On the Precipice* (*see author note)
When you reach that point...25 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Expertly crafted, Yvette. I really feel the ponderous pace of each line with the briefcase alerting me to problems at work and the need to be alone to contemplate also makes me wonder if he really should be alone. Great job and best to you in the contest!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Expertly crafted, Yvette. I really feel the ponderous pace of each line with the briefcase alerting me to problems at work and the need to be alone to contemplate also makes me wonder if he really should be alone. Great job and best to you in the contest!
Comment Written 04-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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So good that there are still people out there that practice the 'reading between the lines' bit! :) :) Thanx for your wonderful comments, Helen -- always so look forward to your insights! :) ;) Take care and have a wonderful evening! :) :) Yvette
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You, too, Yvette!
Comment from Christine C Autry
This is this so true. I think the world can be heavy too. It is nice just to have nature to get away too. Thank you for sharing your work. It was good to read.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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This is this so true. I think the world can be heavy too. It is nice just to have nature to get away too. Thank you for sharing your work. It was good to read.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Thanx for stopping in for the read and review, Christine -- be sure to stop by any time as you are certainly welcome 'round here! :) ;) Take care and have a wonderful evening! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment from meeshu
This is a very fine piece of writing. It has a wonderful cadence and pace in perfect Nonet form. it reads so smoothly the way you suggested, MD. Well done.........................PD
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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This is a very fine piece of writing. It has a wonderful cadence and pace in perfect Nonet form. it reads so smoothly the way you suggested, MD. Well done.........................PD
Comment Written 04-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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It was different...sometimes the mood just says 'mellow' .... and, sometimes, it says 'sit your ass down and just take a breath'....the latter being today - LOL! :) ;) Thanx for the review, sir -- always so good to hear from you -- y'all have a good evening out there! :) MD
Comment from trimple
Good evening, Yvette
A most enjoyable poem that you have your reader interactive with as we read and breath...
I liked the way you showed and not told with the briefcase.
Clever girl :)
kind regards
tracey
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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Good evening, Yvette
A most enjoyable poem that you have your reader interactive with as we read and breath...
I liked the way you showed and not told with the briefcase.
Clever girl :)
kind regards
tracey
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Comment Written 04-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Yeah, the blonde is clever every now and again - LOL!! :) ;) ;) Seriously, thank you so much for the review, Tracey and for the smile ... that, in itself, is worth the post!! :) ;) Take care and have a great week! :) Yvette
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Comment from Miss Sherry
You got me to relax...now what am I going to do with this perfectly good sack of anxiety? I never relax, but you certainly have written a great verse for trying to do so, Your artwork is so tranquil that it almost put me to sleep. This is lovely. Very fine Nonet!
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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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You got me to relax...now what am I going to do with this perfectly good sack of anxiety? I never relax, but you certainly have written a great verse for trying to do so, Your artwork is so tranquil that it almost put me to sleep. This is lovely. Very fine Nonet!
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Comment Written 04-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Thanx so much for your review, Sherry and for the smile that was much needed this evening -- you have a wonderful evening yourself, beautiful lady!! ;) ;) Yvette
