A Consequential Condiment
A poem.72 total reviews
Comment from Heather lyn Tobias
I can understand where you are coming from in this poem. Your rhyming is spot on. You just keep that notepad nearby for times like this poem.
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I can understand where you are coming from in this poem. Your rhyming is spot on. You just keep that notepad nearby for times like this poem.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2023
Comment from jim vecchio
Love your alliteration and plays on words to paint this vivid picture of a solitary existence. Long ago, i was in a writing class and we were asked to say a little about ourelves. One gentleman surprised me and said, "I don't mind being alone." Now I cn understand him a bit more!
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Love your alliteration and plays on words to paint this vivid picture of a solitary existence. Long ago, i was in a writing class and we were asked to say a little about ourelves. One gentleman surprised me and said, "I don't mind being alone." Now I cn understand him a bit more!
Comment Written 30-Jun-2023
Comment from Raul1
The sentences flow with clarity. It's beautifully written. It is clear and concise. I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. Excellent work! Thank you for sharing!
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The sentences flow with clarity. It's beautifully written. It is clear and concise. I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. Excellent work! Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 30-Jun-2023
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
You really do seem to enjoy playing with words here and in particular alliteration which is used extensively throughout your verse. The problem is that the message often gets lost or obscured (for me) in the process although I think you're referring to the ageing process and a stage you've reached whereby you feel peace and tranquility inspired by your love of writing. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
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You really do seem to enjoy playing with words here and in particular alliteration which is used extensively throughout your verse. The problem is that the message often gets lost or obscured (for me) in the process although I think you're referring to the ageing process and a stage you've reached whereby you feel peace and tranquility inspired by your love of writing. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 30-Jun-2023
Comment from Lisasview
Sitting here in Spain as evening is settling in and contemplating your words.. I must say that I love how you put two similar words next to each other several times throughout your poem..
Such as Sentimental sentiment and consequential condiment....
I just love this....
Lisasview
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Sitting here in Spain as evening is settling in and contemplating your words.. I must say that I love how you put two similar words next to each other several times throughout your poem..
Such as Sentimental sentiment and consequential condiment....
I just love this....
Lisasview
Comment Written 30-Jun-2023
Comment from Mercedes Weathers
I loved this poem...it seems to be speaking of reaching this new level within oneself, but in general reminds me of feelings of love...love of the current moment of growth and peace.
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I loved this poem...it seems to be speaking of reaching this new level within oneself, but in general reminds me of feelings of love...love of the current moment of growth and peace.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2023
Comment from royowen
Gee I wish that I had perfect sight, it would surely contradict the imperfect vessel I'm afraid, but being a true poet, you still plumb the depths of contemplation, and the true working of the contemplative mus, beautifully worded, smooth flow and abcb rhyme, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2023
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Gee I wish that I had perfect sight, it would surely contradict the imperfect vessel I'm afraid, but being a true poet, you still plumb the depths of contemplation, and the true working of the contemplative mus, beautifully worded, smooth flow and abcb rhyme, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2023
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I just follow your lead good poet. As we both know, at least I assume, our writing is therapy. LOL. You, sir, are the poet. I'm, as an old member once labeled me, am jus a jublient rhymer. You are the poet; I am but a rhythm nut who misses my band. lol. easy
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Well done
Comment from papa55mike
As I grow older it does seem easy to find the moment of peace when the grandkids aren't around. What a wonderfully written and beautiful poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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As I grow older it does seem easy to find the moment of peace when the grandkids aren't around. What a wonderfully written and beautiful poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 30-Jun-2023
Comment from JSD
A lovely piece. Well structured with excellent and unforced rhyme and rhythm. Your vocabulary is complex yet it speaks volumes about your complex state of mind. Well done.
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A lovely piece. Well structured with excellent and unforced rhyme and rhythm. Your vocabulary is complex yet it speaks volumes about your complex state of mind. Well done.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2023
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Tom,
This poem flows well with its unforced abab quatrains. I like the use of metaphor and alliteration to describe how faith takes away pain and confusion. It puts light back in life.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
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Hi Tom,
This poem flows well with its unforced abab quatrains. I like the use of metaphor and alliteration to describe how faith takes away pain and confusion. It puts light back in life.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
