Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

These people all seem like killing machines that don't even know who they really are. It is if they are all under some kind of hyponotic spell that causes them to kill from some kind of preprogramed suggestion rather than any concious thought of their own. Is that even possible?

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023

Hypnotic suggestion is real, but it is typically limited to the individual's morality. A person won't kill someone by suggestion unless he or she had no qualms doing so. This story imagines that such posthypnotic suggestions can be drilled into the subconscious mind and invoked by key words that would not normally be spoken. .

Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill

Excellent

I think I am keeping track of this. It never made sense to me that he was a pencil pusher morphed into an attack dog. This is so involving, I want more.
Good writing, Karen

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2023

Thank you, Karen.

reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 08-Nov-2023

U R Welcome.

Comment from JSD

Excellent

Love the playing with languages and the interaction between characters is so compelling and authentic. And we have psychological mind games too. All very exciting. Well done!

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2023

Thank you, John, for the great review. Bill

Comment from jim vecchio

Excellent

Tôi rất thích những chÆ°Æ¡ng này! Bạn là má»?t nhà vÄ?n xuất sắc! Tôi thấy kinh nghiá»?m của bạn trong Thủy quân lục chiến chắc chắn sẽ có ích. Hy vá»?ng bạn tiếp tục vì tôi nóng lòng muá»?n xem Ä?iá»?u gì sẽ xảy ra tiếp theo!

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023

Your review is totally unintelligible.

reply by jim vecchio on 07-Nov-2023

I wanted you to know I enjoyed it, so I wrote it in Vietnamese.

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

My Goodness, this is full-on and you certainly know how to spring the unexpected on your reader. Your chapter cleverly painted the background to An Do as it was woven into Joseph's thoughts during the fight. An excellent story which deserves more but sadly only a virtual six here. Well done, Bill! Debbie

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023

Thank you, Debbie, for the great review. Bill

Comment from Lea Tonin1

Excellent

Holy smokes, batman, there was a lot of action in that one, he got a serious owie! Baker seems to have a hard head, but not so hard that he can't be dazed and confused. I see, no issues with grammar, esthetics, punctuation, or subject matter you got an action filled chapter here. That's a lot of fun definitely about the mayhem good job. Best of luck to you have a great night!

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023

Thank you, Lea, for the great review. Bill

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

Oh! I liked An Do! If only they could have thrown a spike in the helicopters rotors and killed Conner. I think I'm getting as ruthless as your men! This was sad, though. Good pretend fight, only to end with a horrid twist. Onward!! :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021

Thank you, Sandra, for keeping with the story.

Comment from brenda faye curtis

Exceptional

This is an amazing chapter, with a conclusion I did not see coming! At the beginning of the fight, I suspected An Do was not definitely trying to kill him, and suspected they were both putting on a show, and then the failsafe suddenly made sense.
I do hate that An Do died that way. I really liked his character, and I hope Joe has an appropriate revenge coming for Connor.

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019

I contemplated putting him in a vegetative state, but too much time would have elapse to be believed.

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Wow! I did not see much of what just happened coming. You really maintain surprises with this series. All in keeping with the type of story it is. Crosses and double, even triple crosses are the norm.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2019

Thanks, nomi.

Comment from Earl Corp

Excellent

I didn't see that coming, An Do killing himself. But i get it, Joseph had to survive to be there in the future. This is taking a lot of twists, but it's a cery good read. Can't wait for the next installment,

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019

Thanks, Earl. In revision I may save him.