Chasing of the Wind.
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Another Twist of Faith."Conflict between the Human Needs and the Divinity
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Comment from Teresa Alford
Some very interesting happenings in this story It really captures the reader's attention and holds it. So I tell you, Well Done! Keep on writing. TA ":)
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2019
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Some very interesting happenings in this story It really captures the reader's attention and holds it. So I tell you, Well Done! Keep on writing. TA ":)
Comment Written 22-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2019
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Thank you Teresa. I appreciate your encouraging remarks. I am trying to finish this novel but stories keep emerging in my mind. I hope I do not make same mistake I did with my first published Novel, Wheel of Samsara-A Complete Circle." It just became too large as some readers suggested. I hope you will read this one from very beginning. It is available in my portfolio. All the best.
Arun
Comment from Patricia Bennett
I realize that I'm reading this chapter out of context. First the English needs some work. It feels like some words are left out and some sentences feel awkward. My question is how did this man get to the restaurant? In reading it felt as though he was one of the owners. Did any member of the family own the restaurant or were they there to eat? How did the doctor happen to come by looking for him? Did someone call him because of his father's health issue? It moves very slowly in the hospital scene. I would work on moving it along better-- perhaps with dialogue.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2019
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I realize that I'm reading this chapter out of context. First the English needs some work. It feels like some words are left out and some sentences feel awkward. My question is how did this man get to the restaurant? In reading it felt as though he was one of the owners. Did any member of the family own the restaurant or were they there to eat? How did the doctor happen to come by looking for him? Did someone call him because of his father's health issue? It moves very slowly in the hospital scene. I would work on moving it along better-- perhaps with dialogue.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2019
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All your assessments are wrong. This is not a short story. It is a chapter in my novel, " Chasing of the Wind." To understand all this you have to read all prior chapters related to this character. Read my note before telling me that you do not understand what is going on. As far as English goes, I learned in the British Education System and have more number of years under the belt than a person with English as Mother Tongue, I am not perfect but I have been a professional writer for a long time . It doesn't matter to me how many stars I get but I urge you to learn how to judge works of other styles of English writing. Thanks for your comments they will have no impact on me; this is how I write and I will keep writing in a style as I know. A dialogue is a true representation of way a person uses language. For example; the waiter in this story depicts my real life experience in a real restaurant where one word was used to find out how many to sit at the table. Rest of your questions are irrelevant to the story. When this novel will be published I will be merging many chapters in one to give a cohesive description of the episode of the novel. Here I have to give shorter versions because of past suggestions given by the reviewer who did not like long chapters to review.
