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Comment from lyenochka
Enjoyed your reflection on our dependence on light. It's a beautiful thing and we really depend on all kinds of light in our everyday lives. And your Genesis reference of "Let there be light" also brings up the need for spiritual light as well as the light of knowledge.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019
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Enjoyed your reflection on our dependence on light. It's a beautiful thing and we really depend on all kinds of light in our everyday lives. And your Genesis reference of "Let there be light" also brings up the need for spiritual light as well as the light of knowledge.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and all your comments supporting this little poem. Glad you enjoyed your little tour through all the little lights that mean so much to us in our lives today, often overlooked. estory
Comment from Ulla
Wow, estory, I really liked this poem. It's a free style you're very adept at. It flows and have a wonderful pace to it. And I loved how you ended it with Christmas light. So true. We often take light for granted, but you're right it does give emphasize to our surroundings and mood. I use a lot of candle lights in the winter. I love the soft shine. Another great poem. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Wow, estory, I really liked this poem. It's a free style you're very adept at. It flows and have a wonderful pace to it. And I loved how you ended it with Christmas light. So true. We often take light for granted, but you're right it does give emphasize to our surroundings and mood. I use a lot of candle lights in the winter. I love the soft shine. Another great poem. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and all your comments supporting the poem, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I just thought it would be a great subject to have fun with and build some musical and philosophical elements, capturing the often overlooked moment of light in our lives estory
Comment from Miss Sherry
Very well done! That is a lot of light! You put a lot of thought into this. I tried to figure out a light you had missed and could only think of one. I will look forward to reading more of your work as I catch site of it!!
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Very well done! That is a lot of light! You put a lot of thought into this. I tried to figure out a light you had missed and could only think of one. I will look forward to reading more of your work as I catch site of it!!
Comment Written 03-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your encouraging comments supporting the poem; glad you enjoyed it and found it so satisfying, and I hope you continue to enjoy them in the future. More short stories and poems will be coming. estory
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Looking forward to more!
Comment from gramag4
What an excellent presentation... so nicely put together. And what a good reminder to all of us... that which we have in abundance we often notice the least. Thank you for sharing. Let there be light!
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
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What an excellent presentation... so nicely put together. And what a good reminder to all of us... that which we have in abundance we often notice the least. Thank you for sharing. Let there be light!
Comment Written 02-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
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Thanks for the excellent review and all your encouraging comments supporting this poem. glad you enjoyed it and found it so well put together, validating all the work that went into it estory
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is a very interesting poem that expresses the importance and usefulness of light. I like the way you've blended together beautifully all of the different kinds of light. You've done a superb job with your clever and colorful writing making this an interesting and enjoyable read. Great job and well done!
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
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This is a very interesting poem that expresses the importance and usefulness of light. I like the way you've blended together beautifully all of the different kinds of light. You've done a superb job with your clever and colorful writing making this an interesting and enjoyable read. Great job and well done!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
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Thanks for the excellent review and all your encouraging comments supporting this poem. Glad you enjoyed it and your little tour of all the little lights in the world that make life happen, and raise our spirits in the bargain sometimes. estory
Comment from CathyM
Lights are a very large part of our lives. Actually, electricity is. What would happen if they all disappeared? You wrote a very engaging poem. The only thing that to me threw it off just a little was the word itself. Light was repeated so many times I lost some of the nuances in other spots. Otherwise a very engaging poem. Thank you so much for sharing.
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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
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Lights are a very large part of our lives. Actually, electricity is. What would happen if they all disappeared? You wrote a very engaging poem. The only thing that to me threw it off just a little was the word itself. Light was repeated so many times I lost some of the nuances in other spots. Otherwise a very engaging poem. Thank you so much for sharing.
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Comment Written 01-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the good review and your comments and suggestions supporting the poem. This is kind of a minimalist poem using repetitions of words and patterns of words to create the music in the language instead of traditional meter and rhyme. I was heavily influenced by the poetry of Jack Anderson at one time and intrigued by his prose poetry pieces that created rhythmic and musical elements without rhyme or meter. The echoing effect of the repeating refrain of 'light' makes the poem estory
Comment from tfawcus
A bit of a lightbulb moment here. Lucent verse that reminds us what we would be missing if we were blind. Have you read Neruda's prose poems on the subject of fire and on words? Similar brainstorming with remarkable results.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
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A bit of a lightbulb moment here. Lucent verse that reminds us what we would be missing if we were blind. Have you read Neruda's prose poems on the subject of fire and on words? Similar brainstorming with remarkable results.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
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Thanks for the excellent review and your perspective on the poem. I'll have to check out that poem by Neruda; I'm not familiar with it. I love doing this little pieces on the big parts of our lives that get overlooked and taken for granted. estory
Comment from Christine C Autry
A whole lot of lights. But lights are everywhere. This is a very good. I think you did well and I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
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A whole lot of lights. But lights are everywhere. This is a very good. I think you did well and I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
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Thanks for the excellent review and your comments supporting this poem. I like doing these pieces on things in life that get overlooked or taken for granted, and showing just how much a part of our collective subconscious they are. estory
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You are Welcome.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Oh, yes! Let there be light--natural or artificial. Your well-written, inclusive, creative poem conveys the theme of light's importance by providing
many of the roles light plays.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
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Oh, yes! Let there be light--natural or artificial. Your well-written, inclusive, creative poem conveys the theme of light's importance by providing
many of the roles light plays.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your comments supporting this poem. I am glad you let the light shine on the subject LOL estory
Comment from Tootsie55
Well done. Was waiting for a scriptural inference hehe. Love the old Hymn
The whole world was lost in the darkness of sin...the Light of the world is Jesus. Planning on getting that on my Hymns web site. Do you like the old hymns?
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
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Well done. Was waiting for a scriptural inference hehe. Love the old Hymn
The whole world was lost in the darkness of sin...the Light of the world is Jesus. Planning on getting that on my Hymns web site. Do you like the old hymns?
Comment Written 31-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and the comments supporting this poem. I am glad you enjoyed it. This poem has a small part about natural light in it, but mostly it was about man made light, and all those little lights that get taken for granted and are such a part of our collective consciousness. This is really about forging a new type of poetry that relies on repetitions of words and patterns to create music rather than meter or rhyme. estory
