Finding Our Way
A LOST contest entry9 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This flash fiction story, Finding Our Way, is nice and mellow. I love that you brought it back around to 'finding your way' for the finish. Really upbeat and enjoyable.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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This flash fiction story, Finding Our Way, is nice and mellow. I love that you brought it back around to 'finding your way' for the finish. Really upbeat and enjoyable.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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I am delighted you enjoyed FINDING OUR WAY, Bill. Thanks for sharing. Rod
Comment from Sugarray77
I enjoyed reading this tale of a sort of redemption... making good and being able to come back home to the hometown and hold your head up. You handled it very well while bringing in the reality of losing our way from time to time. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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I enjoyed reading this tale of a sort of redemption... making good and being able to come back home to the hometown and hold your head up. You handled it very well while bringing in the reality of losing our way from time to time. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Yes, I suppose you could call FINDING OUR WAY a tale of redemption, Tim certainly did redeem himself in Mr. Berke's eyes. Many thanks for sharing. Rod
Comment from Joanna S. Blue
This is a very engaging story. As a former teacher, I relate to the situation of bumping into former students, most often, in a grocery store. I like how you establish the setting--the unchanged grocery and the situation they are in. Very
efficiently done. Then set up what seems to be an awkward situation. All the while,
Tim knows how he will surprise Mr. Berke. You can "see" this. This take on being
lost was different and charming.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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This is a very engaging story. As a former teacher, I relate to the situation of bumping into former students, most often, in a grocery store. I like how you establish the setting--the unchanged grocery and the situation they are in. Very
efficiently done. Then set up what seems to be an awkward situation. All the while,
Tim knows how he will surprise Mr. Berke. You can "see" this. This take on being
lost was different and charming.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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I am so pleased another teacher can relate to FINDING OUR WAY. I also appreciate your very kind praise of the story. Rod
Comment from LisaMay
Oh, this is good. I loved reading it... the dialogue is believable and there is good detail to flesh out the characters. I do so hope Steph and Tim get it on and live happily ever after... even if she has to move to Indiana..
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Oh, this is good. I loved reading it... the dialogue is believable and there is good detail to flesh out the characters. I do so hope Steph and Tim get it on and live happily ever after... even if she has to move to Indiana..
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Hi Lisa. I appreciate your reading FINDING OUR WAY and I am truly honored the winner of this competition likes it. Congrats on your win! Rod
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I thought that your story could well have won, Rod. Mine just pipped yours.
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Thank you, Lisa.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Good story, Anonymous Author.
The dialogue between the characters felt natural, not forced or pretentious.
You also managed to add a bit of humor in the banter between Mr. Berke and Tim Rutherford which helped to lighten the overall mood.
I noticed no errors that needed correcting.
Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Good story, Anonymous Author.
The dialogue between the characters felt natural, not forced or pretentious.
You also managed to add a bit of humor in the banter between Mr. Berke and Tim Rutherford which helped to lighten the overall mood.
I noticed no errors that needed correcting.
Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2019
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Hi again, Dean. I enjoyed writing this story as it gave me a chance to reflect on my own career as a teacher and the students who I might have helped find their way. Many thanks for your kind praise. Rod
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My pleasure, as always, Rod.
~Dean
Comment from kiwijenny
Wow this was a good way to get lost...grocery stores seem to be the best places to meet people..this was cute...I'm a teacher and it's always my hope my students did well with their lives
This was a satisfying read
God bless
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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Wow this was a good way to get lost...grocery stores seem to be the best places to meet people..this was cute...I'm a teacher and it's always my hope my students did well with their lives
This was a satisfying read
God bless
Comment Written 14-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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I am so pleased another teacher shared this. So often we NEVER know what kind of influence we had on individual students. Many thanks for your kind praise.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
This is a truly fun and delightful offering for the contest -- not too long and full of love-intrigue and 'meeting up' again .... always enjoyable!! ;) ;) Your unique approach should do well a the polls -- great job and thank you for sharing! ;) ;)
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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This is a truly fun and delightful offering for the contest -- not too long and full of love-intrigue and 'meeting up' again .... always enjoyable!! ;) ;) Your unique approach should do well a the polls -- great job and thank you for sharing! ;) ;)
Comment Written 14-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for sharing my story. I am delighted you enjoyed it and appreciate your encouraging review.
Comment from Ben Colder
I was lost in this write but found my way. Made think of my 7th grade teacher and some of thing she said. They were all true. Glad you found time for coffee. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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I was lost in this write but found my way. Made think of my 7th grade teacher and some of thing she said. They were all true. Glad you found time for coffee. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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I appreciate your taking the time to read my story, Ben. Glad you could relate to Tim when he was the narrator?s student.
Comment from Rob Caudle
A nicely penned five hundred word story here I can't get anything done in under one thousand. This was a fun read you weave the back story expertly through your fine dialogue. I hope this well for you in the voting booth it was so very well penned.
Rob
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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A nicely penned five hundred word story here I can't get anything done in under one thousand. This was a fun read you weave the back story expertly through your fine dialogue. I hope this well for you in the voting booth it was so very well penned.
Rob
Comment Written 14-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Rob, for reading FINDING OUR WAY. I am so pleased you enjoyed it.
