This Time - That Time 3
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Veronica Tries To Get Help"Third book in the time travel trilogy
36 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This was an intense chapter, Sandra. It held my attention from start to finish. You did a great job detailing the search for the door, the way the patients acted, the setting, and the overall storyline. I felt as if I was right there in the basement with the people. Good job and thanks for sharing. Great cliff-hanger, too. Jan
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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This was an intense chapter, Sandra. It held my attention from start to finish. You did a great job detailing the search for the door, the way the patients acted, the setting, and the overall storyline. I felt as if I was right there in the basement with the people. Good job and thanks for sharing. Great cliff-hanger, too. Jan
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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I'm so pleased you are still enjoying my story, Jan. Thank you so much. I really appreciate all your support, my friend. Big hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from wordsfromsue
Darn, Sandra. I could hear the flames, as I read this chapter... I felt the panic and desperation pouring out of Veronica and Mildred. You can really flipping write, young lady! Not that that was a surprise, don't take it the wrong way!!
But seriously, I felt their dread and terror.
Great job, Sandra!!!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Darn, Sandra. I could hear the flames, as I read this chapter... I felt the panic and desperation pouring out of Veronica and Mildred. You can really flipping write, young lady! Not that that was a surprise, don't take it the wrong way!!
But seriously, I felt their dread and terror.
Great job, Sandra!!!
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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I hope you didn't get too near the screen, it would have been so hot! lol. Thank you so much, my friend, for the lovely six stars and the lovely review. I never take compliments the wrong way, lol. I have to admit, the help I receive is amazing. People are so kind. Thanks again, my friend. Big hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from JDRBAR
I couldn't help, but I suddenly let out a sarcastic snort.
Great chapter my friend. Missing word in above sentence. Can't wait to see how Veronica manages to get help.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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I couldn't help, but I suddenly let out a sarcastic snort.
Great chapter my friend. Missing word in above sentence. Can't wait to see how Veronica manages to get help.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Thanks for spotting that, Diane, I've read it through and listened to it on 'Read Aloud' and never caught that. So weird! Thank you for reading and reviewing my friend, and thank you so much for the golden stars, my friend. . :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Rhonda Skinner
Another great chapter, I loved the bit about becoming smoked kippers. Wasn't sure about the word "frustratedly" in frustration maybe? That was the only thing that stood out. Looking forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Another great chapter, I loved the bit about becoming smoked kippers. Wasn't sure about the word "frustratedly" in frustration maybe? That was the only thing that stood out. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Rhonda, for another of your lovely reviews. You weren't the only one to mention 'frustratedly' so I've changed it now. That's the wonderful thing about FS, I get so much help for you all. Thanks, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from royowen
It seems that, like other previous episodes, there is little hope for rescuing the hospital populace, Veronica has used her powers to try and discover a way out for th people in distress. This is non stop excitement isn't it Sandra? A wonderful platform, you've certainly learnt how to shape episode endings my friend, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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It seems that, like other previous episodes, there is little hope for rescuing the hospital populace, Veronica has used her powers to try and discover a way out for th people in distress. This is non stop excitement isn't it Sandra? A wonderful platform, you've certainly learnt how to shape episode endings my friend, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
Thank you so much, Roy, I'm glad you enjoyed this part. The next part is the one to watch for! Thank you for another lovely review, my friend. Big hugs. Sandra xxxx
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Most welcome Sandra
Comment from Rob Caudle
LOVED THIS!!!! Every word every turn of phrase. I LOVE mildred. You create and hold the tension though otu this piece so well done in all phases. Loved this bit.
"You're right. The porter must've missed it and we's gotta find it!" she hollered over her shoulder. "Them powers-that-flaming-be wouldn't have gone t' all this trouble t' get us t' evacuate the hospital, only t' turn us all into smoked kippers!"
JUst so well done.
Rob
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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LOVED THIS!!!! Every word every turn of phrase. I LOVE mildred. You create and hold the tension though otu this piece so well done in all phases. Loved this bit.
"You're right. The porter must've missed it and we's gotta find it!" she hollered over her shoulder. "Them powers-that-flaming-be wouldn't have gone t' all this trouble t' get us t' evacuate the hospital, only t' turn us all into smoked kippers!"
JUst so well done.
Rob
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Aww, Thank you so very much for this fabulous review and the 6 star award, Rob, that is so nice of you! Mildred does have a way with her, doesn't she! LOL. Your review put a grin on my face stretching from ear to ear! LOL Thank you! Big hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from damommy
It seems like the end, but it can't be. Between the two of them, Veronica and Mildred will find a way. Such tension. Good chapter as always. Can't wait to see what happens next.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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It seems like the end, but it can't be. Between the two of them, Veronica and Mildred will find a way. Such tension. Good chapter as always. Can't wait to see what happens next.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much, Yvonne, for you lovely review. I'm glad you enjoyed this part. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
It was such sad news about dear Micky, wasn't it. I felt sick to my stomach when I read that he'd died. Does anyone know what caused it? I can't get him out of my mind.
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I can't either. No one has said, but I'm thinking a stroke. It will seem strange without him on FS.
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That was my thoughts. Bless him. I'm sure he'll be right at home with the angels. I just feel as if something nice has disappeared from the site and left an empty hole.
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I do, too.
Comment from giraffmang
Nice addition to the piece. You'd think Veronica would know better by now...
never finished the passageway to the underground - contract the to here.
and then as one person, they all turned and surged towards us, - perhaps insert a comma after then.
I felt a rush if optimism spur me on. - of rather than if here.
"It's no good, Miss Veronica. There's nobody there to hear us."- contract the 'to' here as well.
Now What? Think Veronica, think! don't think you need the capitalisation of what here.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Nice addition to the piece. You'd think Veronica would know better by now...
never finished the passageway to the underground - contract the to here.
and then as one person, they all turned and surged towards us, - perhaps insert a comma after then.
I felt a rush if optimism spur me on. - of rather than if here.
"It's no good, Miss Veronica. There's nobody there to hear us."- contract the 'to' here as well.
Now What? Think Veronica, think! don't think you need the capitalisation of what here.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Oh, dear, Gareth, where would I be without your eagle eye? Thank you so much, my friend, for this very helpful review. I can't thank you enough. I went and made the corrections before writing my thanks. Big hugs, dear friend. :) Sandra. xxx
Comment from TheStoryMan
The powers that be need to give them some help! Like maybe make someone else able to hear and see Veronica so they can unlock that door to save the patients and Mildred. This is a wonderful story.
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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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The powers that be need to give them some help! Like maybe make someone else able to hear and see Veronica so they can unlock that door to save the patients and Mildred. This is a wonderful story.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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They surely do. Veronica is getting quite angry with them. thank you so very much for this fabulous review, my friend, I really appreciate you and your comments.Big hugs. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Ulla
Wow, Sandra this is frightening and I just can't see how they're going to get out of this mad situation. I really can't!
"Them powers-that-flaming-be wouldn't have gone t' all this trouble t' get us t' evacuate the hospital, only t' turn us all into smoked kippers!"= I laughed out loud when I read this. It's a gem!
Can't wait to see how they're getting out of this serious situation. It's wonderful writing. A big hug. Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Wow, Sandra this is frightening and I just can't see how they're going to get out of this mad situation. I really can't!
"Them powers-that-flaming-be wouldn't have gone t' all this trouble t' get us t' evacuate the hospital, only t' turn us all into smoked kippers!"= I laughed out loud when I read this. It's a gem!
Can't wait to see how they're getting out of this serious situation. It's wonderful writing. A big hug. Ulla xxx
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for all those lovely 6 stars, Ulla. I'm so pleased you liked this part. It's getting to a point where both Mildred and Veronica are getting worried. Big hugs to you too, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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Well, no wonder. I'm worried as well.xxx
