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A Tanka poem24 total reviews
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
It's so good to see you again. I LOVE this painting. It reminds me of a vacation in Jamaica. I got to see a banana plantation and during the tour, they demonstrate how they carry the bananas on their heads. I love learning about various cultures. Your poem/painting both offer so much. "Bananas aloft" is a great word choice.
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It's so good to see you again. I LOVE this painting. It reminds me of a vacation in Jamaica. I got to see a banana plantation and during the tour, they demonstrate how they carry the bananas on their heads. I love learning about various cultures. Your poem/painting both offer so much. "Bananas aloft" is a great word choice.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Pam. so good to see you here today. You do a very good job of painting people. Do you draw them first? What an interesting tanka and scene. It looks as though it may have been pictured in Mexico or South America. Bless you, Bob
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Hi, Pam. so good to see you here today. You do a very good job of painting people. Do you draw them first? What an interesting tanka and scene. It looks as though it may have been pictured in Mexico or South America. Bless you, Bob
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
Comment from Jesse James Doty
You describe your painting well. The title of the painting, "Back of the Bus," gives the historical significance of the last part of this Tanka, "while people strive to avoid each other." Whether they are racist or not, I think people strive to avoid each other when they get too close, such as elevators and overfilled buses. But I get your point and it is a good one. Thanks for sharing.
Take care, Jesse
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You describe your painting well. The title of the painting, "Back of the Bus," gives the historical significance of the last part of this Tanka, "while people strive to avoid each other." Whether they are racist or not, I think people strive to avoid each other when they get too close, such as elevators and overfilled buses. But I get your point and it is a good one. Thanks for sharing.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
Comment from royowen
A nicely composed poem about a centrally placed basket of bananas being miraculously balanced bu one of the painting's subjects, an excellent ekphrastic tanka Pam, well done, good job, and good to see you again Pam, blessjngs, Roy
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A nicely composed poem about a centrally placed basket of bananas being miraculously balanced bu one of the painting's subjects, an excellent ekphrastic tanka Pam, well done, good job, and good to see you again Pam, blessjngs, Roy
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
Comment from June Sargent
This reminds me of life on the islands with the hustle and bustle of people heading to the marketplace. Colorful, exciting and noisy! Thanks for the memories.
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This reminds me of life on the islands with the hustle and bustle of people heading to the marketplace. Colorful, exciting and noisy! Thanks for the memories.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Tanka about the busy city life. When the bus stops many people gets off to scurry to their work places early in the morning. Great artwork to illustrate your poem.
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A very well-written Tanka about the busy city life. When the bus stops many people gets off to scurry to their work places early in the morning. Great artwork to illustrate your poem.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
Comment from Mark D. R.
your painting ably illustrates the Tanka style verse
while the city scene is busy and often frantic - moving quickly from home to work and vice versa, often persons somehow 'strive to avoid each other' in this interpersonal setting
good effort overall
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your painting ably illustrates the Tanka style verse
while the city scene is busy and often frantic - moving quickly from home to work and vice versa, often persons somehow 'strive to avoid each other' in this interpersonal setting
good effort overall
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
Comment from Pantygynt
I wonder if that woman is going to make it to wherever she is going without spilling any of her bananas. The action in the painting is echoed in the tanka which has an unexpected satori in line three that also serves well as a pivot.
Good to see a tanka again. I had almost forgotten what they looked like - I don't think.
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I wonder if that woman is going to make it to wherever she is going without spilling any of her bananas. The action in the painting is echoed in the tanka which has an unexpected satori in line three that also serves well as a pivot.
Good to see a tanka again. I had almost forgotten what they looked like - I don't think.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
Comment from Michele Harber
This is nicely done, Pam. I was surprised by the last line as, anytime I've been in a tropical environment, people always seemed to be talking to one another and interacting, but I realized you're right. If I were carrying something on my head, I'd be doing my best to avoid anyone and anything that could knock it off. Where, exactly, is this a painting of? I like the degree of activity you captured (as your poem expresses) and, particularly, the differences in the faces in size, shape and expression.
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This is nicely done, Pam. I was surprised by the last line as, anytime I've been in a tropical environment, people always seemed to be talking to one another and interacting, but I realized you're right. If I were carrying something on my head, I'd be doing my best to avoid anyone and anything that could knock it off. Where, exactly, is this a painting of? I like the degree of activity you captured (as your poem expresses) and, particularly, the differences in the faces in size, shape and expression.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello, Pam. Good to see you and rea your verse. I enjoyed your lovely artwork. It is so vibrant and vivid. Good job on this Tanka.... as always....
All the best,
Melissa
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Hello, Pam. Good to see you and rea your verse. I enjoyed your lovely artwork. It is so vibrant and vivid. Good job on this Tanka.... as always....
All the best,
Melissa
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
