Hazy Faces
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Comment from Lulube
I got the feeling of an opium den. lol Quite the extraordinary concept for this poem. Love the presentation of it. Serves the short word choices to stand out.
enjoyed it, even though not too sure where to go with it. lol
lulube
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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I got the feeling of an opium den. lol Quite the extraordinary concept for this poem. Love the presentation of it. Serves the short word choices to stand out.
enjoyed it, even though not too sure where to go with it. lol
lulube
Comment Written 01-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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I can actually understand the opium den emote. I am very grateful you read this. Thank you.
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welcome
lulube
Comment from CathyM
I almost feel as if this is a reflection of what this person enjoyed in life and now they have become hazy memories. So that is what I took off of this and would love to know how close I was or if I was totally off track. I had someone tell me once that a poem means to me what I take off it. :) Thanks for posting this.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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I almost feel as if this is a reflection of what this person enjoyed in life and now they have become hazy memories. So that is what I took off of this and would love to know how close I was or if I was totally off track. I had someone tell me once that a poem means to me what I take off it. :) Thanks for posting this.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Well, that someone is completely correct. Smile. Thank you.
Comment from jmshumate
There is a nice flow to this. It reads like a beat poem to me. It paints a picture to me of somebody talking about living life to the fullest, but maybe just sitting back sipping whiskey, thinking of the years behind. Good job on this, and thank you for sharing this.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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There is a nice flow to this. It reads like a beat poem to me. It paints a picture to me of somebody talking about living life to the fullest, but maybe just sitting back sipping whiskey, thinking of the years behind. Good job on this, and thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Thank you for reading it.
Comment from kiwijenny
I love the way it trips and rolls off the tongue...smooth like jazz.
Late night
Self and sass....yes . It goes deep too.Oh yes
Time just dies....when someone dies they fade...we lose their image in our mind..the sound of their voice cracks..
Loved the poem
God bless
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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I love the way it trips and rolls off the tongue...smooth like jazz.
Late night
Self and sass....yes . It goes deep too.Oh yes
Time just dies....when someone dies they fade...we lose their image in our mind..the sound of their voice cracks..
Loved the poem
God bless
Comment Written 01-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Thank you, dear.
Comment from dragonpoet
This is an emotional poem about remembering yesterday and how hazy some memories get as time goes by. This person seems to be living too much in the past.
The short stanza enhance the feeling of the poem.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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This is an emotional poem about remembering yesterday and how hazy some memories get as time goes by. This person seems to be living too much in the past.
The short stanza enhance the feeling of the poem.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 01-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Joan.
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You're welcome.
Joan
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem inspired by the creative Muse. When we are completely relaxed it seems the muse get free reign and bring his best to the front.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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A very well-written poem inspired by the creative Muse. When we are completely relaxed it seems the muse get free reign and bring his best to the front.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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I think that's true. Thank you.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi,
This is the second poem I've read that is in some way connected to the Master of Horror - Dean Kuch.
Your lines flow well - it seems to have just flowed from your imagination. I love jazz. I enjoy it the most - live - in the murky, dark corner of an obscure jazz club. Surprisingly, within the realm of my eclectic, I have very little jazz music. I may need to remedy that.
Thank you for sharing,
~Mustang Patty~
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Hi,
This is the second poem I've read that is in some way connected to the Master of Horror - Dean Kuch.
Your lines flow well - it seems to have just flowed from your imagination. I love jazz. I enjoy it the most - live - in the murky, dark corner of an obscure jazz club. Surprisingly, within the realm of my eclectic, I have very little jazz music. I may need to remedy that.
Thank you for sharing,
~Mustang Patty~
Comment Written 01-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Please do remedy. I wrote this to-Herbie Hancock-"River." Lord, what music.
Comment from meeshu
isn't it fantastic when this happens, your muse takes you on a trip and you don't know or care if you ever get back. that's what this one feels like to me. great job, VictorTouche.......................meeshu
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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isn't it fantastic when this happens, your muse takes you on a trip and you don't know or care if you ever get back. that's what this one feels like to me. great job, VictorTouche.......................meeshu
Comment Written 01-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Yes, I never thought of it that way. You're right. LOL Thank you.
Comment from Stephanie Launiu
You wrote like a stream of consciousness, but I got a lot out of it. While I read your poem over and over, I could actually hear some of that soulful jazz coming out of it. Comfortable, smooth, and memorable. Good job.
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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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You wrote like a stream of consciousness, but I got a lot out of it. While I read your poem over and over, I could actually hear some of that soulful jazz coming out of it. Comfortable, smooth, and memorable. Good job.
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Comment Written 01-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Well Victory you surely described the slipping of time into the big abyss here, where does the time go? I often wonder and when we remember it is just like it happened yesterday, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Well Victory you surely described the slipping of time into the big abyss here, where does the time go? I often wonder and when we remember it is just like it happened yesterday, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 01-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Dolly.
