Foreboding
Sometimes, you just KNOW13 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
A stellar example of "Men's Intuition." (yes, yes, I know there's no such thing. That's my point.) This was a perfect Dribble, in that it had a very surprise ending!! Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
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A stellar example of "Men's Intuition." (yes, yes, I know there's no such thing. That's my point.) This was a perfect Dribble, in that it had a very surprise ending!! Well done.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
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Thank you. Is there a meaning to your profile picture? Backed into a corner, preventing the door from opening to get out? Let someone in? My head hurts...:)
Comment from Spitfire
The job sounds like that of a prison guard on the midnight shift. Brick building gives a setting. Words choices give a mood:silent, dimly lit halls;howling, rainy night.
Clever let down, Clark.
-Lois
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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The job sounds like that of a prison guard on the midnight shift. Brick building gives a setting. Words choices give a mood:silent, dimly lit halls;howling, rainy night.
Clever let down, Clark.
-Lois
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Hi, It's supposed to be an ironic jab at our human tendency to think we "just know" somethings true, when in fact, we don't.
Thanks for the review, Lois. Now I just know you've had the "uniform" cleaned? :)
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Ha! I'm your girlfriend, not your maid. :-)
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lol
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This ultra-concise narrative conveys an important truth about jobs/careers.
Some people have professions that require urelenting attention, often causing them to EXPECT something . . . . Good use of personification
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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This ultra-concise narrative conveys an important truth about jobs/careers.
Some people have professions that require urelenting attention, often causing them to EXPECT something . . . . Good use of personification
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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It's a contest entry with a 50 word limit, hence the conciseness, Thanks for reviewing.
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Yes, I knew what the prompt said.
Have a good weekend.
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi Deniz,
You have set up a good scene in your dribble flash fiction. I wonder what kind of workplace it is. I have more questions. I wish you could have given some more descriptions about what kind of work you do and what happened.
Best wishes in this contest.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Hi Deniz,
You have set up a good scene in your dribble flash fiction. I wonder what kind of workplace it is. I have more questions. I wish you could have given some more descriptions about what kind of work you do and what happened.
Best wishes in this contest.
Joy xx
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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We were limited to 50 words in this contest. It was all fiction. Thanks for reviewing!
Comment from Janet Foor
I had a job like that once too. It never changed and so I had to move on.
This is an excellent dribble flash fiction Dennis.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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I had a job like that once too. It never changed and so I had to move on.
This is an excellent dribble flash fiction Dennis.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Thanks Janet!
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Quite frankly, I hope this wins. You sort of feel where it's going but the last two words undercut the tension. Funny. been there myself. lol
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Hi there,
Quite frankly, I hope this wins. You sort of feel where it's going but the last two words undercut the tension. Funny. been there myself. lol
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Yeah, it?s acknowledging we all sometimes think we know something when we really don?t. Of course, you and I have never done that...😄 thanks for reviewing!
Comment from jmdg1954
Great entry into the Dribble Flash Fiction contest.
You built up story momentum early. Then, landed the right hook closing it out.
Nicely done. John
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Great entry into the Dribble Flash Fiction contest.
You built up story momentum early. Then, landed the right hook closing it out.
Nicely done. John
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Thanks John! Much appreciated.
Comment from TheStoryMan
This was well written. There were no spelling or grammar errors and no typos. I get those same feelings from time to time. It's almost always nothing. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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This was well written. There were no spelling or grammar errors and no typos. I get those same feelings from time to time. It's almost always nothing. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Thank you for reviewing. Yes, it was a reminder to how we (except you and me) often think we just know something without or in spite of the facts.
Comment from Margiesbizness
Hello. I enjoyed that read. But I was expecting it to be a little longer to be honest but other then that..well done! Oh I like the way it was spread out it made it easy to read
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Hello. I enjoyed that read. But I was expecting it to be a little longer to be honest but other then that..well done! Oh I like the way it was spread out it made it easy to read
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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It was an entry in a 50 word contest so spreading it out would have disqualified it. Thanks for reviewing!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written dribble flash fiction. To work in the nightly hours must be much more stressful than in the daytime. We cannot always see what is lurking in the dark shadows.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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A very well-written dribble flash fiction. To work in the nightly hours must be much more stressful than in the daytime. We cannot always see what is lurking in the dark shadows.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Well, in this case, nothing was lurking. :) Thanks for reading and reviewing, Dennis
