Bum Fluff Soldier
A young man goes to war.15 total reviews
Comment from PoemsOfDD
K, a very well written poem that highlights the injustice and inhumane affects of war. The end stanza very gripping. Innocent lives lost, mothers and fathers deprived of their offspring - so very sad. Such a high price paid for a low wage offered. An emotional piece and worthy of a six. ~DD
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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K, a very well written poem that highlights the injustice and inhumane affects of war. The end stanza very gripping. Innocent lives lost, mothers and fathers deprived of their offspring - so very sad. Such a high price paid for a low wage offered. An emotional piece and worthy of a six. ~DD
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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Hello DD, You must have known something! I needed one review to be recognised. Thank you so much. No one likes war, unfortunately it started when the cave-man dragged the women out of the cave! The killing of innocent men and women sickens me, what price a life. I was only a little child when my dad came home from three years fighting in New Guinea. Our family were lucky. Bless you my friend XXK.
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Hello K :-) I am pleased to have tipped you over to recognized status. War is never a good thing and innocent lives lost is too high a price to pay always. ~DDxx
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job depicting what these young soldiers might have felt, Aussie. Your lines flow smoothly, the rhymes are good, the picture is perfect, and the message is clear. Your notes were informative--thanks for those, too. Good job and thanks for haring. Jan
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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You did a good job depicting what these young soldiers might have felt, Aussie. Your lines flow smoothly, the rhymes are good, the picture is perfect, and the message is clear. Your notes were informative--thanks for those, too. Good job and thanks for haring. Jan
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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Hi Jan, Thanks so much for your in-depth review, glad you liked my poem/story. blessings, Kay.
Comment from Jaye Bennett
The abab rhyme scheme works well for this poignant poem about a soldier who didn't come home. Boys do like to follow their dads. Good picture. Should do well in the contest. Good job.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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The abab rhyme scheme works well for this poignant poem about a soldier who didn't come home. Boys do like to follow their dads. Good picture. Should do well in the contest. Good job.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much for reading. Thanks for your good wishes. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a stunning poem in its plaintive narrative about the truth of soldiering and the hearts of men - well constructed in its stanzas and smoothly fluid in rhyming rhythm, easily kept my attention in the read - complies fully with the prompt. Best of luck in the contest for this special write...
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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In my opinion, a stunning poem in its plaintive narrative about the truth of soldiering and the hearts of men - well constructed in its stanzas and smoothly fluid in rhyming rhythm, easily kept my attention in the read - complies fully with the prompt. Best of luck in the contest for this special write...
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your in-depth review. I appreciate you reading my poem. Blessings, Kay.
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You are very welcome, Kay - my brother served in Viet Nam and, thank God, came home alive and in one piece...Eve
Comment from Miss Sherry
Such barely-held tears your poetry brings. Fascinating stories that enthrall and entice the eye to keep searching for more. Excellent form and great flow. This is one of the best poems I have read recently.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Such barely-held tears your poetry brings. Fascinating stories that enthrall and entice the eye to keep searching for more. Excellent form and great flow. This is one of the best poems I have read recently.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thanks so much for your emotional comments. I love to write story/poems. I shall endeavor to write more for you. Cheers, Kay.
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That will delight me no end!!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written rhyming poem about war. When we hear the stories of those who came back scarred for life and the ones who did not make it back, we start to wonder if any war is worth a soul.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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A very well-written rhyming poem about war. When we hear the stories of those who came back scarred for life and the ones who did not make it back, we start to wonder if any war is worth a soul.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Sandra, Man has been warring since time began. I don't think it's going to stop anytime soon. Nostradamus said " when the last Pope leaves Rome and the five hills run with blood, then the super nations will sit down together." Whereas, the Bible says, "when the lion lays down with the lamb, peace will come." So, we are waiting for the Lamb. Bless you, Kay.
Comment from Sanku
This is a very touching poem. I am angry with all wars. I feel all wars are a waste of human lives.
The so- called honour does nt make up for the fact that they have lost a chance to live
your rhymes are natural and lines were very free flowing.i havent heard this phrase 'bumbluff.I liked the last two stanzas very much.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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This is a very touching poem. I am angry with all wars. I feel all wars are a waste of human lives.
The so- called honour does nt make up for the fact that they have lost a chance to live
your rhymes are natural and lines were very free flowing.i havent heard this phrase 'bumbluff.I liked the last two stanzas very much.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Hello Sanku, Thanks for dropping in. Glad my poem touched you. Happy New Year! Blessings, Kay.
Comment from jenintorre
Bum-fluff soldier, what an excellent description. This is such a very sad and moving poem, very sensitively written. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Bum-fluff soldier, what an excellent description. This is such a very sad and moving poem, very sensitively written. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Hi Jen, Thanks for reading and appreciating the sacrifice the boys made. Blessings, K XX
Comment from country ranch writer
Nice work up for your poem and the picture is priceless and it is a shame the mean had to come to their demise due to the war. They were so young.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Nice work up for your poem and the picture is priceless and it is a shame the mean had to come to their demise due to the war. They were so young.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Hi Barbara, Thanks for dropping in to read. Blessings, Kay XX
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a well-done narrative that takes the reader through two generations
of bravery, war, and death, and grief. Your descriptions are vivid and the poem is heart-wrenching!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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This is a well-done narrative that takes the reader through two generations
of bravery, war, and death, and grief. Your descriptions are vivid and the poem is heart-wrenching!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Hi Janice, Thanks so much for dropping in to read; glad you enjoyed. XXK.
