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Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "O God I Will Wait"God, Omnipresent is here, there, everywhere!
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Comment from Iza Deleanu
"Will wait for you per your will on your gifted land here
I wait for you for I've to listen to your alpha commands here
'Look here you would say listen to me son and carry out my order
Let's move above as you will get back to your real home there"
I like how you took the divine down and made Jesus a mere human, with tasks that are to be executed in this world and thanks that will be down in heaven.
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"Will wait for you per your will on your gifted land here
I wait for you for I've to listen to your alpha commands here
'Look here you would say listen to me son and carry out my order
Let's move above as you will get back to your real home there"
I like how you took the divine down and made Jesus a mere human, with tasks that are to be executed in this world and thanks that will be down in heaven.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2020
Comment from Joy Graham
Hello Alcreator,
I enjoyed reading your acrostic message today. You have a fine message that resonated wih me today. I love the picture you chose. It's lovely to sit and contemplate things in such a lovely setting.
Joy xx
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Hello Alcreator,
I enjoyed reading your acrostic message today. You have a fine message that resonated wih me today. I love the picture you chose. It's lovely to sit and contemplate things in such a lovely setting.
Joy xx
Comment Written 03-Jul-2019
Comment from Yuna Akil
Hi!
Thank you for the poem. I think your nonusage of coma must be difficult, and yet it must be a great exercise because now that I read a more prose-like poem-I can see how you are able to keep meaning and understand with no comas at all, which must enhance your sentence structures over time.
Yuna.
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Hi!
Thank you for the poem. I think your nonusage of coma must be difficult, and yet it must be a great exercise because now that I read a more prose-like poem-I can see how you are able to keep meaning and understand with no comas at all, which must enhance your sentence structures over time.
Yuna.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2019
Comment from Raul1
God has a home for everyone. I think of God as love and peace. He wants us to be happy. Nice work with this poem. I like it. No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
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God has a home for everyone. I think of God as love and peace. He wants us to be happy. Nice work with this poem. I like it. No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 02-Jul-2019
Comment from dmt1967
This is another good poem. I think the last verse is a bit muddled as it took me a few attempts to read and understand it, but that is just my opinion. Thank you for sharing.
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This is another good poem. I think the last verse is a bit muddled as it took me a few attempts to read and understand it, but that is just my opinion. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2019
Comment from Heather Knight
It is good to believe God will come one day to take us to our permanent home.
Another enjoyable poem.
I like the lack of punctuation.
Thanks so much for sharing.
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It is good to believe God will come one day to take us to our permanent home.
Another enjoyable poem.
I like the lack of punctuation.
Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2019
Comment from Earl Corp
I'm not sure if this is right, but when God gives a command for the end days won' it be an Omega command? I thought Alpha was the beginning of everything. Very nice job.
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I'm not sure if this is right, but when God gives a command for the end days won' it be an Omega command? I thought Alpha was the beginning of everything. Very nice job.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2019
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, another deeply heartfelt poem by this spiritual Christian writer, who appears to be deeply immersed in spiritual messaging and communication with God at this time. I hope this indicates a closer relationship with our Creator by us all and perhaps a more definitive return to Eden...
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In my opinion, another deeply heartfelt poem by this spiritual Christian writer, who appears to be deeply immersed in spiritual messaging and communication with God at this time. I hope this indicates a closer relationship with our Creator by us all and perhaps a more definitive return to Eden...
Comment Written 01-Jul-2019
Comment from Karen Luciana
Hello Again Alcreator,
You refer to the repetition of the poem in your notes. I think your use of repetition works quite well in the poem. The idea of one being at the end of his/her life is sad. You portrayed that emotion to me. I really enjoy your work. Keep going!
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Hello Again Alcreator,
You refer to the repetition of the poem in your notes. I think your use of repetition works quite well in the poem. The idea of one being at the end of his/her life is sad. You portrayed that emotion to me. I really enjoy your work. Keep going!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2019
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your thought-provoking spiritual piece conveys more than one theme, but one of them stands out the most to me: That Earth is only our temporary home. He has a place for His believers In Heaven.
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Your thought-provoking spiritual piece conveys more than one theme, but one of them stands out the most to me: That Earth is only our temporary home. He has a place for His believers In Heaven.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2019
