Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This naani, Modern Echoes, uses four lines and twenty-two syllables to note the change in modern commerce and the eventual death of the mall concept.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019

Thanks for reading and reviewing zanya

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Good image and presentation.
-The syllable count is good.
-Effective use of one continuous thought.
-You give the setting in line one,
and describe the impact well
in like two with "eerie and echoe."
-I also like "slink away."
-Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019

Thanks for such an encouraging review zanya

reply by Pam (respa) on 04-Feb-2019

You are very welcome, zanya.

Comment from donette1914

Excellent

very good about a balancing act with life
you write to draws ones in and it shows
the words go so smoothly as you read this well-penned
work that you had made
it was a pleasure
I hope for the best in the contest
donette1914 Feb 2 2018

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019

Thanks for an encouraging review zanya