The Amorous Ape
Zoological love story in rhyming couplets8 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Very cute, Mystery Author. This one brought me many, many smiles as I read it. I think my favorite line was: "She's got a little accent/She's from Tanzania." Good luck with this in the contest. Whether it wins or not, it's still excellent. Don't forget that!
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2019
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Very cute, Mystery Author. This one brought me many, many smiles as I read it. I think my favorite line was: "She's got a little accent/She's from Tanzania." Good luck with this in the contest. Whether it wins or not, it's still excellent. Don't forget that!
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Rachelle. It was a fun one to write.
Comment from JudyE
Some of the zoo animals must get very lonely without the company of their own species. I loved the 'picked nits for a while' -- a small stroke of genius, I thought :)
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2019
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Some of the zoo animals must get very lonely without the company of their own species. I loved the 'picked nits for a while' -- a small stroke of genius, I thought :)
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2019
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Thank you! I wondered whether to use that line - I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Dear Anonymous Poet,
Thank you for sharing your entry in the Story-poem about animals. It sounds like the kind of love born in a zoo. How lucky that he and his new lady friend came to a loving solution.
Good luck to you in the contest with this well-written poem with nice rhythm and rhyme,
~Mustang Patty~
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Dear Anonymous Poet,
Thank you for sharing your entry in the Story-poem about animals. It sounds like the kind of love born in a zoo. How lucky that he and his new lady friend came to a loving solution.
Good luck to you in the contest with this well-written poem with nice rhythm and rhyme,
~Mustang Patty~
Comment Written 14-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thanks, Patty. Happy Valentine's Day!
Comment from Joanna S. Blue
Your poem, even with its humor and playfulness, tells a very touching love story.
It is one we all can identify with--initial attraction, uncertainty, strategizing, trying
to impress, or pretending not to be impressed, concern, fear . . The language is
very natural, the rhyme doesn't feel forced. It is entertaining, charming, and you
really want Greystoke to get the girl.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Your poem, even with its humor and playfulness, tells a very touching love story.
It is one we all can identify with--initial attraction, uncertainty, strategizing, trying
to impress, or pretending not to be impressed, concern, fear . . The language is
very natural, the rhyme doesn't feel forced. It is entertaining, charming, and you
really want Greystoke to get the girl.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thanks, Joanna! I originally wrote the short story as an exercise, trying to use the 12 elements of a romance novel. Somehow it's morphed into this poem :-).
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What are the 12 elements?
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Similar to the hero's journey:
1.Ordinary World
2.The Meet
3.Rebuffed
4.Wise Friend Counsels
5.Acknowledge Interest
6.First quarrel
7.The Dance
8.The Black Moment
9.The Lovers Reunite:
10.Complications Push them Apart
11.Together at Last
12.HEA
I think I found the list in a book by C.
S, Lakin - Layering Your Novel
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Thank you!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very cute and very well written story in a poem about the Apes. You used very cute and very loving words. I love the picture of the Ape you used. I enjoyed reading and reviewing. I hope you have a very happy Valentines Day! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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This is a very cute and very well written story in a poem about the Apes. You used very cute and very loving words. I love the picture of the Ape you used. I enjoyed reading and reviewing. I hope you have a very happy Valentines Day! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 14-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the kind review and rating.
Comment from His Grayness
I found this very rare and uncommon work to be totally delightful and amusing from beginning to end! I have no recommendations to improve this work in any way and thank this author for a lot of fun! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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I found this very rare and uncommon work to be totally delightful and amusing from beginning to end! I have no recommendations to improve this work in any way and thank this author for a lot of fun! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment Written 14-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thanks, Your Grayness! I always appreciate your kind reviews. - Chris
Comment from Scarbrems
Aww, this is so sweet. I can just picture it, the chest-beating, the tire throwing. A great entry, fun and original. Made me smile. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Aww, this is so sweet. I can just picture it, the chest-beating, the tire throwing. A great entry, fun and original. Made me smile. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you for both the nice review and rating.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a humorous write and I liked that you used the name 'Greystoke', that made me smile too, you did a good job turning your story into a poem and I was entertained, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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This is a humorous write and I liked that you used the name 'Greystoke', that made me smile too, you did a good job turning your story into a poem and I was entertained, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Dolly. I was just about to enter my story when I noticed that it had to be a poem. Quick rewrite :-). Thanks for the kind review.
