A Consequential Condiment
A poem.72 total reviews
Comment from strandregs
Mazel To
More Shakespeare than Shaky.
Mostly well done.
Minimally mundane.
I am a harsh critic
Due to existential pain.
Jokes aside
A fine composition. :-))Z.
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Mazel To
More Shakespeare than Shaky.
Mostly well done.
Minimally mundane.
I am a harsh critic
Due to existential pain.
Jokes aside
A fine composition. :-))Z.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
Someday when you are bored or someday when you are feeling particularly ambitious, I hope you will provide background on some of your poems so we (I) can get a deeper sense as to what this (and a few of your less obvious other poems) really mean to you. Your poems are like a word that I can't remember but is on the tip of my tongue. I get close to understanding but I'm not quite there. They tease.
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Someday when you are bored or someday when you are feeling particularly ambitious, I hope you will provide background on some of your poems so we (I) can get a deeper sense as to what this (and a few of your less obvious other poems) really mean to you. Your poems are like a word that I can't remember but is on the tip of my tongue. I get close to understanding but I'm not quite there. They tease.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
Comment from Julie G1
Great verse. This reader appreciated the skilled choice of a concise word picture, using the poetic technique. The message conveyed presents clearly the poetic message. I hope to read more of this type of verse.
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Great verse. This reader appreciated the skilled choice of a concise word picture, using the poetic technique. The message conveyed presents clearly the poetic message. I hope to read more of this type of verse.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
Comment from Teri7
Easy, This is a very well written and very well worded six star poem in my eyes. You used very good descriptive words. Very good imagery with your words. Blessings, Teri
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Easy, This is a very well written and very well worded six star poem in my eyes. You used very good descriptive words. Very good imagery with your words. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
Comment from Jane Jane King
This is a very thoughtful poem which shares an interesting philosophy. I especially liked the last line. That is something that we all strive and long for. This is a well written piece.
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This is a very thoughtful poem which shares an interesting philosophy. I especially liked the last line. That is something that we all strive and long for. This is a well written piece.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
Comment from Aussie
You are back confusing me with your big words! Who said you weren't intelligent? I will try to make comment one your in-depth writing. You have always been a good poet, I think the last few poems (simply written without the big words) have been a vast improvement. More people will read your writing - just because you are a walking dictionary, the big words stop reviewers.
I for one have to dive for a dictionary!
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You are back confusing me with your big words! Who said you weren't intelligent? I will try to make comment one your in-depth writing. You have always been a good poet, I think the last few poems (simply written without the big words) have been a vast improvement. More people will read your writing - just because you are a walking dictionary, the big words stop reviewers.
I for one have to dive for a dictionary!
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
Comment from karenina
So glad I'm getting a second crack at reading these gems! This one from 2019? How ever did I miss them? (I will double check, as sometimes people I have fanned fall off my roster!)
My muse is stubborn and reluctant...but, oh, when she appears I feel just like this!
Karenina
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So glad I'm getting a second crack at reading these gems! This one from 2019? How ever did I miss them? (I will double check, as sometimes people I have fanned fall off my roster!)
My muse is stubborn and reluctant...but, oh, when she appears I feel just like this!
Karenina
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I liked reading this poem on a Sunday afternoon. It could be interpreted more than one way. The lines that seem most revealing to me are: I have cut away the shade
to mark the tragedy of time.
It makes me think that there is a feeling of peace and serenity that is being described as time has lessened the intensity of a tragic loss of some kind. Your last four stanzas are very nice indeed.
The last stanza makes me think of what a quiet death might also be like, with something that reminds me of a final runway approach on an airplane with the phrase: about to change my downward flight. It is a poem that reminds me of another category in an out-of-state poetry contest with a subject called "an epiphany."
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I liked reading this poem on a Sunday afternoon. It could be interpreted more than one way. The lines that seem most revealing to me are: I have cut away the shade
to mark the tragedy of time.
It makes me think that there is a feeling of peace and serenity that is being described as time has lessened the intensity of a tragic loss of some kind. Your last four stanzas are very nice indeed.
The last stanza makes me think of what a quiet death might also be like, with something that reminds me of a final runway approach on an airplane with the phrase: about to change my downward flight. It is a poem that reminds me of another category in an out-of-state poetry contest with a subject called "an epiphany."
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
Comment from Kayliegh
Oh wow! The writing and story of this is absolutely amazing! I love the general tone of it, and the wording of all of it is amazing! Great job overall!
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Oh wow! The writing and story of this is absolutely amazing! I love the general tone of it, and the wording of all of it is amazing! Great job overall!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
Comment from forestport12
Really loved the alliteration that flicks on my tongue and helps me spring into the groove of the poem. I may be wrong this one sounds personal and a place you were in back then.
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Really loved the alliteration that flicks on my tongue and helps me spring into the groove of the poem. I may be wrong this one sounds personal and a place you were in back then.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
