Falling Rain
A Nonet56 total reviews
Comment from June Sargent
Your effort paid off - this is a lovely example of a nonet, one of my favorite forms of poetry. I wrote one about my cat - in my portfolio. Your illustration is beautiful with that rainbow. I really enjoyed this.
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Your effort paid off - this is a lovely example of a nonet, one of my favorite forms of poetry. I wrote one about my cat - in my portfolio. Your illustration is beautiful with that rainbow. I really enjoyed this.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much, I like to see an effort is worth it****kahpot
Comment from Raul1
I enjoy when it is a normal day and it rains. I get to see the Beautiful rainbow while it rains in a Beautiful day. Well written! Thanks for sharing! Good luck in the contest!
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I enjoy when it is a normal day and it rains. I get to see the Beautiful rainbow while it rains in a Beautiful day. Well written! Thanks for sharing! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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Thank you for this wonderful review****kahpot
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You're welcome
Comment from lyenochka
Great job with this nonet - I like how the "sun shines down" but it's the rain that wins the battle and brings life-giving water to all.
Suggestions - completely your choice to change:
"to vanquish clouds that flood our plain " (suggest maybe "conquer" clouds both for the alliteration and because later you have "vanquished vessels") In such a small poem, repetition is really noticeable and sometimes it adds power and sometimes reduces it.
"natures " (nature's) seems like a possessive here.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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Great job with this nonet - I like how the "sun shines down" but it's the rain that wins the battle and brings life-giving water to all.
Suggestions - completely your choice to change:
"to vanquish clouds that flood our plain " (suggest maybe "conquer" clouds both for the alliteration and because later you have "vanquished vessels") In such a small poem, repetition is really noticeable and sometimes it adds power and sometimes reduces it.
"natures " (nature's) seems like a possessive here.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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Again many thanks and I have considered ( it did not take long) your suggestions and have included, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from country ranch writer
This reminds me of all the memories I have of our Fla sun and sudden rain showers. It really does rain with the sun out and on on side of the street and not the other. Yep it's true been there done that.
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This reminds me of all the memories I have of our Fla sun and sudden rain showers. It really does rain with the sun out and on on side of the street and not the other. Yep it's true been there done that.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much, yes the sun does sometimes more than shine****kahpot
Comment from Donka Kristeva
There is depth in this very expressive and elegant Nonet poem. Rhyme, rhythm, nature in its wonder shape a moving, meditative poem. Wonderful!
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There is depth in this very expressive and elegant Nonet poem. Rhyme, rhythm, nature in its wonder shape a moving, meditative poem. Wonderful!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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Wow! how encouraging and inspirational, this is Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Jesse James Doty
The artwork, by GaliaG, is breathtakingly beautiful. The nonet is well done. I like your Author's notes, which explain, where you were coming from, with the poem. I like the rhymes, especially ones like, "vessels" and "nestles" and "supply" and "sky." They are creative and clever. Your message is natural and nurturing. I like the end, which says, "falling rain natures gain." Rain certainly is nature's gain, and I live in California, where rain is of high demand, because of the ongoing drought we have experienced. I enjoyed reading your positive and uplifting piece, very much. Thanks for sharing.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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The artwork, by GaliaG, is breathtakingly beautiful. The nonet is well done. I like your Author's notes, which explain, where you were coming from, with the poem. I like the rhymes, especially ones like, "vessels" and "nestles" and "supply" and "sky." They are creative and clever. Your message is natural and nurturing. I like the end, which says, "falling rain natures gain." Rain certainly is nature's gain, and I live in California, where rain is of high demand, because of the ongoing drought we have experienced. I enjoyed reading your positive and uplifting piece, very much. Thanks for sharing.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much and I agree the artwork is beautiful and you reminded me to thank them, I have added to my notes, many thanks****kahpot
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You're so welcome. And I'm glad you thanked GaliaG for the artwork in your notes. The artist definitely deserves recognition.
Jesse
Comment from Tirza Savellano
Stupendous! Each word flows smoothly into the next painting this wonderful piece. The image really helps convey your story. Thank you for sharing your work. I wish you well in all your future endeavors.
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Stupendous! Each word flows smoothly into the next painting this wonderful piece. The image really helps convey your story. Thank you for sharing your work. I wish you well in all your future endeavors.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much, for this excellent review****kahpot
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
You have done this nonet style a lot of justice. I enjoyed your poems deeper meaning and message of the beauty of nature behind all that rain/floods...I hope you do well in the contest.
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You have done this nonet style a lot of justice. I enjoyed your poems deeper meaning and message of the beauty of nature behind all that rain/floods...I hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much, it is comments like these that inspire to try ****kahpot
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello kahpot, Excellent Nonet. Good fomat--perrfect syllable count. Nice rhyming lines. Lovely artwork choice. I especially liked:
The sun shines down behind falling rain
to vanquish clouds that flood our plain
(Good opening lines and nice imagery)
A pleasure to read. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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Hello kahpot, Excellent Nonet. Good fomat--perrfect syllable count. Nice rhyming lines. Lovely artwork choice. I especially liked:
The sun shines down behind falling rain
to vanquish clouds that flood our plain
(Good opening lines and nice imagery)
A pleasure to read. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much for this inspirational review****kahpot
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a beautiful write in both rhyming verse and its striking image in complement - its gentle definition is commanding in construction and affords a tribute to nature's nourishing embrace - a lovely presentation in its entirety - in perfect compliance with the prompt - best of luck in the contest...
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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In my opinion, a beautiful write in both rhyming verse and its striking image in complement - its gentle definition is commanding in construction and affords a tribute to nature's nourishing embrace - a lovely presentation in its entirety - in perfect compliance with the prompt - best of luck in the contest...
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much, these words are appreciated greatly****kahpot
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You are very welcome indeed, kahpot...Eve
