One day on the beach
A childhood memory21 total reviews
Comment from QC Poet
Not quite the old going to the beach story, but definitely a sign of our times. Thank you for sharing this experience so others can open their selfish minds and affliction.
Good job and sorry to have heard about the subject matter happening to you.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2019
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Not quite the old going to the beach story, but definitely a sign of our times. Thank you for sharing this experience so others can open their selfish minds and affliction.
Good job and sorry to have heard about the subject matter happening to you.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2019
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Many tnanks. Jen
Comment from victor 66
A very smooth rhyme with rhythm and flow to match. I remember when I was in second grade at a Catholic elementary school. One my classmates brought to school these rather indestructible balloons that would hold an amazing amount of water. I don't know what his father paid for these "balloons", but the kid charged us a nickel. My memory isn't as startling as yours. Fun read though. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2019
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A very smooth rhyme with rhythm and flow to match. I remember when I was in second grade at a Catholic elementary school. One my classmates brought to school these rather indestructible balloons that would hold an amazing amount of water. I don't know what his father paid for these "balloons", but the kid charged us a nickel. My memory isn't as startling as yours. Fun read though. Best wishes.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2019
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Thanks Victor. I remember the water episod3s too. Jen. X
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You are most welcome, Jen X.
Comment from Gail Denham
Yuk indeed. Too bad your parents slept through all that beauty and fun. So many good memories we have of being with our sons and their friends, then our grandchildren at the beach. But before that with my parents and friends from when I was young. Still, the garbage that floats in on many beaches is horrible. In Oregon we have a big cleanup couple times a year. A thinking poem in many ways.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Yuk indeed. Too bad your parents slept through all that beauty and fun. So many good memories we have of being with our sons and their friends, then our grandchildren at the beach. But before that with my parents and friends from when I was young. Still, the garbage that floats in on many beaches is horrible. In Oregon we have a big cleanup couple times a year. A thinking poem in many ways.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Many thanks for the review and supe 6r* jen.
Comment from susand3022
Oh My God Jen.... I laughed so hard I wanted to projectile vomit!!! It was disgustingling hysterical... and sad... and well, I don't even know what else. But funny, yes! LOLOLOL Glad it wasn't me!
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Oh My God Jen.... I laughed so hard I wanted to projectile vomit!!! It was disgustingling hysterical... and sad... and well, I don't even know what else. But funny, yes! LOLOLOL Glad it wasn't me!
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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I am so pleased you liked my poem, thanks a lot for reviewing. Jen.
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Jen. Not a good thing for anyone to find, not even an adult. It just goes to show you what type of flotsam and jetsam can be found on a beach--even back then. Nowadays kids probably know what that "balloon" is. They're more savvy than we were as kids. Good luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Hi Jen. Not a good thing for anyone to find, not even an adult. It just goes to show you what type of flotsam and jetsam can be found on a beach--even back then. Nowadays kids probably know what that "balloon" is. They're more savvy than we were as kids. Good luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Thanks for reading Marilyn, much appreciated. Jen.x
Comment from Heather Knight
Ouch! Innocence is great, but it blinds us sometimes. I'm not surprised you find the memory sickening.
Cool poem.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Ouch! Innocence is great, but it blinds us sometimes. I'm not surprised you find the memory sickening.
Cool poem.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Many thanks. Jen. X
Comment from kiwijenny
Ha ha ha ...oh I. So thankful for a good immune system....what you could have caught...what did your parents say? To explain that one.
Ha ha ha ha oh that's awful. I think you could win
God bless
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Ha ha ha ...oh I. So thankful for a good immune system....what you could have caught...what did your parents say? To explain that one.
Ha ha ha ha oh that's awful. I think you could win
God bless
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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It wont win as the commitee don't seem to have a sense of humour but you do.
Thanks, glad you liked it. Jen.xx
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Oh I do. When we moved to the states from NewZealand I had to explain to my seven year olds that they couldn?t say rubber anymore. They had to say eraser...lets just say Rebecca thought it was so cold in America that men had to wear rubber hats on their penises. Lol
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That's funny. Take care. Jen. X
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Take care too
Comment from Aussie
Oops, kids are so naive. Yes, hard to be an only child, I was alone so much, learnt to play my own games. Then again I grew up in the fifties. Your introduction was so sweet and pulled at the heartstrings; the ending was a bombshell that you will never forget. Excellent poem for the contest and I wish you all the best with your entry! XXK.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Oops, kids are so naive. Yes, hard to be an only child, I was alone so much, learnt to play my own games. Then again I grew up in the fifties. Your introduction was so sweet and pulled at the heartstrings; the ending was a bombshell that you will never forget. Excellent poem for the contest and I wish you all the best with your entry! XXK.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for your great review. Jen. X
Comment from Stephanie Launiu
I love poems with the final line being a kicker. And yours definitely is. The photo you have accompanying your poem is perfect for what you have written about. Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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I love poems with the final line being a kicker. And yours definitely is. The photo you have accompanying your poem is perfect for what you have written about. Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Thanks for the great review. Jen.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh dear! And as a child you had no idea what that "balloon" was. What's appalling is that the beach has that kind of pollution. Your well-rhymed poem told the story well.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Oh dear! And as a child you had no idea what that "balloon" was. What's appalling is that the beach has that kind of pollution. Your well-rhymed poem told the story well.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much Helen. Much appreciated. Jen.
