To Bathe in Starlight
There, the stuff of dreams...12 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem is a great reflection on the original, Mystery Author. Your lines read smoothly from line to line and verse to verse. Your message is loud and clear. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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Your poem is a great reflection on the original, Mystery Author. Your lines read smoothly from line to line and verse to verse. Your message is loud and clear. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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Thanks for your wonderful comments and your review, Jan -- so glad you enjoyed my attempted 're-do of Byron'! ;) ;) You know, I always worry when messing with the work of the masters...even when instructed to do so!! ;) ;) You be sure to take some time to 'bathe in some starlight' of your own this week with or without someone special! ;) ;)
Comment from CathyM
This was a job well done. Changed yet has a similar cadence that Lord Byron used. You changed it up to show that it was truly yours. Nice job and good luck.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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This was a job well done. Changed yet has a similar cadence that Lord Byron used. You changed it up to show that it was truly yours. Nice job and good luck.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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Oh, thank you for your wonderful comments and your review, Cathy -- so glad you enjoyed my 're-do of Byron'! ;) ;) You know, I always worry when messing with the work of the masters...even when instructed to do so!! ;) ;) You be sure to take some time to 'bathe in some starlight' of your own this week with or without someone special! ;) ;)
Comment from kiwijenny
O'er the sunset and through the night,
I slide through black and calling skies;
Into a sea of stars so bright
Their dance it brings tears to my eyes....I like this but Lord Byron set the bar so high
God bless. It's good
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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O'er the sunset and through the night,
I slide through black and calling skies;
Into a sea of stars so bright
Their dance it brings tears to my eyes....I like this but Lord Byron set the bar so high
God bless. It's good
Comment Written 12-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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Yes, there is no denying Lord Byron's mastery and it wasn't supposed to be anything but a use of his final rhymes and general style/format...no one could hope to touch Lord Byron's poetic prowess. :) ;) Thank you for the review, Jenny -- always much appreciated! ;)
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good entry for the contest.
-I like the original you chose
to remaster.
-The style, imagery, and
use of the original ending
words is very good.
-I like the first and third lines
of stanza one.
-The concluding line is
also very good.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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-A good entry for the contest.
-I like the original you chose
to remaster.
-The style, imagery, and
use of the original ending
words is very good.
-I like the first and third lines
of stanza one.
-The concluding line is
also very good.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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Thanx so very much for your wonderful review, Pam, and for your encouraging comments -- this one was certainly a 'different' kind of challenge! ;) :) Take care and have a wonderful evening! ;) ;)
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You are very welcome. It is a different kind of challenge, but you did it well.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem that was remastered from the poem She Walks in Beauty
By Lord Byron (George Gordon). Yours is an excellent poem comparing to the original.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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A very well-written poem that was remastered from the poem She Walks in Beauty
By Lord Byron (George Gordon). Yours is an excellent poem comparing to the original.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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Thanx so much for the wonderful review, Sandra -- always value your reviews, ma'am! ;) Take care! ;)
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi,
What a lovely redo on a masterpiece!
Your verse flows effortlessly and evokes intended imagery.
I do not see anything amiss here to suggest improving upon.
An excellent contest entry!
Thanks vor sharing and good luck in the contest.
Jan
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Hi,
What a lovely redo on a masterpiece!
Your verse flows effortlessly and evokes intended imagery.
I do not see anything amiss here to suggest improving upon.
An excellent contest entry!
Thanks vor sharing and good luck in the contest.
Jan
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Oh my goodness, Jan! You have just made my day and, perhaps, week!! :) This crazy 're-mastery' thing was certainly a challenge, and, given the ending words and having to stick to the author's original style, I kinda had to let myself 'sink into' a different mode and mood than my usual ... so you have made me feel like it worked!! :) :) Hooray!! :) :) Thank you for the lovely comments and you be sure to have a great week! ;) ;)
Comment from Stephanie Launiu
You have done such a good job of remastering this masterpiece. I find this one of the most difficult things to do. Anyway, check out your final verse, line 3. I think the final word is supposed to be "glow". That's the way I read it. Good luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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You have done such a good job of remastering this masterpiece. I find this one of the most difficult things to do. Anyway, check out your final verse, line 3. I think the final word is supposed to be "glow". That's the way I read it. Good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Thanx for that catch, Stephanie -- just a typo in the original Word Doc that I typed it in and then it just carried over ... those silly letters are right next to each other! :) ;) Glad you enjoyed, ma'am! ;) Have a great day! ;)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You did a good job here with both the rhymes, flow and the changes, even though the changes were quite minor, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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You did a good job here with both the rhymes, flow and the changes, even though the changes were quite minor, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your review -- much appreciated! ;) ;)
Comment from phill doran
such is the stuff...
This is an engaging and engrossing piece - I was wondering what you would do with 'tress' but by the time I got to the line I had forgotten about it - you have made something very personal out of the challenge and it is a wonderful journey for the reader to share your sleeping vision. The dismount "...refreshed, renewed, and innocent..." is full of hope.
A positive and uplifting message and you have made great use of the contest brief.
I wish you well with this piece and your continued writing
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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such is the stuff...
This is an engaging and engrossing piece - I was wondering what you would do with 'tress' but by the time I got to the line I had forgotten about it - you have made something very personal out of the challenge and it is a wonderful journey for the reader to share your sleeping vision. The dismount "...refreshed, renewed, and innocent..." is full of hope.
A positive and uplifting message and you have made great use of the contest brief.
I wish you well with this piece and your continued writing
cheers
phill
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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HOORAY! So glad you enjoyed, Phil -- this 're-mastery' thing was certainly a challenge, and, given the ending words and having to stick to the author's original style, I kinda had to let myself 'sink into' a different mode and mood than my usual ...so, I am so very glad it came out okay to discerning eyes! :) ;) Thanx for your encouraging comments and have a wonderful week ahead! ;) ;)
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
You have not only nailed this 'Masterpiece Remastered,' but you have penned a very beautiful poem that makes sense, portraying a night amongst the skies and stars. I love your descriptive words like 'pools, liquid, fluid, light' and all those verbs you used painting a beautiful dance high above.
I am so sorry I do not have a six-star to give you, for I feel you have earned it.
I can tell you put so much thought into this poem. It is a GREAT contest entry!!!
Gale
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019
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You have not only nailed this 'Masterpiece Remastered,' but you have penned a very beautiful poem that makes sense, portraying a night amongst the skies and stars. I love your descriptive words like 'pools, liquid, fluid, light' and all those verbs you used painting a beautiful dance high above.
I am so sorry I do not have a six-star to give you, for I feel you have earned it.
I can tell you put so much thought into this poem. It is a GREAT contest entry!!!
Gale
Comment Written 09-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019
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Wow, Gale - you humble me! ;) ;) Thank you so very much for the review and your wonderful comments -- so glad you enjoyed this 're-mix'! ;) ;) ;) Have a great remainder of the weekend! ;) ;)
