A Garden of Memories
The Book of Life holds all our secrets4 total reviews
Comment from Jaye Bennett
You continue to amaze me, not only with your talent, but with being so prolific. I have a bit of a problem with the Seventh stanza, third line: Maybe change out "Of" for "And." The book of which you write contains what is, not what we wish it to be. I do enjoy your work. Good job.
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You continue to amaze me, not only with your talent, but with being so prolific. I have a bit of a problem with the Seventh stanza, third line: Maybe change out "Of" for "And." The book of which you write contains what is, not what we wish it to be. I do enjoy your work. Good job.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2019
Comment from Dan McCurdy
Powerful poem of a pending afterlife! I will say that I am a bit confused about the title, your poem is clearly about the Book, which just so happens to reside in the Garden, but I suppose that is just a matter of taste.
Well written and hope provoking.
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Powerful poem of a pending afterlife! I will say that I am a bit confused about the title, your poem is clearly about the Book, which just so happens to reside in the Garden, but I suppose that is just a matter of taste.
Well written and hope provoking.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2019
Comment from patcelaw
Oh, how I look forward to that day when we are with the Lord and are totally free from our sin. May your new year be wonderfully blessed. Patricia
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Oh, how I look forward to that day when we are with the Lord and are totally free from our sin. May your new year be wonderfully blessed. Patricia
Comment Written 12-Jan-2019
Comment from beencounter
The beginning of your poem creates curiosity and draws you in. Your poem has a good rhythm and cadence. And being the nit-picky reviewer that I am, in the very beginning of the poem description, "The Book of Life..." I would change the word Hold to Holds. I wouldn't want potential reviewers to skip this poem based on its description. I hope this helps.
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The beginning of your poem creates curiosity and draws you in. Your poem has a good rhythm and cadence. And being the nit-picky reviewer that I am, in the very beginning of the poem description, "The Book of Life..." I would change the word Hold to Holds. I wouldn't want potential reviewers to skip this poem based on its description. I hope this helps.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2019
