The Rift
Diatelle Poetry27 total reviews
Comment from CD Richards
I'll make a confession... I didn't take the time to count syllables, or check if the rhyme scheme matched the notes -- I was too busy enjoying this tale of betrayal and disappointment. Still, it looks pretty consistent to me on both counts. Fine job.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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I'll make a confession... I didn't take the time to count syllables, or check if the rhyme scheme matched the notes -- I was too busy enjoying this tale of betrayal and disappointment. Still, it looks pretty consistent to me on both counts. Fine job.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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Hey, Craig.... thanks a bunch. Trust me... the requirements were met... I labored over this one because of so many different pieces to this puzzle. I truly appreciate your comments, they encourage me.
Melissa
Comment from Amenian Aypotheeno
I really like this poem, I have never seen this form, so it is novel to me and you have crafted a brilliant one here, not only in rhyme and syllables but in theme, story and moral message, a heart plucked from the shining star in the sky and fallen to earth. Superbly penned and an excellent edition to your portfolio!
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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I really like this poem, I have never seen this form, so it is novel to me and you have crafted a brilliant one here, not only in rhyme and syllables but in theme, story and moral message, a heart plucked from the shining star in the sky and fallen to earth. Superbly penned and an excellent edition to your portfolio!
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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Hello Amenian...thanks so much for the wonderfully encouraging review. I am delighted you liked it.
Melissa
Comment from LisaMay
Gosh, that looks a difficult structure to adhere to and still sound coherent. But you have managed it so well! I bet you needed discipline to stick with it to make it 'behave' as a poem.
You introduced the aching rhetorical questions of a trust-broken relationship with just enough emotion to feel deeply sincere.... difficult to get the right tone but you have succeeded.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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Gosh, that looks a difficult structure to adhere to and still sound coherent. But you have managed it so well! I bet you needed discipline to stick with it to make it 'behave' as a poem.
You introduced the aching rhetorical questions of a trust-broken relationship with just enough emotion to feel deeply sincere.... difficult to get the right tone but you have succeeded.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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Thanks so much, LisaMay... It was a difficult one to create, but I enjoyed the challenge. I am delighted that you took the time to review.
Melissa
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I agree... challenging things are often the most enjoyable.
Comment from lyenochka
Glad it's fictional, Melissa! I was expecting a geologic post but that seemed to be only a metaphor for a broken relationship. Thanks for sharing yet another interesting form.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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Glad it's fictional, Melissa! I was expecting a geologic post but that seemed to be only a metaphor for a broken relationship. Thanks for sharing yet another interesting form.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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Thanks a bunch, Helen... No worries here on our 30 year marriage... to be honest, I do not know where this one came from, I was use trying to puzzle out the Diatelle form...
All the best, friend
Melissa
Comment from Connie Frazier
I've never written this type of poem. It looks challenging, but you've done a great job with this one. I has good cohesion and flows well. It packs a punch!
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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I've never written this type of poem. It looks challenging, but you've done a great job with this one. I has good cohesion and flows well. It packs a punch!
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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Thank you, Connie!
Melissa
Comment from LovnPeace
A great job o this Melissa. I all can happen in an instant without much thought. Trust will never again be the same for most. Sad. Blessings, Barbara again
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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A great job o this Melissa. I all can happen in an instant without much thought. Trust will never again be the same for most. Sad. Blessings, Barbara again
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much for your insightful review, Barbara.
All the best,
Melissa
Comment from Mark Valentine
Cool form - I love the symmetry of the rhymes and the syllables. The sentence fragments give it a rap feel - the content flows seamlessly - not easy to do with such a prescriptive form. Very nice - and good to know it's fictional.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Cool form - I love the symmetry of the rhymes and the syllables. The sentence fragments give it a rap feel - the content flows seamlessly - not easy to do with such a prescriptive form. Very nice - and good to know it's fictional.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Thanks for the great review, Mark. It was a challenge to put this one together.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
So, wow! When was the last time I saw 'bespeaks' used in a modern write! LOL! :) ;) But it works so well with the rest of your Diatelle here...new form for me...so glad to have you 'opening new poetry horizons' for me!! :) ;) Beautiful write, Melissa, and thank you so much for sharing! :) :)
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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So, wow! When was the last time I saw 'bespeaks' used in a modern write! LOL! :) ;) But it works so well with the rest of your Diatelle here...new form for me...so glad to have you 'opening new poetry horizons' for me!! :) ;) Beautiful write, Melissa, and thank you so much for sharing! :) :)
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Hello, Yvette. Thanks a bunch for the lovely review. This is the first Diatelle I have written and it was a challenge, let me tell you. I hope you are able to write one of these some day. I would love to see your take on it.
Melissa
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Well, I copied your instructions and your example into a word file when I reviewed (which is what I do with all of your wonderful intros and explanations, BTW!) so, I'll have to give it a try sometime....I definitely will let you know so you can tell me how 'awkward' it is .... I am certainly not as smooth as you seem to be! :) ;) Thanx again for everything! :) Blessings!
Comment from poetwatch
A diabetic poem it should be called, Melissa. There is so much sweetness and sourness that it taste so good. :) Good write woman. I guess I'm still learning and receiving, reliving, and rewriting. Thank you for your expertise.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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A diabetic poem it should be called, Melissa. There is so much sweetness and sourness that it taste so good. :) Good write woman. I guess I'm still learning and receiving, reliving, and rewriting. Thank you for your expertise.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much for your comments. I am grateful and always look forward to hearing your point of view.
Melissa
Comment from June Sargent
It takes skill to craft a diatelle that flows smoothly and makes sense. Betrayal from one who did not appreciate what he had. A sad topic, but a lovely poem.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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It takes skill to craft a diatelle that flows smoothly and makes sense. Betrayal from one who did not appreciate what he had. A sad topic, but a lovely poem.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Thanks so much, June. I really am grateful for your encouraging review.
Melissa
