Sins of Chaos
Viewing comments for Chapter 41 "Bloodshed "A Novel of the Breedline series
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Comment from CEO2020
CONGRATULATIONS!
I'm extremely happy 4 you! Your hard work has paid off. Excellent piece of artistry posted. I see Tessa Fairchild as a reflection of you.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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CONGRATULATIONS!
I'm extremely happy 4 you! Your hard work has paid off. Excellent piece of artistry posted. I see Tessa Fairchild as a reflection of you.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Wow! Thanks you! :)
This is so kind of you to say. You made my whole Sunday my friend! And you are right about Tessa. You're the first person to say this. I did create her character with a little of me.
How is your stories going? I would love to hear how everything is going for you. I'm still enjoying my Breedline adventures. I'm working on the fifth novel now. It definitely gives me purpose in life. Maybe some day this hobby will actually be my full time career. A girl can dream right?
Great hearing from you! And thanks again.
Sincerely,
Shana :)
Comment from ngage
Fantastic artwork, Ms. Shana! Goes well with your chapter, which is so far my favorite.
You blew me away with the exceptional scene descriptions, especially the shifting. You did very well with this. Your imagination is out of this world my friend.
Now that the Breedline have met more than there match, I'm curious to know how they are going to win this battle.
Great writing, Ms. Shana!
Nate
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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Fantastic artwork, Ms. Shana! Goes well with your chapter, which is so far my favorite.
You blew me away with the exceptional scene descriptions, especially the shifting. You did very well with this. Your imagination is out of this world my friend.
Now that the Breedline have met more than there match, I'm curious to know how they are going to win this battle.
Great writing, Ms. Shana!
Nate
Comment Written 04-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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Thank you my dear friend :)
So happy you liked the action. It wasn't easy to write each character as they shifted into their supernatural being. It definitely took a lot of thought. I really enjoyed creating this scene. I wrote just what my mind saw. It is such a reward to entertain readers.
Big hugs,
Shana :)
Comment from Jaye Bennett
This does make a good read. A lot of action. One place the guy shouted "Seize fire." That should have been "Cease fire." This is strictly opinion, but I almost gave you a four star, because I think you have too many characters of too many species to keep up with. I didn't count off, because I am not into this type fiction, and I didn't think it would be fair. However, I found this as hard to keep up with as an old Russian novel, like The Brothers Karamazov. I will say you have action.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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This does make a good read. A lot of action. One place the guy shouted "Seize fire." That should have been "Cease fire." This is strictly opinion, but I almost gave you a four star, because I think you have too many characters of too many species to keep up with. I didn't count off, because I am not into this type fiction, and I didn't think it would be fair. However, I found this as hard to keep up with as an old Russian novel, like The Brothers Karamazov. I will say you have action.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Jaye :)
Glad you liked the action. I do love to create it for my Breedline characters. And yes, I do have many characters. They tend to build up after four series. Also, thanks for the helpful tip. Hope to hear from you again!
Sincerely,
Shana :)
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I'm hoping I am able to keep up, as, like I said, it does have a lot of action. It's hard to catch errors that are words spellcheck won't catch. I have the same problem.
Comment from royowen
What a fantastic episode Shana, this one thing you do so well, transforming creatures who have unique abilities when they "turn". But it seems that the "fury" who seem collectively indestructible, are more than a match for the whole breedline, even Jace's "Beast". I knew Appollyon was another name for the devil, in scripture. In the end of the episode we see Jem sending a silent prayer to God, knowing He's the only one who can truly defeat this unholy trio. Well done Shana, this is brilliant, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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What a fantastic episode Shana, this one thing you do so well, transforming creatures who have unique abilities when they "turn". But it seems that the "fury" who seem collectively indestructible, are more than a match for the whole breedline, even Jace's "Beast". I knew Appollyon was another name for the devil, in scripture. In the end of the episode we see Jem sending a silent prayer to God, knowing He's the only one who can truly defeat this unholy trio. Well done Shana, this is brilliant, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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Thank you my dear friend :)
Glad you enjoyed the action and all the character transformations. I loved creating them. It was difficult to describe each one. It definitely took some thought. I imagined what I saw in my mind and did my best to describe in words the best I could. There was a lot of shifting in this chapter. I remember at the end when I finished writing this scene, I felt exhausted. Haha!
I'm glad you knew about the name Apollyon. But of course, he was created by a scientist so in this book, the devil has no power over my character. The next chapter to come was inspired by you. Hopefully you will enjoy it. Stay tuned ... it's getting close to the end. I think you will like the way it leads.
Always your fan,
Shana :)
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I'm impressed Shana
Comment from fm wright
A truly exciting chapter! The fight details were spectacular! Each battle engaging! Not only was each thrilling and suspenseful, but the ending gave rise to the possibilities that might lay ahead! Waiting on pens and needles for the next chapter!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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A truly exciting chapter! The fight details were spectacular! Each battle engaging! Not only was each thrilling and suspenseful, but the ending gave rise to the possibilities that might lay ahead! Waiting on pens and needles for the next chapter!
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much! :)
So glad you approved of this chapter. I was worried it might be confusing or way too much going on for everyone. But it seems I was worried over nothing. My main goal is to please and entertain the readers. I think you will be so surprised at the next chapter. You will meet some new characters. They will be in my next book I'm currently working on now called The Immortal. This fifth book is my favorite. I can't wait to share with everyone soon.
Always grateful for your support!
Hugs,
Shana :)
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I know I can't wait to read it!
Comment from apky
First off, Happy Birthday to Nathan, and my fondest regards to him.
Having said that, you delivered another powerful chapter that could easily be termed War Of The Worlds. Fast and furious and merciless, making mere mortals like me bit our nails to the quick. I can't wait to read who survives this battle and who gets up and walks away whole!
Brilliant, brilliant, brilliant!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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First off, Happy Birthday to Nathan, and my fondest regards to him.
Having said that, you delivered another powerful chapter that could easily be termed War Of The Worlds. Fast and furious and merciless, making mere mortals like me bit our nails to the quick. I can't wait to read who survives this battle and who gets up and walks away whole!
Brilliant, brilliant, brilliant!
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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Thank you dear friend :)
Thanks for mentioning my son's birthday! I can't believe he's 30! I got to meet his new girlfriend. She is very sweet and they make a great couple. I'm excited about that.
I just want you to know that you are such a joy to me here. Your support and helpful tips have definitely helped my writing. I hope to always grow as a writer. I have always believed the story can always be better. You help me do that.
Stay tuned ... their is some new characters on the way. Hopefully for the Breedline's sake, they will be on their side.
Always your fan,
Shana :)
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I look forward to the new characters.
I know, the children grow up so fast. Whenever I look at my son, I silently ask him, Where on earth are you hurrying to, my baby? Stay with Mum a while, won't you?
At the same time I'm glas to have had those sleepless nights, hidden the tooth under the pillow with the tooth fairy's special gift, etc, etc.
