Seasons - Spring, Summer, Fall
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Delight in Autumn"A Poetic Celebration of the seasons.
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written quatrain poem with reversed rhyme scheme and the delight of Autumn which is my favorite season and the children are always seem to get excited when the families go outside in a trip in nature.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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A very well-written quatrain poem with reversed rhyme scheme and the delight of Autumn which is my favorite season and the children are always seem to get excited when the families go outside in a trip in nature.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Thank you Sandra, It makes my happy when I see that. I don't know who the people in the picture are, but that child says it all and set the muse for this piece.
Comment from Pantygynt
The reverse rhyming gives a kind of weaving effect like willow hurdles or basketry. that is most appropriate in a poem devoted to the magnificent autumn colours of the woodland.
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The reverse rhyming gives a kind of weaving effect like willow hurdles or basketry. that is most appropriate in a poem devoted to the magnificent autumn colours of the woodland.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
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Thank you Pantygynt, I like that assessment.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
you have made fine use of reverse rhyme in these quatrains.
Your subject choice shows that even the most simple everyday pastimes can
grace fine poetry.
The image is delightful.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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you have made fine use of reverse rhyme in these quatrains.
Your subject choice shows that even the most simple everyday pastimes can
grace fine poetry.
The image is delightful.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Thank you Shirley. Indeed, the image was the inspiration
Comment from TheStoryMan
I loved this poem. I could actually picture children running around in the wild as I read it. It has a great rhythm and the rhyme scheme worked well to share your thoughts.
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I loved this poem. I could actually picture children running around in the wild as I read it. It has a great rhythm and the rhyme scheme worked well to share your thoughts.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Thank you TheStoryMan, I appreciate your fine review and comments.
Comment from QC Poet
Simply beautiful and emotionally uplifting message. Love reading your work.
Looks like we share a bit of aerospace work history, through Lockheed I was a developmental metal fitter in Burbank.
Thank you for sharing this poem and Good Bless you.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Simply beautiful and emotionally uplifting message. Love reading your work.
Looks like we share a bit of aerospace work history, through Lockheed I was a developmental metal fitter in Burbank.
Thank you for sharing this poem and Good Bless you.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Thank you gmartinez, Cheers to a former fellow Lockheed associate. You likely worked on some amazing programs in that location.
Comment from BigPoppaJrock
Well done, I enjoyed your poem and your picture as they went hand in had. I too enjoy the colors of fall. Good job thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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Well done, I enjoyed your poem and your picture as they went hand in had. I too enjoy the colors of fall. Good job thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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Thank you BigPoppaJrock. Glad that you enjoyed the poem.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A beautifully inspired write with a wonderful flow through each of the stanzas...your words and the implementation of the 'reverse' is like a welcoming, a dance within, and a fond farewell...just delightful! :) Thank you for sharing! :)
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A beautifully inspired write with a wonderful flow through each of the stanzas...your words and the implementation of the 'reverse' is like a welcoming, a dance within, and a fond farewell...just delightful! :) Thank you for sharing! :)
Comment Written 16-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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Thank you Y.vette. I am pleased that you liked the poem.It is cool how you carried the dance into the review. When I saw that child dancing on the trail, it just flowed.
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Blondes do crazy things...gotta watch 'em, you know! :) LOL! Have a great evening! :)
Comment from Joan E.
I was so taken by the dramatic colors captured in your photograph that I missed the gleeful child until a second look! I enjoyed your rhymes and meter to further convey the scene. Cheers- Joan
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I was so taken by the dramatic colors captured in your photograph that I missed the gleeful child until a second look! I enjoyed your rhymes and meter to further convey the scene. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 16-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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Thank you Joan. Good thin g you read my notes. Lol.
Comment from Libby Geisinger
Reading this poem brought a smile to my face of the joys of fall and sharing its beauty with others. I have a profound love for nature and to give someone else that appreciation is a true joy; you did a fantastic job of expressing those moments. The picture also compliments that poem perfectly. Thank you for sharing your poem!
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Reading this poem brought a smile to my face of the joys of fall and sharing its beauty with others. I have a profound love for nature and to give someone else that appreciation is a true joy; you did a fantastic job of expressing those moments. The picture also compliments that poem perfectly. Thank you for sharing your poem!
Comment Written 16-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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Thank you Libby. We share the same joy. I appreciate your review and comments.
Comment from Kiera Haley
I love the subject of the poem and it's a beautiful message to convey. I always find it so hard to write poems that require a specific structure so great job on that! Also in reading your notes I noticed that you wrote that it contains 60 iambic feet, but I think you meant 6 ;) I don't know if you are interested in receiving criticism, but I'll include it just in case (but of course, you are welcome to ignore it!). I have no suggestions for the first verse, but I have two for the second. The first verse addresses the reader which I like, but then the second moves away from the reader and instead shows the reader a parent who is doing what you suggest. I'm not sure if you did that on purpose, but I think I would prefer for the second verse to address the reader as well. You would definitely have to put in some work to change that and keep your structure, but I'm just throwing that out there. The only other thing is the phrase "become beguiled" in which I like the alliteration, but it feels unnatural in my brain and mouth and it's hard to say. Aside from that, your rhyme is great and you have a lot of alliteration and assonance which I love! Great poem, thanks for sharing!
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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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I love the subject of the poem and it's a beautiful message to convey. I always find it so hard to write poems that require a specific structure so great job on that! Also in reading your notes I noticed that you wrote that it contains 60 iambic feet, but I think you meant 6 ;) I don't know if you are interested in receiving criticism, but I'll include it just in case (but of course, you are welcome to ignore it!). I have no suggestions for the first verse, but I have two for the second. The first verse addresses the reader which I like, but then the second moves away from the reader and instead shows the reader a parent who is doing what you suggest. I'm not sure if you did that on purpose, but I think I would prefer for the second verse to address the reader as well. You would definitely have to put in some work to change that and keep your structure, but I'm just throwing that out there. The only other thing is the phrase "become beguiled" in which I like the alliteration, but it feels unnatural in my brain and mouth and it's hard to say. Aside from that, your rhyme is great and you have a lot of alliteration and assonance which I love! Great poem, thanks for sharing!
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Comment Written 16-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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Thank you Kiera. I appreciate yourmreview and comments. No I don't m ind some criticism, after we are all here to be reviewed. , and you are right, I meant 6 not 60. I'll fix that.
