Eyes on You
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Final Plea"Tommy tries to rescue their family.
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Comment from TheStoryMan
Tommy is in a real fix isn't he? He commits crimes to try to get money for his wife's medical care. If his wife finds out she'll be so disappointed in him. He almost gets killed by his prior criminal boss and is being watched by an unknown person with nefarious plans. The suspense never ends.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019
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Tommy is in a real fix isn't he? He commits crimes to try to get money for his wife's medical care. If his wife finds out she'll be so disappointed in him. He almost gets killed by his prior criminal boss and is being watched by an unknown person with nefarious plans. The suspense never ends.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind review I'm glad you enjoyed it. Tommy has got himself into a heck of a mess, your right about that and it just seems to get worse.
Thank you again for your wonderful review, and for your support, it's greatly appreciated, take care.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Misstydawn
Now you have us readers being anxious
( know that I am about if John killed his grandparents and the perp?"
I found myself yes, very tense about Tommy he didn't notice the two large, dark brown eyes staring at him intently, nor does he realize this tall, burly stranger has been following him around for weeks, hoping for the perfect moment when he can carry out his plans. (what are this strangers plan for Tommy?)
Gert
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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Misstydawn
Now you have us readers being anxious
( know that I am about if John killed his grandparents and the perp?"
I found myself yes, very tense about Tommy he didn't notice the two large, dark brown eyes staring at him intently, nor does he realize this tall, burly stranger has been following him around for weeks, hoping for the perfect moment when he can carry out his plans. (what are this strangers plan for Tommy?)
Gert
Comment Written 06-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your great review I am so glad you enjoyed it that it kept you in the edge of your seat. The stranger is someone from his past and their intentions? I'd spoil the book if I told you.
Thank you again for your kind review all your help, support, and friendship, take care.
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You are welcome Mistydawn
Okay I will wait. Just to let you know. I will no longer be on FS starting in March this year. gert
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I hope you change your mind between now and then.
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No I have made up my mind, I have been on and off for 13 years and I'm running out of things to write
Gert
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I hate to see you go. Know that you'll be very missed.
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Hello Mistydawn I haven't left yet, my plans are not being a member here on FS. I still can read and review FS writings long as the person (writer) allows non members to read their work. Gert
Comment from krprice
Excellent post.
Tommy is. . . Tommy's gaze darts around, glancing.. .
I would suggest putting some kind of *** between Tommy's POV and the paragraph below where it changes POV.
Karlene
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2019
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Excellent post.
Tommy is. . . Tommy's gaze darts around, glancing.. .
I would suggest putting some kind of *** between Tommy's POV and the paragraph below where it changes POV.
Karlene
Comment Written 06-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind review, your encouraging words and for catching my mistakes, your help, support, and friendship is greatly appreciated, take care.
Comment from Sugarray77
Misty this is yet another good write about Tommy and Jen. Good job on setting scenes and dialogue between Tommy and the goons. Well written and an enjoyable read.
Melissa
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2019
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Misty this is yet another good write about Tommy and Jen. Good job on setting scenes and dialogue between Tommy and the goons. Well written and an enjoyable read.
Melissa
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for your encouraging review, I'm so glad you like it. Your help, support, encouragement and friendship is always greatly appreciated, take care.
Comment from country ranch writer
Whom is the burly character following him around?hummm nice work up for this keeping us dangling for the next one to be written. Hopefully things don't back fire on Tommy.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Whom is the burly character following him around?hummm nice work up for this keeping us dangling for the next one to be written. Hopefully things don't back fire on Tommy.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for your great review, I'm glad you enjoyed it. The character is someone from his past.
Thank you again for all your help, support and friendship, take care.
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Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Misty
=Even though I've come into this story late--jeesh, Tommy is one ornery fella.
=You're weaving quite a story. Nicely penned.
=It is always a joy to read your work. Love your storytelling.
Cheers, J (*<*)
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Hi, Misty
=Even though I've come into this story late--jeesh, Tommy is one ornery fella.
=You're weaving quite a story. Nicely penned.
=It is always a joy to read your work. Love your storytelling.
Cheers, J (*<*)
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind review and your encouraging words it means a lot to me. Tommy loves his wife very much and is doing everything he can to get the needed money for an operation that'll save her life.
Thank you again for your wonderful review. Glad to see you back, take care.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I like the way Tommy put on a show for Hernandez so he'd let him go. Now, who's the guy following him? I'm rooting for the ankle nippers myself. Slap a badge on the one that drew blood. :)
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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I like the way Tommy put on a show for Hernandez so he'd let him go. Now, who's the guy following him? I'm rooting for the ankle nippers myself. Slap a badge on the one that drew blood. :)
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for your great review. The guy following him is someone from his past. Your rooting for the dog over my main character? Oh, that's not good. I'm going to have to do something to fix that.
Thank you again for all your help,support and friendship. It means a lot to me, take care.
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Can I help it if I like dogs? If he bit the guy, he had a good reason. Dogs know good guys from bad guys. They can smell the difference. It's true.
Comment from royowen
Tommy manages to escape Hernanandez's goons and cleverly manipulates his thinking so that he lets him o. Meanwhile Rachel and the guys are trying to piece together the robberies and now murders. Tommy doesn't know there's someone watching him, and has been for awhile now. Well done, blessjngs, Roy
Typo : And attend(s) some of the functions. 2: who works when (since) it's all volunteers.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Tommy manages to escape Hernanandez's goons and cleverly manipulates his thinking so that he lets him o. Meanwhile Rachel and the guys are trying to piece together the robberies and now murders. Tommy doesn't know there's someone watching him, and has been for awhile now. Well done, blessjngs, Roy
Typo : And attend(s) some of the functions. 2: who works when (since) it's all volunteers.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your great review I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for catching my mistakes. I greatly appreciate all your help, support and friendship, take care.
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Most welcome
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Who could that be. I hope it is someone to treat him the way he just treated the small dog. I'm glad it bit him.
Well he talked himself out of being killed once that day I suppose that could rile a fellow. I was feeling sorry for him at first but not so sure anymore. He has a criminal mind and a temper. Bad combination. LOL Nancy:)
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Who could that be. I hope it is someone to treat him the way he just treated the small dog. I'm glad it bit him.
Well he talked himself out of being killed once that day I suppose that could rile a fellow. I was feeling sorry for him at first but not so sure anymore. He has a criminal mind and a temper. Bad combination. LOL Nancy:)
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your great review. I'm sorry I turned you away from Tommy, though. He isn't a bad guy, just got upset because the dog bit him. Maybe I should add Tommy's injuries, make you feel sorry for him again?
Thank you again for your great review, all your help and support, take care.
