Out of Nowhere
A Rondel for the Pix This Challenge13 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This rondel, Out of Nowhere, has the correct format and extends a nautical metaphor throughout the poem. Too bad the love boat sank.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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This rondel, Out of Nowhere, has the correct format and extends a nautical metaphor throughout the poem. Too bad the love boat sank.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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Glad you enjoyed the read.
Comment from LisaMay
Great image; you continued the theme well.
The splash broke the surface, exposing your vulnerability. The ripples spread and had wider effects.That ne'er do well love interest made your boat float then cut his anchor and sailed away.
"Harbouring hopes" is a nice glimpse of port-in-a-storm, or a desire for domestic safety.
I liked your introduction of "flotsam"... it could refer to the floating pieces of the damage done, but also floating garbage. It made me mentally think of the word "jetsam" (I sometimes get them confused) and I looked in the dictionary and saw that meant: goods thrown overboard from ship to lighten it, esp. such as are washed ashore... a fairly appropriate idea in the context of your poem.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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Great image; you continued the theme well.
The splash broke the surface, exposing your vulnerability. The ripples spread and had wider effects.That ne'er do well love interest made your boat float then cut his anchor and sailed away.
"Harbouring hopes" is a nice glimpse of port-in-a-storm, or a desire for domestic safety.
I liked your introduction of "flotsam"... it could refer to the floating pieces of the damage done, but also floating garbage. It made me mentally think of the word "jetsam" (I sometimes get them confused) and I looked in the dictionary and saw that meant: goods thrown overboard from ship to lighten it, esp. such as are washed ashore... a fairly appropriate idea in the context of your poem.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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Glad you enjoyed the nautical theme of my poem.
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Yes, I really did. Thankyou.
Comment from Aussie
Loved the rhyme scheme. Love comes in many forms, can be soul-destroying or life-long and yes, anchor is the most important when we give ourselves wholly to another. I liked the sea and its forms being used for this poem. It gave it a soft and gentle flow. Excellent. Blessings, K.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019
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Loved the rhyme scheme. Love comes in many forms, can be soul-destroying or life-long and yes, anchor is the most important when we give ourselves wholly to another. I liked the sea and its forms being used for this poem. It gave it a soft and gentle flow. Excellent. Blessings, K.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019
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Thank you for dropping by to read and review.. I appreciate your insights.
Comment from Joan E.
I am glad you were inspired by the Club's picture and selected the Rondel form to reflect on it and a lost love. I enjoyed your rhymes and energized, repeating lines. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019
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I am glad you were inspired by the Club's picture and selected the Rondel form to reflect on it and a lost love. I enjoyed your rhymes and energized, repeating lines. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 14-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your encouraging and insightful review.
Comment from Raul1
I like how you put this poem about two couples. It is like a nice story, but in a poem. Two people falling in love. Thanks for sharing! Good luck in the contest!
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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019
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I like how you put this poem about two couples. It is like a nice story, but in a poem. Two people falling in love. Thanks for sharing! Good luck in the contest!
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Comment Written 14-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your encouraging feedback.
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You're welcome
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Rondel and an excellent interpretation of the Pix this picture for the challenge. Sometimes a splash surprises us when it comes unexpectedly from nowhere.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019
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A very well-written Rondel and an excellent interpretation of the Pix this picture for the challenge. Sometimes a splash surprises us when it comes unexpectedly from nowhere.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019
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Appreciate your reading and sharing your thoughts, Sandra.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good poem to go with
the picture, June.
-I like all of your imagery
with "splashing" "harbor"
and other sea faring terms.
-I like the first line, and it makes
a good one to repeat.
-The concluding verse is also
very good, as the needed anchor
wasn't there for this relationship.
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019
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-A good poem to go with
the picture, June.
-I like all of your imagery
with "splashing" "harbor"
and other sea faring terms.
-I like the first line, and it makes
a good one to repeat.
-The concluding verse is also
very good, as the needed anchor
wasn't there for this relationship.
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019
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Thank you for dropping by to read and share your insights on my Pix This challenge!
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You are welcome, June.
Comment from Earl Corp
I enjoyed this poem immensely. You made it rhyme, make sense, and invoked emotions within the reader. It's too bad you didn't enter this in a site contest, I think it's a winner.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019
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I enjoyed this poem immensely. You made it rhyme, make sense, and invoked emotions within the reader. It's too bad you didn't enter this in a site contest, I think it's a winner.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019
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Thank you for dropping by to read and share your insights on my Pix This challenge!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your rondel is excellent in form (rhyme and meter), word choices,
and theme conveyed. We often just don't listen when others say
what we don't want to hear. Heartbreak often ensues!
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019
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Your rondel is excellent in form (rhyme and meter), word choices,
and theme conveyed. We often just don't listen when others say
what we don't want to hear. Heartbreak often ensues!
Comment Written 14-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019
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Thank you for dropping by to read and share your insights on my Pix This challenge!
Comment from Graybærd
I love finding new poetry formats. You do well with this one.
I loved your use of metaphors in this poem. "causing ripples deep and far reaching", obviously using the "splash" theme to describe romance gone wrong that affected everyone and everything.
"I watch as flotsam floats away", Your love, after trying to keep them with all your heart and tears, leaves.
Very emotional and very good.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019
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I love finding new poetry formats. You do well with this one.
I loved your use of metaphors in this poem. "causing ripples deep and far reaching", obviously using the "splash" theme to describe romance gone wrong that affected everyone and everything.
"I watch as flotsam floats away", Your love, after trying to keep them with all your heart and tears, leaves.
Very emotional and very good.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019
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Thank you for reading and sharing your sentiments - which were on point!
