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Comment from Sugarray77
This is so pretty and since the focus is on a little one roaming the backyard, it has a pure innocence both in the writing and wording. I really like it and hope you do well in the contest.
Melissa
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This is so pretty and since the focus is on a little one roaming the backyard, it has a pure innocence both in the writing and wording. I really like it and hope you do well in the contest.
Melissa
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
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thanks for your review and your sage thoughts and observations... yours diana
Comment from Six-Star Writer
I liked the humor. Who among us, if not knowing roses were not intended for eating, wouldn't want to partake of so lucious a fare? Red. Frangrant. A full-bodied rosey bouquet allowed to breathe for maximum enjoyment.
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I liked the humor. Who among us, if not knowing roses were not intended for eating, wouldn't want to partake of so lucious a fare? Red. Frangrant. A full-bodied rosey bouquet allowed to breathe for maximum enjoyment.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
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thanks for your review and your sage thoughts and observations... yours diana
Comment from babykoala
This was so amazing in the way it takes you right back to when the world new and everything was fun and fresh and colourful! and yes, life's thorns were just an unknown thing of the very distant future. Oh to go back to that time. Well done, I loved this poem.
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This was so amazing in the way it takes you right back to when the world new and everything was fun and fresh and colourful! and yes, life's thorns were just an unknown thing of the very distant future. Oh to go back to that time. Well done, I loved this poem.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
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thanks for your review and your sage thoughts and observations... yours diana
Comment from Sam Saylor
The theme and imagery pulls me in and I am cast back to my own childhood and running round the hills sides and grass planes with my sister. I like how what I interpret to be the very real threat of adulthood (portrayed as rose and thorns).
Generally I like it, I would suggest considering the way the last sentence is put together.
***Saved by the bell..Life's thorns would have to wait***
I find the stars confusing and perhaps also the admission for the first time in the poem of something more mechanical in form of the bell, However perhaps that is intentional and the bell also could represent adult hood?
BOOM!
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The theme and imagery pulls me in and I am cast back to my own childhood and running round the hills sides and grass planes with my sister. I like how what I interpret to be the very real threat of adulthood (portrayed as rose and thorns).
Generally I like it, I would suggest considering the way the last sentence is put together.
***Saved by the bell..Life's thorns would have to wait***
I find the stars confusing and perhaps also the admission for the first time in the poem of something more mechanical in form of the bell, However perhaps that is intentional and the bell also could represent adult hood?
BOOM!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
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Comment from jenintorre
This is a delightful poem and totally fits the criteria of the contest.
"Lifes thorns would have to wait". What a great last line. The picture of the little girl is adorable and really enhances the poem. Good luck and best wishes. Jen.
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This is a delightful poem and totally fits the criteria of the contest.
"Lifes thorns would have to wait". What a great last line. The picture of the little girl is adorable and really enhances the poem. Good luck and best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
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thanks for your review and your sage thoughts and observations... yours diana
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, I always enjoy a poem about a cute little one wandering through the yard and discovering all the absolutely divine flowers. Yep while it was fun as a youngster, it is still fun as an olderster.
That said, saved by the lunch sounds good too.
A lovely poem and I wish you much luck in the booth. :)
Gloria
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Ha, I always enjoy a poem about a cute little one wandering through the yard and discovering all the absolutely divine flowers. Yep while it was fun as a youngster, it is still fun as an olderster.
That said, saved by the lunch sounds good too.
A lovely poem and I wish you much luck in the booth. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
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Hey Gloria... thanks so much for your eyes... thanks for your review and your sage thoughts and observations... yours
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This appealing, descriptive piece movingly calls on the readers
to cast our minds back to childhood, when we looked on life
and nature with appreciation and awe--and desire to explore all.
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This appealing, descriptive piece movingly calls on the readers
to cast our minds back to childhood, when we looked on life
and nature with appreciation and awe--and desire to explore all.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
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thanks for your review and your sage thoughts and observations... yours diana
Comment from BermyBye50
This poem is an enjoyable and pleasant surprise. In its simplicity it wonderfully conveys the the intent of the when Life was Still Fun contest. the rhyming is perfect the story presented is uplifting to one's soul. The photo is just and add on as the picture you've painted with your words says it all. As the saying goes ' A picture is worth a thousand words."
All the best in the contest
Eugene
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This poem is an enjoyable and pleasant surprise. In its simplicity it wonderfully conveys the the intent of the when Life was Still Fun contest. the rhyming is perfect the story presented is uplifting to one's soul. The photo is just and add on as the picture you've painted with your words says it all. As the saying goes ' A picture is worth a thousand words."
All the best in the contest
Eugene
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
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Wow.. Bermy thanks so much for this... it is a snapshot a soliloquy of one moment. thanks yours, Also I am humbled by your stars that you blanketed me with...
Comment from whitedesert
I don't dish out six stars, not easily. It was easy, for this poem. Loved that last line, I transported into that garden, I heard the maybe slightly naughty giggle? The closely inspected bumble bee bussing around...Poems must, in some ways grab you by the throat, it must inspire or hurt you, make you happy or very sad. This one made me happy, and brought me to a standstill. That is poetry!
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I don't dish out six stars, not easily. It was easy, for this poem. Loved that last line, I transported into that garden, I heard the maybe slightly naughty giggle? The closely inspected bumble bee bussing around...Poems must, in some ways grab you by the throat, it must inspire or hurt you, make you happy or very sad. This one made me happy, and brought me to a standstill. That is poetry!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
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This was not hard for me to tap into... I can still see me and my neighborhood in The Eastbrook sub-division and our back yard... pondering life. I am honored and grateful for the blanket of stars...
Comment from Thomas Bowling
The inquisitive nature of youth is magical. The thorns are worth the discovery of roses. They also teach a valuable lesson. Sometimes great joy also brings pain.
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The inquisitive nature of youth is magical. The thorns are worth the discovery of roses. They also teach a valuable lesson. Sometimes great joy also brings pain.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
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thanks for your review and your sage thoughts and observations... yours diana
