a royal color.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Thank you dragon poet. Good point. I opted for purple, but I love Crimson too./
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You're welcome.
Joan
Comment from Pantygynt
The idea of making a paper crown out of a poem is really intriguing. As intriguing as the deckof cards becoming a bible and prayer book all rolled into one as in Wink Martindale's talking blues, the Deck of Cards. Do you remember that one about the soldier who was reported to his officer for playing cards in church. Talk about a glib excuse - that lad had them in spades. Lol.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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The idea of making a paper crown out of a poem is really intriguing. As intriguing as the deckof cards becoming a bible and prayer book all rolled into one as in Wink Martindale's talking blues, the Deck of Cards. Do you remember that one about the soldier who was reported to his officer for playing cards in church. Talk about a glib excuse - that lad had them in spades. Lol.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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TYhank you Pantygynt. Yes I do. I laughing my ass off at the associations.
Comment from 24chas
This was a good read, Treischel. It was very creative and done well. I love the imagery you used in your descriptions. The piece had a nice flow also. Good job.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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This was a good read, Treischel. It was very creative and done well. I love the imagery you used in your descriptions. The piece had a nice flow also. Good job.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Thank you 24chas
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Crown Cinquain inspired by the king and queen of the playing cards. It seems also to be true in real life. There is one who rules over the subjects who have to pay taxes to be ruled as the king wishes.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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A very well-written Crown Cinquain inspired by the king and queen of the playing cards. It seems also to be true in real life. There is one who rules over the subjects who have to pay taxes to be ruled as the king wishes.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Thank you Sandra. Yup, you got it.
Comment from tfawcus
You have some subtle near rhyme in this. There's just an echo of it in the first lines Royal/Castles/To all, which helps to unify the crown.
Nice internal rhyme of 'border' with 'order', and I liked the consonance in this:
"purple bedecked,
holds his people's respect,"
The plosive alliteration of 'p's in this cinquain helps to support the idea of power:
"power places,
palaces display wealth,
provide protected living spaces"
It's always good to see alliteration used for a specific purpose
I must go back and have a look at some of your other cinquain variations. They sound interesting.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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You have some subtle near rhyme in this. There's just an echo of it in the first lines Royal/Castles/To all, which helps to unify the crown.
Nice internal rhyme of 'border' with 'order', and I liked the consonance in this:
"purple bedecked,
holds his people's respect,"
The plosive alliteration of 'p's in this cinquain helps to support the idea of power:
"power places,
palaces display wealth,
provide protected living spaces"
It's always good to see alliteration used for a specific purpose
I must go back and have a look at some of your other cinquain variations. They sound interesting.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Thank you Tony for the excellent review and also those encouraging stars.
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your spinning more cinquains--this time a Crown Cinquain with its jagged points and circular links with the repeats. Thanks for taking a photograph especially for this poem. The ensemble made me think of the subplot of "Hamlet"! Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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I enjoyed your spinning more cinquains--this time a Crown Cinquain with its jagged points and circular links with the repeats. Thanks for taking a photograph especially for this poem. The ensemble made me think of the subplot of "Hamlet"! Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Thank you Joan. I always enjoy your perspective.
Comment from damommy
It does indeed form a crown when view sideways! How clever. I like the way you linked the stanzas together. Good rhyming, too. You never run out of new ways to write poetry. 8-)
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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It does indeed form a crown when view sideways! How clever. I like the way you linked the stanzas together. Good rhyming, too. You never run out of new ways to write poetry. 8-)
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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Thank you damommy, I appreciate your review and comments on.
Comment from QC Poet
Thank you for the creative new cinquain writing concept I believe, I have not seen it used this way as noted in your notes.
This is excellent conceptually and structurally. Thank you for sharing this poem.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the creative new cinquain writing concept I believe, I have not seen it used this way as noted in your notes.
This is excellent conceptually and structurally. Thank you for sharing this poem.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your review and comment
Comment from Stephanie Launiu
Excellent crown cinquain that is written literally about the Crown! Your author's note is a guide to writing cinquains and I plan to bookcase it. Thanks so much for sharing and teaching at the same time.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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Excellent crown cinquain that is written literally about the Crown! Your author's note is a guide to writing cinquains and I plan to bookcase it. Thanks so much for sharing and teaching at the same time.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Stephanie, I appreciate your review and comments.
Comment from writer_13
I liked the format you chose for this poem. It worked really well and it flowed together nicely. I found it very interesting and was entertaining as well as informative.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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I liked the format you chose for this poem. It worked really well and it flowed together nicely. I found it very interesting and was entertaining as well as informative.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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Thank you, wrier_13, l appreciate your review and comments.
