Hazy Faces
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Comment from krys123
Cheers, Victor;
> The picture definitely supportive and relative to the context of you writing.
>Also the words correlates with the picture's metaphoric expression which seems to describe a faceless vagueness of an empty realm, "Sublime shadows / A nether world / In time".
>Thanks for a very entertaining piece of reading and take care and have a good one.
Alex
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Cheers, Victor;
> The picture definitely supportive and relative to the context of you writing.
>Also the words correlates with the picture's metaphoric expression which seems to describe a faceless vagueness of an empty realm, "Sublime shadows / A nether world / In time".
>Thanks for a very entertaining piece of reading and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Thank you for reading, Alex.
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There are very welcome, Victor.
alx
Comment from Lady Jane
Well constructed abstract piece here, Victor. I found this flowed smooth and expressed a definitive message...your words speak of missed opportunities and foiled realities...I wouldn't wanna live in yesterday's haze UNLESS it was a good day. Sadly, my ex husband passed away yesterday so my boys are struggling through that. But, your piece is very well presented with solid bones and creativity. That Dean is a gem, is he not? I utilize him often :)
Great job and image was solid, too!
Janelle
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Well constructed abstract piece here, Victor. I found this flowed smooth and expressed a definitive message...your words speak of missed opportunities and foiled realities...I wouldn't wanna live in yesterday's haze UNLESS it was a good day. Sadly, my ex husband passed away yesterday so my boys are struggling through that. But, your piece is very well presented with solid bones and creativity. That Dean is a gem, is he not? I utilize him often :)
Great job and image was solid, too!
Janelle
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Janelle. I am very sorry for your husband's passing.
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He was my ex husband, dear and you are most welcome ;-)
Me
Comment from Louise Michelle
This was great - I could really feel the laid back mood. 'Self and sass' love that!
Oops - I guess I spoke too soon. As I'm reading on, I see there is a lot more that you are exploring in this poem.
When we live, time dies. That's one way of looking at it. Reminds me of a line from a Broadway show tune. 'Life is what you do till the moment you die - that is how the time goes by' Don't know if there's a parallel between your line and that one, but I thought I'd toss it out. Best Wishes, Lou
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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This was great - I could really feel the laid back mood. 'Self and sass' love that!
Oops - I guess I spoke too soon. As I'm reading on, I see there is a lot more that you are exploring in this poem.
When we live, time dies. That's one way of looking at it. Reminds me of a line from a Broadway show tune. 'Life is what you do till the moment you die - that is how the time goes by' Don't know if there's a parallel between your line and that one, but I thought I'd toss it out. Best Wishes, Lou
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Lou. I think you have absorbed the poem correctly.
Comment from Ulla
And I liked it, Victor. I'm glad that a nod to dean's muse could inspire you that much. Wonderful poem and a very difficult one to write and get it right. You managed both. All best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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And I liked it, Victor. I'm glad that a nod to dean's muse could inspire you that much. Wonderful poem and a very difficult one to write and get it right. You managed both. All best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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That was very nice of you, dear. Thank you.
Comment from Artasylum
Hey victor... this is special in that I really felt your words... I'm picking up on a theme lately about time and am wondering what is going on with that... thanks diana
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Hey victor... this is special in that I really felt your words... I'm picking up on a theme lately about time and am wondering what is going on with that... thanks diana
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Diana.
Comment from Douglas Paul
This is an interesting muse. It feels pretty mystical. I like the concept that time just dies while we are not really paying any attention. It surely does do that
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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This is an interesting muse. It feels pretty mystical. I like the concept that time just dies while we are not really paying any attention. It surely does do that
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Smile. Thank you.
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your poem as a jazz performance. Your alliteration of "s's" in the opening stanza established the mood. I particularly admired the drama of "Faces come apart" and "Lies linger longer" plus your reflections about time. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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I enjoyed your poem as a jazz performance. Your alliteration of "s's" in the opening stanza established the mood. I particularly admired the drama of "Faces come apart" and "Lies linger longer" plus your reflections about time. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Joan.
Comment from Rickie1
Doug
I like the structure and the different length of the stanzas. Being different and mixing up keeps me interested. I imagine getting a beer buzz while listening to music alone late at night. Time moves slowly then and I can drift through it. Time doesn't die, just time for me dies. Well done.
Rickie
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Doug
I like the structure and the different length of the stanzas. Being different and mixing up keeps me interested. I imagine getting a beer buzz while listening to music alone late at night. Time moves slowly then and I can drift through it. Time doesn't die, just time for me dies. Well done.
Rickie
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Right. Time just dies at the moment, and only for the individual involved. Or so it seems. Thank you.
Comment from A. Willow Bends
Great choice of visual (cleo85-a genius and my go-to!) This is quite unique, extremely creative and classy. I notice you said "it emerged". I love it when that happens and I often want to take those and elaborate, but often they are the best of our creative side. I think this one is one that you were smart to let it be as is. The overall effect is quite nice. Great job and best of luck!
Wendy
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Great choice of visual (cleo85-a genius and my go-to!) This is quite unique, extremely creative and classy. I notice you said "it emerged". I love it when that happens and I often want to take those and elaborate, but often they are the best of our creative side. I think this one is one that you were smart to let it be as is. The overall effect is quite nice. Great job and best of luck!
Wendy
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Thank you Wendy. And don't bend too far, Willows sometimes break too when reading poetry with large dynamic range. (so to speak) lol
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O.K. Got it!
Wendy
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Faces come apart
Lies linger longer
On songs
Never quilled ...I love this this is stunning well done I adore your work kind regards Meia x
Oh yes,
Time...just dies
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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Faces come apart
Lies linger longer
On songs
Never quilled ...I love this this is stunning well done I adore your work kind regards Meia x
Oh yes,
Time...just dies
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
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I very much appreciate your support. Sometimes I think writers have the least self-confidence.
