Happily Ever After
No perfect union, so accept reality and flee from fantasies4 total reviews
Comment from sunnilicious
Sounds rough. Compatiblity has so much to do with having a good relationship. You are well thought out and clearly written. Your words seem harsh, but it's how you feel. I hope good things for you like finding happiness in your everyday. God bless you.
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Sounds rough. Compatiblity has so much to do with having a good relationship. You are well thought out and clearly written. Your words seem harsh, but it's how you feel. I hope good things for you like finding happiness in your everyday. God bless you.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2019
Comment from tbacha58
Wow, very deep, very sad, unusual negativeness, as the human being learns during the years that life is made to have ups and downs, and we always have to fight to find solutions to stay positive, and enjoy whatever is given to us in the now. But i know, sometimes we need to get things just out, to feel better. Terry
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2019
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Wow, very deep, very sad, unusual negativeness, as the human being learns during the years that life is made to have ups and downs, and we always have to fight to find solutions to stay positive, and enjoy whatever is given to us in the now. But i know, sometimes we need to get things just out, to feel better. Terry
Comment Written 11-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2019
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Thank you I appreciate
Comment from kiwisteveh
This is a rather sad little poem of love and marriage gone wrong. Statistics tell us that most marriages these days don't last and your poem touches on this idea that the dream of happy ever after is false more often than not.
There are some nice touches here:
bed of roses and of nails
Kills dreams when happily ever after fails.
...but also some awkward lines that need editing:
Then the wishes to forever is to no avail
Becalm --> Becalmed
In general I don;t think the monorhyming helped. This seldom works except in humorous pieces.
Steve
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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This is a rather sad little poem of love and marriage gone wrong. Statistics tell us that most marriages these days don't last and your poem touches on this idea that the dream of happy ever after is false more often than not.
There are some nice touches here:
bed of roses and of nails
Kills dreams when happily ever after fails.
...but also some awkward lines that need editing:
Then the wishes to forever is to no avail
Becalm --> Becalmed
In general I don;t think the monorhyming helped. This seldom works except in humorous pieces.
Steve
Comment Written 29-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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Thank You
Comment from Sugarray77
This is a poignant poem that you have written. It seems this relationship is vivid and chaotic... going from tranquility to irrational encounters. Good write.
Melissa
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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This is a poignant poem that you have written. It seems this relationship is vivid and chaotic... going from tranquility to irrational encounters. Good write.
Melissa
Comment Written 29-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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Thank you I appreciate
