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A Novel

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Comment from damommy
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I really enjoyed seeing Charles' cottage. It sounds just like one I've always dreamed of having. And living so close to the wood is a bonus. However, he was a little spooked when he returned home. I wonder what Kayla has to tell him. I hope he stays home and gets away from all the intrigue.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2019


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
    Thanks, Yvonne. I did actually have an C18 cottage in the Cotswolds for a few years. Happy memories. It's been fun adding some of the features to this one that I'd have liked, if I could have afforded them! LOL
Comment from TheStoryMan
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What an interesting story about Charles' home. I certainly hope whatever Kayla is contacting him about isn't too serious. I really like this mystery.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2019


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
    Thanks, Storyman. I appreciate the review. Glad you are still enjoying the story. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from SLMorrical
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Very well done. I like that you put the last paragraph of the last chapter. That helps when reading this chapter. I believe I may start doing that. I think listening to the story may have his mind playing tricks on him and having him a little scared. This is very good. It flows well. Was an easy read to follow.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2019


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
    Thanks very much for dropping by to review this, Sandra. Much appreciated. I think some kind of connection is needed between one part and the next. It's a long-drawn-out process, posting a book small chunks at a time and it doesn't take people long to lose the thread.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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You did a good job, Tony, with this chapter. I like the detailed description of the setting. Some of the UK words I did not understand, but that did not keep me from moving forward. I like the way you described the threat of a storm.

In this line:
He slid his glass across to mine host, who had just returned with my supper.

(I know what you mean, but the sentence seems to be missing words. OR should the 'mine' be 'my)?

Thanks for sharing. Jan


 Comment Written 04-Feb-2019


reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
    Thanks, Jan. I can understand that there are a few English idioms here that might be confusing. 'Mine host' is a humorous expression for the landlord or landlady of a pub.
reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 04-Feb-2019
    Thank you. I didn't think about that as being one of those words that I mentioned. Jan
Comment from robyn corum
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Tony,

A great chapter. You summed up the scary nature of these scenes really well. You could write a whole piece just in one of these locations, I think. It was perfect! Thanks!


 Comment Written 04-Feb-2019


reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
    Thanks, Robyn. I lived in that part of the world for quite a few years, and know it well. Perhaps, when this book is finished, I may set a sequel there.
Comment from royowen
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I rather enjoyed this episode Tony, it was an escape from the normal plot, and an enjoyable chiming of the legendary bells of moonraker cottage, having been in a few pubs in the West Country I imagined the locals regaling me with tales of smugglers past. Then just to break the reverie, an anxious Kayla is calling, well done, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2019


reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
    Thanks, Roy. Nothing quite like an English pub, is there?
reply by royowen on 04-Feb-2019
    I remember them well, sigh
Comment from Rob Caudle
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Tony, You can certainly pin a tale yourself the setting and you descriptions had me searching for a warm pair of woolen socks. The way you can weave information through your entertaining prose is so wonderfully done as fine a write as one can have here or in the real word of literature for that matter.
Rob

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2019


reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
    Kind words, Rob. I appreciate the extra star. Glad you're still enjoying it. Al the best, Tony
Comment from Mustang Patty
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Hi, Tony,

This chapter was lovely. I could see Charles as we surveyed his castle and the walk through the woods to his favorite watering hole. I loved the old man's story. It isn't always easy to 'write' an oral tale, but you did a great job.

Looking forward to seeing what Kayla has to say,

~patty~

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 Comment Written 04-Feb-2019


reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
    Thanks, Patty. Glad that the storytelling worked for you. It went through several re-writes!
Comment from Cybertron1986
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This established quite a sophisticated voice, but it did provide an eloquent and refined manner to which treated the reader with a unique story. I'm just reading this work for the first time, and my initial picture was of an ancient time. However, the use of the iPad at the end through me off. Upon reading it over, it does make sense. I must review past chapters to gain a complete understanding of this work. Overall, it is a quality piece.

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 Comment Written 04-Feb-2019


reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
    Thanks for dropping by Cybertron. I appreciate your interest in my story. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Tootsie55
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Well done again., A great diversion from your tale thus far. Leaving us hanging again the art of a good writer, of course. No spags and looking forward to where this is going. Loved the description of the old cottage and so on.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2019


reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
    Kind words, Tootsie. I appreciate the extra star. Glad you're still enjoying it. Al the best, Tony