They Beat as One
Sonnet50 total reviews
Comment from Jaye Bennett
The poet takes it past just an "I love you." The poet takes it on to the physical expressions of love, using the senses. The picture of the summer storm symbolizes the storm of the physical side of love. The last line is awesome. Good job.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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The poet takes it past just an "I love you." The poet takes it on to the physical expressions of love, using the senses. The picture of the summer storm symbolizes the storm of the physical side of love. The last line is awesome. Good job.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Thank you Jayne for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I'm happy you liked this one.
Blessing
Janet
Comment from Dean Kuch
Aw-w-wwwwww...
This is a wonderfully well written sonnet, in perfect iambic pentameter, at least as far as I could tell.
Sugary sweet, it is most definitely a poetic proclamation portraying pure passion and love. I also see that you've penned your Shakespearean sonnet for the contest.
I would expect this to do very well.
Best of luck, Janet (sorry no sixes!).
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019
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Aw-w-wwwwww...
This is a wonderfully well written sonnet, in perfect iambic pentameter, at least as far as I could tell.
Sugary sweet, it is most definitely a poetic proclamation portraying pure passion and love. I also see that you've penned your Shakespearean sonnet for the contest.
I would expect this to do very well.
Best of luck, Janet (sorry no sixes!).
Comment Written 12-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019
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Thank you Dean. I know love poems are not really your thing - even though you write beautiful ones. I appreciate your kind comments and good wishes.
Always the best.
Janet
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It is always a pleasure to read your work, Janet.
Romance or otherwise.
~Dean
Comment from tbacha58
Our hearts resound forever as if one.
You are my night - you are my morning sun.
Well, from my point of view I enjoyed reading this poem. Why? Full of feelings, connected with sincere love, the words written mean finding true love nowadays, is not easy. That is what every human being should look for at least once in a lifetime. It is worth it to be in love. Good luck. Terry xoxo
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Our hearts resound forever as if one.
You are my night - you are my morning sun.
Well, from my point of view I enjoyed reading this poem. Why? Full of feelings, connected with sincere love, the words written mean finding true love nowadays, is not easy. That is what every human being should look for at least once in a lifetime. It is worth it to be in love. Good luck. Terry xoxo
Comment Written 12-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019
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Thank you Terry for your thoughtful and encouraging review . You are so right - it is worth it to be in love.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Miss Sherry
A 6, but I have none. This is on the edge of erotic and sweet with tenderness. How very much it flew into my heart as my muse pondered the nuances. Just lovely and splendid!!
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A 6, but I have none. This is on the edge of erotic and sweet with tenderness. How very much it flew into my heart as my muse pondered the nuances. Just lovely and splendid!!
Comment Written 12-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019
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Thank you Sherry for your thoughtful and encouraging review and for the virtual six. Thank you for your kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Bill Schott
This sonnet, They Beat as One, has the formatting requirements of the style and bring in some balmy weather to tantalize and possibly act as the metaphor for some turbulent lovemaking.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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This sonnet, They Beat as One, has the formatting requirements of the style and bring in some balmy weather to tantalize and possibly act as the metaphor for some turbulent lovemaking.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Thank you Bill for your encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from lyenochka
That's really steamy stuff! I was thinking it might be a love poem with the "They Beat as One" title. But I was surprised to start with a weather metaphor but the metaphor kept growing and shows me the passion of love in this well crafted sonnet!
Best wishes in the contest!
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That's really steamy stuff! I was thinking it might be a love poem with the "They Beat as One" title. But I was surprised to start with a weather metaphor but the metaphor kept growing and shows me the passion of love in this well crafted sonnet!
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 12-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your encouraging review and best wishes.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Tirza Savellano
Spectacular! I feel you have put much time and effort into this piece. This is certainly one of the most passionate poems I have ever read. I love the ending. Great job! I wish you well in all your future endeavors.
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Spectacular! I feel you have put much time and effort into this piece. This is certainly one of the most passionate poems I have ever read. I love the ending. Great job! I wish you well in all your future endeavors.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Thank you Tirza for your encouraging review and best wishes.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from royowen
An excellent entry in this sonnet poetry contest Janet. It has all the ingredients of the sonnet, passionate love, expressed accordingly. The pentametric stanzas are written written in expressive language and imagery, the rhyming is great, an all round good work, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Suggestion : instead of "makes me high" "takes me high" like flying!
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An excellent entry in this sonnet poetry contest Janet. It has all the ingredients of the sonnet, passionate love, expressed accordingly. The pentametric stanzas are written written in expressive language and imagery, the rhyming is great, an all round good work, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Suggestion : instead of "makes me high" "takes me high" like flying!
Comment Written 12-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Thank you Roy for your encouraging review and special sixth star. I really liked your idea of "makes me high". I struggled with that line and you have fixed it for me. I appreciate your thoughtfulness my friend.
Blessings
Janet
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Always a pleasure Janet.
Comment from Rob Caudle
Very well done! Sonnets are so difficult! When I first started reading, your Hell's hot breath and body drenched from head to toe made me immediately think of our time in Texas. Then the next to the last stanza really did!
Anyway, I love the vivid imagery and the sentiments are beautiful! Good luck in the contest!
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Very well done! Sonnets are so difficult! When I first started reading, your Hell's hot breath and body drenched from head to toe made me immediately think of our time in Texas. Then the next to the last stanza really did!
Anyway, I love the vivid imagery and the sentiments are beautiful! Good luck in the contest!
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Comment Written 12-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your encouraging review and good wishes.
Texas in the Spring is on my bucket list but as yet I have not made it there.
Would love to see the fields of Bluebells.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from meeshu
this is a very passionate love poem. I love the way it subtly picks up pace and a sense of urgency in the third verse. a match with the message. outstanding, Janet........................meeshu
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this is a very passionate love poem. I love the way it subtly picks up pace and a sense of urgency in the third verse. a match with the message. outstanding, Janet........................meeshu
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Comment Written 12-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Thank you meeshu for your most encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
