Baker's Dozen
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Revelations"Ben Baker has to hunt down and kill twelve people
17 total reviews
Comment from Teresa Alford
And there you have it folk............ chalk another one up for Mr. Schott..........good read......filled with excitement and anticipation. Teresa............
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
  |
And there you have it folk............ chalk another one up for Mr. Schott..........good read......filled with excitement and anticipation. Teresa............
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
-
Thank you, TA
Comment from TheStoryMan
Poor Ben/Bobby/Richard (whatever name he wants to go by). To learn all of this like he has. I'm ready to go kick Connor's butt. There is no reason to brainwash people.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
|
Poor Ben/Bobby/Richard (whatever name he wants to go by). To learn all of this like he has. I'm ready to go kick Connor's butt. There is no reason to brainwash people.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
-
Can?t imagine not knowing who you are and having to take the word of a total stranger.
Comment from royowen
It turns out Baker is An Do's son, trained by his farther to be an assassin and a key weapon in Connor's army, born to be the part weapon in his army of killers, this is a bit of a shock, I wonder where to from here, well done Bill, and excelllent story, with good characters and twists and turns, good job, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
|
It turns out Baker is An Do's son, trained by his farther to be an assassin and a key weapon in Connor's army, born to be the part weapon in his army of killers, this is a bit of a shock, I wonder where to from here, well done Bill, and excelllent story, with good characters and twists and turns, good job, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
-
Thank you, Roy. Couple more twists yet.
-
Well done
Comment from Stephanie Launiu
Well written and the dialogue is good. Your writing has good detail and moves the story along at a good pace. The character list and summary at the beginning really helped me to understand the story plot. You write with a confident voice. Good luck with your book!
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
|
Well written and the dialogue is good. Your writing has good detail and moves the story along at a good pace. The character list and summary at the beginning really helped me to understand the story plot. You write with a confident voice. Good luck with your book!
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
-
Thanks, Stephanie
Comment from Earl Corp
I can see we are approaching the denouement now that Bobby knows the truth. Dogs are going to take this to a whole new level. I'm predicting that GI Joe doesn't make it. I can't wait to read the next installment.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
|
I can see we are approaching the denouement now that Bobby knows the truth. Dogs are going to take this to a whole new level. I'm predicting that GI Joe doesn't make it. I can't wait to read the next installment.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
-
Couple more twists to get us through.
Comment from Miranda Langston
this is an excellent chapter. it is certainly captivating and the storyline seems complex and yet easy to follow. that takes a fair amount of skill. great job :)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
|
this is an excellent chapter. it is certainly captivating and the storyline seems complex and yet easy to follow. that takes a fair amount of skill. great job :)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
-
Thanks, Miranda
Comment from lyenochka
Really? GI Joe and Clark Kent? You're too funny and I'm sure I'm not getting half the jokes. The conversation is natural and you know all the military jargon so it works. I wish there was more conversation than the telling that Joe was doing. Poor Baker!
""I here wolves! They're barking" (hear) Autocorrect got ya.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
|
Really? GI Joe and Clark Kent? You're too funny and I'm sure I'm not getting half the jokes. The conversation is natural and you know all the military jargon so it works. I wish there was more conversation than the telling that Joe was doing. Poor Baker!
""I here wolves! They're barking" (hear) Autocorrect got ya.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
-
That conversation would have just been one-sided. No need for dialogue there.
