Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I agree about how an airport reflects life - or even looks like a microcosm of the entire planet, all those weary travelers being goaded on to reach their destinations. And your end with "terminal" because all our lives are terminal. Great job in extrapolating a life image from a well known context.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your interesting perspective on the poem; you're the only one who caught that terminal symbolism at the end! estory

Comment from Tootsie55

Excellent

Had to come over and read your poem dedicated to our mutual friend and FS'er Ulla. Well done and I hope to see more of your stuff some other time. Just one change recommended. Pas[sed](t) the duty free shops

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019

Thanks for the excellent review and your comments and suggestions. I hope you continue reading my work as well. Next will come a short story, I think; I will be posting poems and stories intermittently for a bit. I love both. estory

reply by Tootsie55 on 21-Jan-2019

Hi new friend I love stories as well. I do poems from time to time. I am mainly working on building up the "funny money" in Tootsie55 account so we can get our Trip Book out there for long time and any new friends interested or who missed it in my biogrphy on"The Little Dog that Wouldn't Let Go" now completed over on sankey account. My name is Geoff I am putting my wife's Book on our trips in Australia as disabled persons. I did not want to steal my wife's thunder so I held off on more detail of our trips in my nook as I knew she was writing this stuff in this account. See you arround.

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Estory, I'm humble and I am deeply ashamed that I never saw this wonderful poem which is dedicated to me. I don't even have a six that it so greatly deserves. How can you ever forgive me??? It's a brilliant poem and a form that you seem to master to perfection. Yes, an airport with the passengers and the flying personnel takes on a life all of it's own. You don't even realise how well you've captured this in your captivating poem. Thank you so very much. I feel so bad that I never saw this. I'm a fan of yours so I'm not sure how this has happened. Warm regards. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019

Thanks so much for the excellent review and you don't have to beg forgiveness. I just thought you might like the poem since you spent so much time in airports. I always thought, maybe subconsciously, that airports make a good metaphor for life. They are exciting, they offer possibilities of change, they are frustrating, they operate according to the rules of society, they are at times hollow and offer moments of close proximity to people we never really share our experience with. And I wanted to do it in a contemporary, mechanical, computerized kind of language, to capture the modern experience. I hope you liked it. I wonder how you didn't get the notification. Maybe you accidentally deleted me from your notification list. estory

Comment from TheStoryMan

Excellent

Your view on airports made me think of a ant colony racing to find a new home - and it's pretty much like that in a sense - every person has a place to get to - the hustle the lines - and it's a everyday thing for people in that line of work - chaotic mayhem - well done - respectfully Ron

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019

Thanks for the excellent review and for all the comments and perspective on this poem. I am glad you enjoyed your little trip to the airport. I love airports myself. I love the sense of possibilities, the excitement of change in the air. The frustrations are the frustrations we all feel in life. estory

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

In the seventh line passed or past? I dropped out of the travel by air universe long ago, but your poem tells me not enough has changed to make me want to go back.
Excellent free verse.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019

Thanks for the excellent review and your perspective on the poem. I always enjoyed travelling, and the sense of adventure you get in airports and train stations. The poem is really about life. Life has its frustrations, its hopes and dreams, its possibilities and its oversight by government. What I wanted to do is write about it in contemporary terms, in a language in imagery that the people of today can relate to. estory

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

This is a very good piece, consistent rhymes, good phrasing with great rhythm and flow. airports are like life with no control. I'm goin' back to the lounge.. great one, Estory......................meeshu

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019

Thanks for the excellent review and your comments and perspective on the poem. I am glad you caught on to the poetic mechanics of it and those devices worked. I'm going to the lounge too...for a shot of whiskey and a beer chaser....LOL estory

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

You hit the nail on the head with this comparison of life with airports. Frustration level is high, but so is the sense of excitement. Wondering what awaits us around the corner - if and when we land. Very clever and original. I enjoyed the read - we travel a lot and can vouch for the truth in these words!

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019

Thanks for the excellent review and your encouraging comments and support. I am glad that what I was trying to get across came through in the language and poetic effects. I'm also glad you thought it so original. I strive to do things out of the box, try new devices and techniques. estory

Comment from susand3022

Excellent

Hi Estory, I think it's a pretty good parallel. That and the movie about the guy who 'lived' in the airport terminal because he couldn't get into the country, and he couldn't get out either... some passport snafu.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019

Thanks for the great review and the perspective and comments. I hadn't heard of that movie. But I am glad you think airports make such a great metaphor. estory

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

I spent a lot of time in airports myself, estory.
The military kind.
There, there's a whole different type of activity, dread, and anticipation.
Nice contemporary free verse.
Well penned.

~Dean

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019

Thanks for the excellent review and all your comments and perspective. The military is entirely a different perspective than what I was trying to get across here. a subject perhaps for another poem....estory

Comment from Miss Sherry

Excellent

You paint a picture of a hub of humanity that is like a beehive...busy and humming with life. I used to love to go out to the airport just to be there...watch the planes come and go - wondering what glamorous places they were heading to...but then airport security got tight and you can't just go there now.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019

Thanks for the excellent review and your comments supporting the poem, as well as your perspective. Yes, airports are the stuff of dreams, and the nightmare of frustrations...that's why I love the metaphor as one for life. I wanted to write a poem of life in a language and imagery of contemporary people. estory