Grandma Is Ready To Go
Will her beloved husband be waiting for her?11 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word story, Grandma is Ready to Go, meets the required word count and finds Granny on the water slide having a terrific time.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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This one-hundred-word story, Grandma is Ready to Go, meets the required word count and finds Granny on the water slide having a terrific time.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Thanks Bill.
Comment from Dean Kuch
My near death experience wasn't anywhere as near as pleasant as this, Lisa May.
I won't go into what I saw, there simply isn't enough time.
But, suffice it to say there were no bright, beckoning lights nor golden-hued relatives holding out their hands, awaiting to greet me on the "other side".
I'm glad the experience is different for everyone because if you'd seen what I did in what I've since been told was purgatory, you would pray you'd never die.
Good luck to you in your contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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My near death experience wasn't anywhere as near as pleasant as this, Lisa May.
I won't go into what I saw, there simply isn't enough time.
But, suffice it to say there were no bright, beckoning lights nor golden-hued relatives holding out their hands, awaiting to greet me on the "other side".
I'm glad the experience is different for everyone because if you'd seen what I did in what I've since been told was purgatory, you would pray you'd never die.
Good luck to you in your contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 12-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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How horrific. I'm glad you didn't go all the way and we can have you for a while longer. I'll bet you're glad too. And I can see how being Christian would help. I'm intrigued about what nearly killed you... sorry if that is too nosey.
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A massive coronary.
I wrote a story about it on Fanstory. Below is the link, if you're interested:
Why? One Man's Story
~Dean
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I've just read that story. It explains a lot about your personal imagery and how the coronary was so transformative. Thanks for suggesting I read it. I will be mentally processing it for a while.
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Thanks very much for taking the time to read it, Lisa.
Take care...
Comment from lyenochka
Well done in this surprise-ending flash fiction. I got a clue since the grandchildren are on either side that it really isn't an exit from life but from a water slide tube. Brave grandma! I think I would pass. Lol.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2019
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Well done in this surprise-ending flash fiction. I got a clue since the grandchildren are on either side that it really isn't an exit from life but from a water slide tube. Brave grandma! I think I would pass. Lol.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2019
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Clearly I can't trick you! You have so much imagination yourself to be one step ahead of most other people. I have been "down the tube" several times, admittedly some years ago, and I loved it. These days, I don't like getting wet in public.
Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from LIJ Red
Excellent flash fiction, even more so when the reader realizes that Granny is at the park about to tackle the waterslide, not in the ICU listening to the beeps...
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Excellent flash fiction, even more so when the reader realizes that Granny is at the park about to tackle the waterslide, not in the ICU listening to the beeps...
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Glad you liked my twist in the tale. Thanks for your great review.
Comment from 24chas
I'm with you, Lisamay. If it's going to be painless and a little fun I won't mind it. The only thing I dread is the watching my life flash before my eyes. I don't like reruns as it is now. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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I'm with you, Lisamay. If it's going to be painless and a little fun I won't mind it. The only thing I dread is the watching my life flash before my eyes. I don't like reruns as it is now. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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I know what you mean about the reruns! Thanks very much for your review and good wishes.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You got me wondering Lisa at the beginning and then finally it is the hydroslide adventure! Something I have never had the courage to do, so I lived the experience through your words love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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You got me wondering Lisa at the beginning and then finally it is the hydroslide adventure! Something I have never had the courage to do, so I lived the experience through your words love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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I have only through FS become aware of flash fiction and begun to realise that the Mastery of storytelling lies in the mystery and the twist in the tale. (Both references intentional)
Screw your courage to the sticking place Dolly and take the plunge!!
Comment from Graybærd
I almost spit my coffee out my nose!
I am thinking this is a story from Grandmas perspective, on her deathbed. There was so much I wanted to say, and Grandma was going down a waterslide?! Love it!
I will not disappoint. (If you are the "Grandmother") this will make you love the grandchildren more. Picture toddlers trying to coax my mother to go down a slide. She refuses saying she can't (bad back). Toddler then says, "I know why", Grandma says, "Why?"...
...."Because Grammi is too big to fit on the slide!"...
Now go hug the grandkids.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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I almost spit my coffee out my nose!
I am thinking this is a story from Grandmas perspective, on her deathbed. There was so much I wanted to say, and Grandma was going down a waterslide?! Love it!
I will not disappoint. (If you are the "Grandmother") this will make you love the grandchildren more. Picture toddlers trying to coax my mother to go down a slide. She refuses saying she can't (bad back). Toddler then says, "I know why", Grandma says, "Why?"...
...."Because Grammi is too big to fit on the slide!"...
Now go hug the grandkids.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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And I almost spit my hot chocolate out my nose when I read your wonderful review and comments about chubby Grammi.
Grandkids are so honest. (unfortunately).
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Shes big boned!! LOL
Comment from RodG
You have a vivid imagination, Lisa. I just have never thought of the voyage to heaven being through a hydroslide. I like your first person POV as we listen to Grandma's thoughts enroute. Rod
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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You have a vivid imagination, Lisa. I just have never thought of the voyage to heaven being through a hydroslide. I like your first person POV as we listen to Grandma's thoughts enroute. Rod
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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The only point of truth in this poem is the hydroslide. I am not a Grandma, and possibly am destined for the other destination rather than heaven! (Maybe not.)
Comment from patcelaw
Having never been on a water slide, I cannot quite imagine what that would be like, It was a good read and since it was kinda a flash fiction read. I made sure I did not look forward to the end of the story. Patricia
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Having never been on a water slide, I cannot quite imagine what that would be like, It was a good read and since it was kinda a flash fiction read. I made sure I did not look forward to the end of the story. Patricia
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Good on you for your restraint! I can never resist peeking. Thanks so much for your review Pat.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Oh you are a stinker, Lisa!
Of course, I thought you were writing of your demise, or a loved one's demise! What a clever ending! I laughed aloud as I would be hoping that my "beloved husband" would be waiting for me at the end of such a ride as well! Thank you for the smiles, and best wishes!
diane
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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Oh you are a stinker, Lisa!
Of course, I thought you were writing of your demise, or a loved one's demise! What a clever ending! I laughed aloud as I would be hoping that my "beloved husband" would be waiting for me at the end of such a ride as well! Thank you for the smiles, and best wishes!
diane
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Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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And I had such fun imagining the slippery slope of both hydroslide and exit chute to paradise.
