The Monster Inside
Out Of Control12 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The line: 'though it may never be won'. Might sound better 'though it may (not) be won'.
And 'when I die, (it's) then that I', I love the flow and your sentiments about controlling one's temper, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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The line: 'though it may never be won'. Might sound better 'though it may (not) be won'.
And 'when I die, (it's) then that I', I love the flow and your sentiments about controlling one's temper, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 08-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much..these were great improvements. I really appreciate the help.
Comment from Melissa Heilig
I could feel the remorse of your anger in this. I loved the rhythm of the poem making it easy to read. I can relate to the angst you feel. The presentation of the poem was also a plus.
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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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I could feel the remorse of your anger in this. I loved the rhythm of the poem making it easy to read. I can relate to the angst you feel. The presentation of the poem was also a plus.
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Comment Written 08-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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Thank you for this wonderful review,
