Alamuir
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Alamuir (working title)"Historical Romance - Georgian era
4 total reviews
Comment from JudyE
You have raised a number of questions here and answered some of them, which is good, as it keeps the reader curious. Catherine talks of escaping her husband early in the story but seems to wish for his company later. We learn why, from his point of view, in the next chapter. I don't have any suggestions. Thanks for an interesting read.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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You have raised a number of questions here and answered some of them, which is good, as it keeps the reader curious. Catherine talks of escaping her husband early in the story but seems to wish for his company later. We learn why, from his point of view, in the next chapter. I don't have any suggestions. Thanks for an interesting read.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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Thank you Judy! (for both reviews.) I'm uploading the 3rd scene today, if you're interested.
Comment from Sally Law
I am catching up with you today. The first installment to your novel is a fine one. The characters are rich with descriptions and I can imagine them in their setting. That is important for me as a reader and a writer. The only thing missing here is artwork. I would always post with some sort of art, at least until you get your final book cover selected. Art fuels the imagination. FanArt is wonderful and I also use my own photo archives; vintage photos from my family's ancestry. I am in the process of getting them scanned into ICloud. I look forward to the next chapter.
All my best,
Sal :-)
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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I am catching up with you today. The first installment to your novel is a fine one. The characters are rich with descriptions and I can imagine them in their setting. That is important for me as a reader and a writer. The only thing missing here is artwork. I would always post with some sort of art, at least until you get your final book cover selected. Art fuels the imagination. FanArt is wonderful and I also use my own photo archives; vintage photos from my family's ancestry. I am in the process of getting them scanned into ICloud. I look forward to the next chapter.
All my best,
Sal :-)
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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That's a good idea! I've used it with some poems, but I didn't think to add it to a chapter. I'll look around and see what I can find. This site is very visual, so it couldn't hurt. Thanks for the kind review (again :-))
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Even a flower or a black and white would be nice. I?m sure you?ll come up with so,etching good. Let me know when you have it, I want to check it out. Sal ,+)
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
it may be an idea to incorporate some line breaks into your work. leaving clear lines between paragraphs and for dialogue can make for a cleaner write which is more easily followed on screen. Also, many folks simply skip over blocks of unbroken text.
Nice introduction to place and character to start this off, giving a sense of the relationships between the mother & father.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Hi there,
it may be an idea to incorporate some line breaks into your work. leaving clear lines between paragraphs and for dialogue can make for a cleaner write which is more easily followed on screen. Also, many folks simply skip over blocks of unbroken text.
Nice introduction to place and character to start this off, giving a sense of the relationships between the mother & father.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Thank you, and I absolutely agree. When I uploaded I lost all the spacing and paragraphs. Not sure how to avoid that problem.
Thank you for the review.
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Usually if you use advanced editor it does it... but sometimes not and then you have to do it manually which is a pain but worth it.
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Thanks for the tip! I'll try that on the next chapter.
Comment from prettybluebirds
This looks to be the most interesting and entertaining read. A larger type or another space between dialogues would make it easier to read. Especially for us senior citizens. LOl. It is an enchanting story and I will watch for more.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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This looks to be the most interesting and entertaining read. A larger type or another space between dialogues would make it easier to read. Especially for us senior citizens. LOl. It is an enchanting story and I will watch for more.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the nice review. I apologize for the formatting. When I uploaded I lost the spacing and paragraphs. I'll have to look for help on that one.
