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GULBRANDR- God's Sword

Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "So It Begins"
A child is born who will be a champion

8 total reviews 
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
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Hi Roxanna,
This chapter retains interest and helps to build an image of the kind of men both Hamish and Lucas are.
It is sad to read of the worth men placed on the womenfolk but it seems the women are proud and strong.
Blerssings
Shirley

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
    Thank you, so nice of you to go back and catch up and no money on it either. Sorry. I do appreciate it. Rox
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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I'm so sorry I've been missing these chapters, Rox, but I'm back. At least I can catch up and enjoy each chapter faster than you post! lol. I loved this, now to see what happens when Lucas finds them gone. :) Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2019


reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
    I hope to post more often and not let so much time go in between. I wasn't into it for a while but now I'm, excited about it again. Rox
Comment from royowen
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You are an excellent writer Rox, with a fine perception, intuition and imagination, which are the very things belonging to those apparently successful, I think it's only luck that separates success from apparent "failure" which is not really failure atall. This is a great episode, God has gifted you. Well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : Promoted to (Luses's) personal...Lucas' ?

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 22-Jan-2019
    Thanks so much Roy for your kind word and review. Rox
reply by royowen on 22-Jan-2019
    Most welcome Rox
Comment from Ulla
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Hi Roxanna, now I feel guilty because I haven't really followed this at all. I hope you can forgive me. So coming in to a story this late is always difficult but I felt I followed along fairly well. What I did see was that it is very well written. All the best.Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 22-Jan-2019
    Thank you. I do forgive you. This is not something everyone likes so no worries. Thank you for the nice review. Rox =}
Comment from Treischel
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I haven't been following the previous material as I wasn't on much last year. But here are my comments as I pick it up here. Seems to be a dramatic battle between good and evil.

You immediately provide a tension between the brothers.

Excellent description of the battle preparations.

I love a story with dragons.

Wonderful interplay between the characters, even with the dragons. Very touching and realistic.

You really paint the evil within Lucas.

Lydia rational plight is well described.

Hmm, Hamish has been planning this for a while.

An enjoyable read.

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 22-Jan-2019
    Thank you so much, what a great review, appreciated it so much. Rox
Comment from nancy_e_davis
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I didn't see any errors Roxanne. I am enjoying your story and always look forward to the next chapter. The Battle is about to begin. I 'm sure the good guys will win but we still look forward to seeing the aggressor being put in his place. Joshua will succeed. Well done. Nancy:)

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 22-Jan-2019
    Thanks so much Nancy.
Comment from Sally Law
Exceptional
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I always look forward to the installments and continuing saga of Joshua versus the Horde. Your apologies were wasted on me. Writing 101: Never apologize for anything you write, unless it was insulting or rude, which is not the case here. You are a fine writer with a wonderful imagination. FanStory members have a tendency to back out of longer writes and ongoing sagas. I personally love them. I am a "Les Miserables" kind of girl. Hopefully, this will change in the days ahead.

Enjoy your sixer and write on and on.

Sal :+)


 Comment Written 20-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 22-Jan-2019
    Thank you so much Sally for your kind remarks and for the review. I will press onward. I got really great reviews on this chapter, so am much encouraged. =} Rox
Comment from JTStone
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I just dropped in toward the end, but what I read was easy to read and follow.
I think you have excellent flow to your work and that leads to a good visual image. Nice use of words, covet, I like that and the way you used it. The theme, middle-ages/dragons, is a bit old, but one that doesn't wear out--so a good fit for your writing skills.
Overall, I was impressed, so yeah, good work and 5 stars

JT

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 22-Jan-2019
    I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thank you so much for the great review. Rox