Endless Part I And II
A poem.30 total reviews
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Tom,
Your poetry seems so bleak lately. I do hope everything is alright and you are simply expressing deep thoughts. This poem reminded me of one story told to me by my stepfather prior to entering the service.
Thank you for sharing,
~Mustang Patty~
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Hi, Tom,
Your poetry seems so bleak lately. I do hope everything is alright and you are simply expressing deep thoughts. This poem reminded me of one story told to me by my stepfather prior to entering the service.
Thank you for sharing,
~Mustang Patty~
Comment Written 11-Jan-2019
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I cannot begin to imagine what hell is festering deep inside ex soldiers... What they see and have to face would, and must, put the most intense fear into them, made worse because they are even terrified of showing it. This is so well worded, it really gets to the core of the emotions suffered. Well done, an amazing poem. :) Sandra xx
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I cannot begin to imagine what hell is festering deep inside ex soldiers... What they see and have to face would, and must, put the most intense fear into them, made worse because they are even terrified of showing it. This is so well worded, it really gets to the core of the emotions suffered. Well done, an amazing poem. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 11-Jan-2019
Comment from Treischel
I marveled as the coupled rhyme flowed along on iambic tetrameter, yet twisted in and out of murky waters in a struggle for identity. I was mesmerized by the poetic imagery, phraseology, and alliterations. Well crafted. Well done!
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I marveled as the coupled rhyme flowed along on iambic tetrameter, yet twisted in and out of murky waters in a struggle for identity. I was mesmerized by the poetic imagery, phraseology, and alliterations. Well crafted. Well done!
Comment Written 11-Jan-2019
Comment from Artasylum
Your brain on words is crazy stuff... where do you find them all... you are raving poems and excellent verse... another winner... looking forward kiddo to more. yours, diana
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Your brain on words is crazy stuff... where do you find them all... you are raving poems and excellent verse... another winner... looking forward kiddo to more. yours, diana
Comment Written 11-Jan-2019
Comment from Pantygynt
Speaking as an ex-veteran I think the fear of being afaraid, or rather of showing it, is the worst fear of all because it is so internal. One can feel it even in circumstances that are of themselves un frightening, but thinking ahead can still bring fears destructive power down on ones head.
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Speaking as an ex-veteran I think the fear of being afaraid, or rather of showing it, is the worst fear of all because it is so internal. One can feel it even in circumstances that are of themselves un frightening, but thinking ahead can still bring fears destructive power down on ones head.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2019
Comment from Janet Foor
I love how your words formed a shape for this well written poem. Your insights into the thoughts of a soldier are phenomenal. Several of my uncles served in WWII and survived. Another uncle died in the Korean Conflict and a cousin died in Vietnam.
Lives of those who survived and those who lost loved ones are never the same.
Very nicely done. Sorry I am out of sixes. This is worthy of that and more.
blessings
Janet
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I love how your words formed a shape for this well written poem. Your insights into the thoughts of a soldier are phenomenal. Several of my uncles served in WWII and survived. Another uncle died in the Korean Conflict and a cousin died in Vietnam.
Lives of those who survived and those who lost loved ones are never the same.
Very nicely done. Sorry I am out of sixes. This is worthy of that and more.
blessings
Janet
Comment Written 11-Jan-2019
Comment from A. Willow Bends
I am not sure I am in a position to write a review on something so intense and personal, but I am giving it my best shot. You are a master at conveying a situations that some of us cannot even imagine in our wildest dreams. I have not walked in your shoes, so I cannot suggest improvement for a piece of work that is coming directly from your soul or mind. This is perfection in my opinion. No, I do not understand some of the deeper meaning, but it is not for me to understand all of it. I can only surmise you have lived through things that will never go away in your memory. I hope your writing talent (gift!) is a therapy that brings you a sense of inner peace that supersedes whatever you have survived. I hope that for your sincerely. This is perfection.
Wendy
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I am not sure I am in a position to write a review on something so intense and personal, but I am giving it my best shot. You are a master at conveying a situations that some of us cannot even imagine in our wildest dreams. I have not walked in your shoes, so I cannot suggest improvement for a piece of work that is coming directly from your soul or mind. This is perfection in my opinion. No, I do not understand some of the deeper meaning, but it is not for me to understand all of it. I can only surmise you have lived through things that will never go away in your memory. I hope your writing talent (gift!) is a therapy that brings you a sense of inner peace that supersedes whatever you have survived. I hope that for your sincerely. This is perfection.
Wendy
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
Comment from meeshu
This is a very fine piece of writing. It has a wonderful cadence and pace. Excellent verse and verbiage Well done, Tom. "The fear of man bringeth a snare : but whoso putteth his trust in the Lord shall be safe.".....................meeshu
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This is a very fine piece of writing. It has a wonderful cadence and pace. Excellent verse and verbiage Well done, Tom. "The fear of man bringeth a snare : but whoso putteth his trust in the Lord shall be safe.".....................meeshu
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
Comment from SLMorrical
I like this. It is written in the classic way, and that is why I like it. I like the way it flows. It is an easy read to follow. Wouldn't it be wonderful if there was no more war? Very well done.
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I like this. It is written in the classic way, and that is why I like it. I like the way it flows. It is an easy read to follow. Wouldn't it be wonderful if there was no more war? Very well done.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
Comment from nancy_e_davis
A soldier who didn't want to be there. Who didn't join in when killing time cam and later had to live with the fact he was a coward. The mental agony he is going through because of it. I love the last part, how he suffered and finally lost himself in the reality of it all. PTSD? So sad. Well done Tom. Nancy:)
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A soldier who didn't want to be there. Who didn't join in when killing time cam and later had to live with the fact he was a coward. The mental agony he is going through because of it. I love the last part, how he suffered and finally lost himself in the reality of it all. PTSD? So sad. Well done Tom. Nancy:)
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
