Drain the Swump
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Orange Jumpsuit, Yellow Hair"Short satirical poems
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Comment from bob cullen
balance. Long time no read, I'm not on here as much as I was. Good to see your still writing. In my eyes you will always remain one of the better writers on Fanstory. In my opinion, you write poetry as it should be written with rhyme, meter and balance.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
balance. Long time no read, I'm not on here as much as I was. Good to see your still writing. In my eyes you will always remain one of the better writers on Fanstory. In my opinion, you write poetry as it should be written with rhyme, meter and balance.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Bob, many thanks for the kind review. Yes, I'm not writing much at the moment. Perhaps the muse will return soon. Good to hear from you and sorry for the late reply.
Steve
Comment from rama devi
Hilarious satire. well rhymed and timed. It would be AWESOME if Trump gets jail time! That's certainly where he belongs. Favorite lines:
I'm not lonely; here I've met
ghosts of my old cabinet.
AND
Eight by six, a desk and bunk,
none of that old White House junk.
Fun rhyming in every stanza.
Chuckling,
rd
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
Hilarious satire. well rhymed and timed. It would be AWESOME if Trump gets jail time! That's certainly where he belongs. Favorite lines:
I'm not lonely; here I've met
ghosts of my old cabinet.
AND
Eight by six, a desk and bunk,
none of that old White House junk.
Fun rhyming in every stanza.
Chuckling,
rd
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Rama and sorry for the late reply. I haven't been around much lately. I'm sure you know how other life events sometimes overtake more pleasant pursuits like frequenting FS!
Good to see the orange Blob finally charged with something and to anticipate more to come.
Steve
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Ah yes, that orange blob should be jailed.
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I am less active here too...
Comment from humpwhistle
Yeah, Steve, this is even funnier the second time around. But while Trump takes his third trip around, it's hard to find something to laugh at.
I may be naive, but don't believe the majority of Americans have the stomach for his 'return.' Sure, he has an army of lunkheads who believe the truth doesn't apply to him. And, the Electoral College is a shell game.
But when push comes to shove, he can't win again.
Indictments will stir up the wasp nest, but the raid on the Capitol backfired. Violence in the streets won't help him.
Thanks for reposting this timely piece, Steve. Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
Yeah, Steve, this is even funnier the second time around. But while Trump takes his third trip around, it's hard to find something to laugh at.
I may be naive, but don't believe the majority of Americans have the stomach for his 'return.' Sure, he has an army of lunkheads who believe the truth doesn't apply to him. And, the Electoral College is a shell game.
But when push comes to shove, he can't win again.
Indictments will stir up the wasp nest, but the raid on the Capitol backfired. Violence in the streets won't help him.
Thanks for reposting this timely piece, Steve. Peace, Lee
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Lee and sorry for the late reply.
You know how I feel about this man. I managed to catch the reporting of his court appearance and that gives me hope that consequences may yet be coming. The documents case seems to be growing stronger by the day and the other ones are moving closer as well. I can be patient.
Steve
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Yes, and all the while, his army of lemmings follow him closer and closer to the cliff.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for reposting this. I'm not sure how I missed it the first time around, but I did. This poem flows very well and the rhyming scheme is natural and not forced. This is well written.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
Thank you for reposting this. I'm not sure how I missed it the first time around, but I did. This poem flows very well and the rhyming scheme is natural and not forced. This is well written.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Barbara and sorry for the late reply.
Steve
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Must have been a fun write for you, yet it still is unclear which way you lean ... and I need not know. It was humous, flowed well from line to line. Thanks for sharing it a second time for I wasn't on FS four years past.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
Must have been a fun write for you, yet it still is unclear which way you lean ... and I need not know. It was humous, flowed well from line to line. Thanks for sharing it a second time for I wasn't on FS four years past.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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C'mon, Tom, I'm sure you can guess that I will be celebrating every moment of Trump's approaching doom.
Thanks for the review and apologies for the late reply.
Steve
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Being in the tank means all privileges are stopped for a while and I just can't imagine what it must feel like to be locked up, a fine poem, good rhymes and the sentiment is bold and realistic Steve, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
Being in the tank means all privileges are stopped for a while and I just can't imagine what it must feel like to be locked up, a fine poem, good rhymes and the sentiment is bold and realistic Steve, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Dolly and sorry for the late reply.
Steve
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Very very ingenious very clever shut up matters awesome. This one is great! This one It's very clever with a very relevant and real subject.
Yeah I like the way that this one is put together and I heard the sentence structure. The word choice the subject matter like it all! The picture you chose is perfect as well I don't see any wrong with your Poem aesthetically or in grammar I think it's well done. I wish I all the luck thanks have a great evening!
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
Very very ingenious very clever shut up matters awesome. This one is great! This one It's very clever with a very relevant and real subject.
Yeah I like the way that this one is put together and I heard the sentence structure. The word choice the subject matter like it all! The picture you chose is perfect as well I don't see any wrong with your Poem aesthetically or in grammar I think it's well done. I wish I all the luck thanks have a great evening!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Thanks for the kind words and apologies for the late reply.
Steve
Comment from Julie Lau
Ha ha, it's good to see some topical commentary in clever verse. Please keep it up, it's what the world needs to get people's feet back on the ground. Verse like this gets on the internet and can go round, and round, and round. All kudos to you!
Julie Lau
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
Ha ha, it's good to see some topical commentary in clever verse. Please keep it up, it's what the world needs to get people's feet back on the ground. Verse like this gets on the internet and can go round, and round, and round. All kudos to you!
Julie Lau
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Thanks Julie. There may well be more to come. I haven't been writing for a while but I feel the muse returning.
Apologies for the late reply.
Steve
Comment from ImaginosBuzzardoDesdinova
Hahaha ð???! So perfectly topical. I can't wait for this prophecy to come true. Great rhyme scheme and wonderfully amusing. You are a wonderful poet.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
Hahaha ð???! So perfectly topical. I can't wait for this prophecy to come true. Great rhyme scheme and wonderfully amusing. You are a wonderful poet.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Thanks for the kind words and apologies for the late reply.
Every day we are one (or two) steps closer to some real consequences for DJT
Steve
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a good, comedic take on what's going on over there in Trump Land. I enjoyed this one Steve, well written, well told
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2019
This is a good, comedic take on what's going on over there in Trump Land. I enjoyed this one Steve, well written, well told
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 27-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2019
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Trump Land? Almost a surprise he hasn't tried to name it that! I am reminded of the old Chinese curse, "May you live in interesting times."
Thanks for reading, Valda
Steve