Baker's Dozen
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Wake Up Call"Ben Baker has to hunt down and kill twelve people
26 total reviews
Comment from Sugarray77
Good job on this continuation of your vibrant and vivid story you are crafting. I do get a chuckle out of the names you have given your characters. Well done on writing an ongoing suspense story.
All the best,
Melissa
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Good job on this continuation of your vibrant and vivid story you are crafting. I do get a chuckle out of the names you have given your characters. Well done on writing an ongoing suspense story.
All the best,
Melissa
Comment Written 18-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Melissa.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Bill,
This is a very intriguing chapter. I liked the way you described his surroundings as he came to in this strange place. I think slowly bringing into the focus the man who holds him was well done.
Why does the blurry photo look like George Clooney?
Looking forward to reading more,
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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Hi, Bill,
This is a very intriguing chapter. I liked the way you described his surroundings as he came to in this strange place. I think slowly bringing into the focus the man who holds him was well done.
Why does the blurry photo look like George Clooney?
Looking forward to reading more,
Not sure if I've already invited you: Some of us are trying to get together a Prose Posse by fanning any other prose writers we come across while reviewing. We want to get our prose read because we are in danger of disappearing from the site as most people will read poetry for the 'quick funny money,' and ignore the work we post.
Feel free to join us and fan any other prose writer you come across and extend this same invite to them,
~Mustang Patty~
Comment Written 18-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Sally. Hey! George Clooney is in my story!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
You've done such an awesome job here with your description of someone waking up or trying to wake up from getting hit, drugging, etc --- word choice /visual is best I've read in some time! ;) ;) Sooooo..Robert Butcher, huh...? I'm be patting my foot til the next installment now.! :) Thank you for sharing! :) Yvette
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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You've done such an awesome job here with your description of someone waking up or trying to wake up from getting hit, drugging, etc --- word choice /visual is best I've read in some time! ;) ;) Sooooo..Robert Butcher, huh...? I'm be patting my foot til the next installment now.! :) Thank you for sharing! :) Yvette
Comment Written 18-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Yvette. This chapter has received mixed reviews. Thank you for the positive input.
Comment from tbacha58
Hi Bill, I am so sorry I could not read your story from the beginning, as I have so much to review due to my absence of 2 years. I just hope you remember me and will try to keep up with your story from now onwards.
From what I read today, it sounds very intriguing about killing and shootings. I am sure you will make it to the end of a book, as you were always a fantastic writer. Terry xoxo
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Hi Bill, I am so sorry I could not read your story from the beginning, as I have so much to review due to my absence of 2 years. I just hope you remember me and will try to keep up with your story from now onwards.
From what I read today, it sounds very intriguing about killing and shootings. I am sure you will make it to the end of a book, as you were always a fantastic writer. Terry xoxo
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Thank you, Terry, for giving this a look. Welcome back to the fold. Bill
Comment from nomi338
This chapter whether by design or accident points out a very positive truth. No matter in which situation or condition you wake up in, first celebrate the fact that you woke up. Once that is established, celebrate the fact that at least you woke up. Your next assignment is to figure out how to survive to see another day.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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This chapter whether by design or accident points out a very positive truth. No matter in which situation or condition you wake up in, first celebrate the fact that you woke up. Once that is established, celebrate the fact that at least you woke up. Your next assignment is to figure out how to survive to see another day.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Waking up seems important.
Comment from Teresa Alford
I am out of 6 star rating so a 5 will have to do. FS gives me a chance to read stories I might not otherwise read, such as this. It is interesting and holds my attention. TA. ";-)
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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I am out of 6 star rating so a 5 will have to do. FS gives me a chance to read stories I might not otherwise read, such as this. It is interesting and holds my attention. TA. ";-)
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Thanks, TA. We learn a lot from each other.
Comment from Cass Carlton
Now hang on a minute!! What just happened? Ben Baker's name is actually Robert Butcher?? Or is he playing games with the strange man in front of him?? This is a strange twist in a very strange story. I am all atwitter to see where it leads. Trying to remember who had been killed and who was the villain has taxed my brain sorely. It has been a very intriguing story though, and I look forward to the conclusion . cheers Cass
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Now hang on a minute!! What just happened? Ben Baker's name is actually Robert Butcher?? Or is he playing games with the strange man in front of him?? This is a strange twist in a very strange story. I am all atwitter to see where it leads. Trying to remember who had been killed and who was the villain has taxed my brain sorely. It has been a very intriguing story though, and I look forward to the conclusion . cheers Cass
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Cass. Hope it works right.
Comment from TheStoryMan
I sure hope someone, somewhere, somehow can stop Connor. It's horrible that these poor people are being forced to kill in order to stay alive. This is another well written chapter. There were no spelling or grammar errors.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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I sure hope someone, somewhere, somehow can stop Connor. It's horrible that these poor people are being forced to kill in order to stay alive. This is another well written chapter. There were no spelling or grammar errors.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Thank you, TSM, for the nice review. Bill
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You're welcome.
Comment from WryWriter
Hmm. Now who is this strange fellow he finds himself in the company of? Smart move not to tell all until he better regains his senses to know whether or not to tell anything. Who can one trust in war? Even battles such as this. No suggestions. I like it as it stands. Onward to the next well-written chapter.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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Hmm. Now who is this strange fellow he finds himself in the company of? Smart move not to tell all until he better regains his senses to know whether or not to tell anything. Who can one trust in war? Even battles such as this. No suggestions. I like it as it stands. Onward to the next well-written chapter.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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Thanks, WW.
Comment from AdaJulie
This is really intersting. You are sure good at writing these. I have learned so much just from reading the things you write and they style you write in. Thanks for sharing. Ada
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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This is really intersting. You are sure good at writing these. I have learned so much just from reading the things you write and they style you write in. Thanks for sharing. Ada
Comment Written 16-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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Thank you, Ada, for the kind review. Bill
