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Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing more of your grandchildren and another appealing form. I enjoyed the sandwich, along with the rhymes. I appreciated your wise advice about nature, laziness and family bonding. Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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Thank you for sharing more of your grandchildren and another appealing form. I enjoyed the sandwich, along with the rhymes. I appreciated your wise advice about nature, laziness and family bonding. Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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Thank you Joan. You're the best!
Comment from patcelaw
The quatrain Sandwich format is ne I had not seen before , Nicely done. I have a grandchild name Isaac. He will graduate from high school this year. Patricia
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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The quatrain Sandwich format is ne I had not seen before , Nicely done. I have a grandchild name Isaac. He will graduate from high school this year. Patricia
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Thank you Patricia. I guess that was a popular name a few years ago.appreciate your time and comments.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Hello, Treischel.
-I didn't think you were
"into quatrains, or trains for that matter!"
-Now you have gone and written
a "quatrain sandwich!"
-Thanks for the notes about it;
maybe I will try one.
-I really like the photos.
-I like your poem about your grandchildren.
-They are good looking kids.
-It's nice that you share a bit
of nature with them.
-Children can get too caught up
in all of the tech devices and
never get out of doors.
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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-Hello, Treischel.
-I didn't think you were
"into quatrains, or trains for that matter!"
-Now you have gone and written
a "quatrain sandwich!"
-Thanks for the notes about it;
maybe I will try one.
-I really like the photos.
-I like your poem about your grandchildren.
-They are good looking kids.
-It's nice that you share a bit
of nature with them.
-Children can get too caught up
in all of the tech devices and
never get out of doors.
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thank you Pam. I appreciate your review and comments. We are of like mind on those kids. For sure , hop on a "-train."
Comment from Pantygynt
This tempts me to create the Cornish Pasty. I think that would be a big slice of free verse (all sorts of stuff makes up the pasty filling) wrapped around with much longer lines in rhyming couplet.
You are right though, the great outdoors is the place for adventure first hand not canned inside some box.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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This tempts me to create the Cornish Pasty. I think that would be a big slice of free verse (all sorts of stuff makes up the pasty filling) wrapped around with much longer lines in rhyming couplet.
You are right though, the great outdoors is the place for adventure first hand not canned inside some box.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thank you Jim, sounds delicious. With a beer I presume?
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Of course.
Comment from pome lover
Bravo! Good advice and good poem. AND precious picture of grands.
Not only hug a tree, but learn to be at ease talking with grandparents, not sit mute and mutinous as if they're in time out. (although there SHOULD be a time out from electronic gadgets.)
And yes, especially go outside - play hide and seek, touch football, draw hopscotch on the sidewalk - get exercise.
Your poem should be required reading for parents and grandparents.
good job.
pome lover
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Bravo! Good advice and good poem. AND precious picture of grands.
Not only hug a tree, but learn to be at ease talking with grandparents, not sit mute and mutinous as if they're in time out. (although there SHOULD be a time out from electronic gadgets.)
And yes, especially go outside - play hide and seek, touch football, draw hopscotch on the sidewalk - get exercise.
Your poem should be required reading for parents and grandparents.
good job.
pome lover
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thank you poemlover. All your points well taken
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written sandwich quatrain about the children of today that find it hard to play outside and leave their electronic toys for a while for some old-fashioned fun in the backyard.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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A very well-written sandwich quatrain about the children of today that find it hard to play outside and leave their electronic toys for a while for some old-fashioned fun in the backyard.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thank you Sandra. Hear, hear!
Comment from jenintorre
I totally agree with you. I think children spend far too much time inside. When my grandchildren visit me they spend most of the time making videos of themselves. It is clever but frightning. Where will it end. Cheers. Jen.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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I totally agree with you. I think children spend far too much time inside. When my grandchildren visit me they spend most of the time making videos of themselves. It is clever but frightning. Where will it end. Cheers. Jen.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thank you Jen. Good question. I don't get this "selfie" thing either. Why would someone want to spoil a shot of the Grand Canyon or Eiffel Tower with someone mugging in front of it. How egotistical!
Comment from RodG
Your grandchildren are beautiful. I can see why Grandpa would want to spend time with them. I also concur with your complaint that young people spend too much time indoors with electronic games/devices. I enjoyed this "sandwich" very much. Rod
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Your grandchildren are beautiful. I can see why Grandpa would want to spend time with them. I also concur with your complaint that young people spend too much time indoors with electronic games/devices. I enjoyed this "sandwich" very much. Rod
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thank you RodG, I appreciate the review and comments. Bon Appetit!
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My pleasure. Rod
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I so agree with the sentiments here, our children do spend too much time indoors and it is important to go for a walk and let them run around and take in the fresh are and hug a tree, I really enjoyed your poem, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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I so agree with the sentiments here, our children do spend too much time indoors and it is important to go for a walk and let them run around and take in the fresh are and hug a tree, I really enjoyed your poem, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thank you Dolly. I am pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from zlp22
Very good advise. Word flow makes it an easy and easy read. Kids have too many things to keep them inside and the outside is becoming only a place to get to your car.
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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Very good advise. Word flow makes it an easy and easy read. Kids have too many things to keep them inside and the outside is becoming only a place to get to your car.
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Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thank you zip22. So true, sadly.
