Comment from jenintorre

Excellent

What a great flash fiction. How satisfying that would be if it really happened. It made me want to clap and cheer at the end. You need to change (learn) to lean. Good luck and best wishes. Jen.

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019

Thank you for the excellent review review and critique. I fixed learned and made it leaned. I am a blind writer and miss these little things sometimes. I appreciate you telling me about my error. The first part is true and my sister thanked me recently for saving her life. She wanted to get in the car and out of the rain.
All my best,
Sal :+)

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

Next or second take is never the same, now the game is something else, now it is not joy ride, now to the police headquarters; well said, well done. God guided words are readable over 1000+ years--- DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019

Thank you so much for the excellent review and insightful comments. I appreciate you so much. So glad you were able to stop by!
All my best,
Sally :+)

Comment from LovnPeace

Exceptional

Well done. A whole story condensed into a few words. I wish more of them could be stopped this easy and more children saved from these savages. Good luck in the contest. Blessings, Barbara

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019

Thank you so much for the outstanding review. I am deeply honored by it. The first part is true and my sister thanked me for saving her life. She wanted to get in the car and out of the pouting rain. The second part is fantasy and hope mixed together, hoping someone arrested him and removed him from the streets.
All my best,
Sal ;+)

Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

This is a great entry for the 100 word contest. You really had me thinking that the predator was going to be a spider, not a jerk. (Worse than a jerk). Great write.. Good luck.

Melissa

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019

Well, it?s hard to find a picture of what the real Perv looked like. He was creepy and scary. Part one is true, this was my sister and I walking home on a rainy day. She wanted to get in his car and get out of the rain. I pulled her back and marched her home with my arm around her. She thanked me years later for saving her life. Part two is my fantasy fiction. I hoped that he was eventually caught and removed from my old elementary school areas and neighborhood forever. Thanks for the excellent review and for stopping by.
All my best,
Sal :+)

Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

Hard to mesmerize a reader in 100 words, but you did it, Sally. Plus, you covered a fifteen year time span in so few words. Also hard to do. Your flash fiction has all of the elements of a short story. It has an interesting beginning and ending twist.
Nice job with this one, Sally.

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019

Thank you so much for the excellent review and kind comments. I am so glad you enjoyed this flash fiction based on a true story from my childhood. My sister wanted to get in the car and out of the rain. I really said that to him when he offered us a ride twice. I pulled Suzanne along and out of harms way. She thanked me years later for saving her life. Part two is my fantasy fiction. I hope that someone arrested the Perv; removing him from the streets for good.
All my best,
Sal

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, Sally,

Great use of the flash fiction format to tell an all-too horrible tale. As our population grows, so does the number of Pervs in our neighborhoods.

I loved the notion of pulling a gun on the bastard and scaring him to death. Good luck to you in the contest,

~patty~

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 Comment Written 11-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019

Thank you for the excellent review review and insightful comments. Yep, sin marches on. Part one of this is true. My sister wanted to get in his car and out of the rain. I put my arm around her and held her close all the way home.She didn?t understand at the time what was going on. She thanked me years later for saving her life. Part two is my fantasy and hope?that someone caught him and removed him from the streets for good.
All my best,
Sal

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

These are dangerous men stalking innocent vulnerable women and I often fear for my eldest grand daughter who is only 14 years old, I enjoyed your story and let it be a warning to us all, love Dolly x

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 Comment Written 11-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019

Thank you so much for the excellent review and insightful comments. Yes, it is a concern to me as well. Part one of this shot story is true, and my sister recently thanked me for saving her life that day. She wanted to get in his car and out of the rain.
All my best,
Sal