The Rift
Diatelle Poetry27 total reviews
Comment from Mistydawn
What a sad love poem. It's so descriptive I could feel the emotions, the confusion, pain, heartache from the loss. Your artwork is perfect. I love how you formed a diamond with your poem.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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What a sad love poem. It's so descriptive I could feel the emotions, the confusion, pain, heartache from the loss. Your artwork is perfect. I love how you formed a diamond with your poem.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Thanks so much, Misty. The Diatelle requirements ensure that it ends up looking like a diamond. Thanks a bunch!!
Melissa
Comment from country ranch writer
Some have this pattern they fall into lovem and leave them they cannot be trust to stick with one person in general because they are so fickle. Grandpa used to call these guys fickle pickles as a joke.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Some have this pattern they fall into lovem and leave them they cannot be trust to stick with one person in general because they are so fickle. Grandpa used to call these guys fickle pickles as a joke.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Hey there! I think the... fickle pickle... is funny. You should use that in one of your writings. Haha. I really appreciate your review.
Melissa
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So glad I could give you a chuckle or two today.
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your storytelling about lost love as you managed this complex form. Your rhymes are pure and the shape is true--quite an accomplishment. Happy weekend and glad to hear it's all fiction- Joan
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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I admired your storytelling about lost love as you managed this complex form. Your rhymes are pure and the shape is true--quite an accomplishment. Happy weekend and glad to hear it's all fiction- Joan
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Hello, Joan. Yes, thank goodness we are still kinda crazy for each other after 30 years!! I really do not know where this one came from. Thanks a bunch for the great review.
Melissa
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Here's to the next thirty years! Cheers- Joan
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a very creatively-written poem. It's true to form and strongly
conveys a well-known theme. Since he flew away on "faithless wings"
to another, the new one should wonder how long he'll be with her!
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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This is a very creatively-written poem. It's true to form and strongly
conveys a well-known theme. Since he flew away on "faithless wings"
to another, the new one should wonder how long he'll be with her!
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Thanks so much, Janice, for your insightful review. Much appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from Libby Geisinger
This was a fantastic poem. I had never heard of this poem type but you did a marvelous job constructing it. It is a personal message and I can hear the grief and longing in the speaker to understand why their partner left. The use of the "ew" sound in many of the words also causes the reader to lean in and feel the pain of the speaker. Great job and thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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This was a fantastic poem. I had never heard of this poem type but you did a marvelous job constructing it. It is a personal message and I can hear the grief and longing in the speaker to understand why their partner left. The use of the "ew" sound in many of the words also causes the reader to lean in and feel the pain of the speaker. Great job and thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Hi Libby. Thank goodness this poem is fictional... This type of poem is called a shape poem, because the syllable requirements end up making a shape... this one is the diamond shape.... There is also a rhyming requirement... hence the ew or oo sounds. If you are interested, the explanation is in the authors notes. Thank you very much for the great review.
Melissa
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Thank you for taking the time to explain, I will go back and look more at your author's notes. It has inspired me to try this format out and explore a new poetry type. Thank you again!
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi Melissa,
Cute picture and message. The best part of this post is the gorgeous shape you got from centering your diatelle on the page. It takes a lot of tweaking to get the shape right, and yours is perfect. Well done.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Hi Melissa,
Cute picture and message. The best part of this post is the gorgeous shape you got from centering your diatelle on the page. It takes a lot of tweaking to get the shape right, and yours is perfect. Well done.
Joy xx
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Thanks Joy... this was a new challenge for me. The syllable count lent me the shape, but it was the complicated rhyming pattern that was hard... Since it is fictional, I have no idea why I wrote this type of sad verse... Thanks for the review.
Melissa
Comment from zanya
A candid poetic analysis of a love that didn't quite make it, so to speak.- with some powerful imagery 'on faithless wings you flew 'and the title draws the reader in
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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A candid poetic analysis of a love that didn't quite make it, so to speak.- with some powerful imagery 'on faithless wings you flew 'and the title draws the reader in
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Zanya... I really appreciate your comments and also your review.
All the best,
Melissa
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written diatelle poem about the rifts we experience in life where everything in our lives seem to spiral downwards and we have lost control completely. The diatelle is quite a challenge to write.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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A very well-written diatelle poem about the rifts we experience in life where everything in our lives seem to spiral downwards and we have lost control completely. The diatelle is quite a challenge to write.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Sandra... I had no idea how complicated this one was going to be with all of the moving parts. Thanks for the kind review.
Melissa
Comment from Miss Sherry
I like this form very much - it is a bit like an etheree...I am pleased it is fiction because it is very sad and tugs at this old heart. Your artwork is stark and vivid...very fitting to the tone of your poetry. Enjoyed reading this.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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I like this form very much - it is a bit like an etheree...I am pleased it is fiction because it is very sad and tugs at this old heart. Your artwork is stark and vivid...very fitting to the tone of your poetry. Enjoyed reading this.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Thank you, Sherry. I am delighted you liked it.... it is fictional...
Melissa
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I am so glad!
Comment from Linda Engel
I love this. You stayed true to the form. It was easy to read. How many times do couples get broken by a third party. Once that trust is damaged the relationship is never the same. It is my experience that the guy usually gets disappointed or bored with the new babe and wants to come back. Think twice and hard on that one. I love the line "my hope mocked me". Very nice and enjoyable.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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I love this. You stayed true to the form. It was easy to read. How many times do couples get broken by a third party. Once that trust is damaged the relationship is never the same. It is my experience that the guy usually gets disappointed or bored with the new babe and wants to come back. Think twice and hard on that one. I love the line "my hope mocked me". Very nice and enjoyable.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Thanks so much, Linda. I appreciate your understanding review.
Melissa
