Jock took Jill
I took out the A for this Lipogram17 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
HAHAHAHA.
I'm not sure if I feel more empathy for Jock or Jill. They've both kind of struck out here. But it's very clever, and I did enjoy reading it. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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HAHAHAHA.
I'm not sure if I feel more empathy for Jock or Jill. They've both kind of struck out here. But it's very clever, and I did enjoy reading it. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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Thank you, sorry for late reply, it is good to be back
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Welcome home!! I'll look forward to more wonderful offerings!
Comment from Joan E.
You met the challenge well by taking the vowel "a" out of the story. I enjoyed your rhymes and your retaining the broken "crown". Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
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You met the challenge well by taking the vowel "a" out of the story. I enjoyed your rhymes and your retaining the broken "crown". Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 31-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
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Thank you very much, it was fun writing this one****kahpot
Comment from LisaMay
From the heading I was expecting a scene of debauchery!
How brave of you to try your first lipogram without using "a", one of the English language's most commonly used letters. You have done this so well to keep the gist of the story and add a slightly kinky new twist (or is that just me? he he.)
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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From the heading I was expecting a scene of debauchery!
How brave of you to try your first lipogram without using "a", one of the English language's most commonly used letters. You have done this so well to keep the gist of the story and add a slightly kinky new twist (or is that just me? he he.)
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much, like jock at his first attempt I fell short of (nerve) he he, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from Cybertron1986
LOL this reminded me of a few acquaintances I knew when I was twenty years younger. Nice twist on an old tale that was transformed into a more twistedly appealing state! The use of "Jock" was in tune with what I recall. HAHAHAHA
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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LOL this reminded me of a few acquaintances I knew when I was twenty years younger. Nice twist on an old tale that was transformed into a more twistedly appealing state! The use of "Jock" was in tune with what I recall. HAHAHAHA
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much, I am not sure if I was a Jock or tried to be, if so I fell very short, many thanks for this wonderful review and stars****kahpot
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written lipogram about Jock and Jill and the story where they go up the hill and he seems to break his crown and they both come tumbling down the hill,.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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A very well-written lipogram about Jock and Jill and the story where they go up the hill and he seems to break his crown and they both come tumbling down the hill,.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much, my Freind, it was fun trying this form****kahpot
Comment from LIJ Red
I don't see a lot of As Qs Xs and Zs, but I assume A is the no-show star...then there is the witchy woman with defective soul, and the inquisitor whose exorcism seems to have blown up in his face...deep poem indeed....
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
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I don't see a lot of As Qs Xs and Zs, but I assume A is the no-show star...then there is the witchy woman with defective soul, and the inquisitor whose exorcism seems to have blown up in his face...deep poem indeed....
Comment Written 29-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much, I did change the intro, as your comments make a lot of good sense, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from His Grayness
Well, thanks indeed for a fine introduction to this lipogram style of writing so totally uncommon to me. I therefore really cannot judge the perfection of this work but only say thanks for the introduction and appreciation for the delight ! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
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Well, thanks indeed for a fine introduction to this lipogram style of writing so totally uncommon to me. I therefore really cannot judge the perfection of this work but only say thanks for the introduction and appreciation for the delight ! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment Written 29-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much, this was my first attempt, it was fun to try****kahpot
Comment from Mastery
Hello, my friend. The way I always heard it was "Jack and Jill went up the hill
Each with a buck and a quarter
Jill came down with two and a half
They didn't go up for water"
I enjoyed your version better though, Kahpot. Blessings, Bob
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
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Hello, my friend. The way I always heard it was "Jack and Jill went up the hill
Each with a buck and a quarter
Jill came down with two and a half
They didn't go up for water"
I enjoyed your version better though, Kahpot. Blessings, Bob
Comment Written 29-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
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Thank you, my friend, your version is very good as your Jack and my Jock were ver chasing water****kahpot
Comment from patcelaw
Kahpot, you have done quite well with the lipogram contest entry. I find it a rather hard thing to write something of any length without using a given letter.
Good luck in the contest. Patricia
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
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Kahpot, you have done quite well with the lipogram contest entry. I find it a rather hard thing to write something of any length without using a given letter.
Good luck in the contest. Patricia
Comment Written 29-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much, it was fun to try****kahpot
Comment from Gloria ....
Well K, this is a fantastic Lipogram and you've picked one of the hardest letters to omit too in my opinion, but what a fantastic job you have done with poor old jock. lol
Wishing you much luck in the booth. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
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Well K, this is a fantastic Lipogram and you've picked one of the hardest letters to omit too in my opinion, but what a fantastic job you have done with poor old jock. lol
Wishing you much luck in the booth. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 29-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
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Wow! thank you very much, I think poor old Jock was spent after the big climb, many thanks for this wonderful review and stars****kahpot
