Don't Stare at My Hair
Mono-rhyme9 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
Ha ha ha--fun with rhymes indeed. Hilarious satire and double entendre. pet bear, eh? He he he. Fine presentation too.
Two suggestions:
I swear(,)
if you dare
to stare
at my hair,
beware(:)
I don't care
Clever write!
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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Ha ha ha--fun with rhymes indeed. Hilarious satire and double entendre. pet bear, eh? He he he. Fine presentation too.
Two suggestions:
I swear(,)
if you dare
to stare
at my hair,
beware(:)
I don't care
Clever write!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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Thanks! rd - Glad you got a laugh out of this poem. Appreciate your suggestions which I've now included. You have wonderful eye to what a piece needs to make it better. Cheers ... ;o)
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:-))))) Thanks!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written mono-rhyme poem. The best is not to stare at another's hair we can easily get in trouble before we know and we can experience our worst nightmare.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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A very well-written mono-rhyme poem. The best is not to stare at another's hair we can easily get in trouble before we know and we can experience our worst nightmare.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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yes, best to not stare or get eaten by a bear - glad you liked it - appreciate your thoughts ... ;o)
Comment from Debbie Pope
This mono rhyme is the first to make me laugh out loud. That is worth a lot. It's hard to get me laughing in the morning. I even laughed at the photo when I saw your title. I couldn't quit staring at the hair.
All of the mono rhymes that I have read have been excellent. Yours is so creative though. I suspect that you will do very well.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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This mono rhyme is the first to make me laugh out loud. That is worth a lot. It's hard to get me laughing in the morning. I even laughed at the photo when I saw your title. I couldn't quit staring at the hair.
All of the mono rhymes that I have read have been excellent. Yours is so creative though. I suspect that you will do very well.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thanks - Glad this poem and picture made you laugh. Appreciate your thoughts ... ;o)
Comment from Insider98
A very unique form. Seeing the picture, I guess this is a woman who lives in the forest, away from people? If she doesn't want me to stare...then I won't, haha! Not worth the risk! Great job! Good luck!
Insider98
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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A very unique form. Seeing the picture, I guess this is a woman who lives in the forest, away from people? If she doesn't want me to stare...then I won't, haha! Not worth the risk! Great job! Good luck!
Insider98
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thanks - yes, she does live in the forest. Glad you liked this poem. Appreciate your thoughts ... ;o)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I promise I won't stare at your hair if you don't set your bear on me! This is a fun write and I'm not quite sure what it is about, but us girls are sensitive about our hair! Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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I promise I won't stare at your hair if you don't set your bear on me! This is a fun write and I'm not quite sure what it is about, but us girls are sensitive about our hair! Love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Dolly - Glad you found this a fun write. Well, she lives in the forest and communes with mostly animals. She's sensitive about a lot of things. Appreciate your thoughts ... ;o)
Comment from jenintorre
A very good mono-rhyme poem. I like the smooth flow of the words which describe the well chosen artwork perfectly. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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A very good mono-rhyme poem. I like the smooth flow of the words which describe the well chosen artwork perfectly. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thanks - glad you enjoyed it. Appreciate your thoughts ... ;o)
Comment from country ranch writer
who cares what one's hair looks like, what you wear or if it really matters at all. One is known by what is inside a person not what is on the outside.
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who cares what one's hair looks like, what you wear or if it really matters at all. One is known by what is inside a person not what is on the outside.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
Comment from Graybærd
As someone who does not have hair, I might stare, but only out of admiration. As someone who enjoys good poetry, I definitely enjoyed your work. Good luck.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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As someone who does not have hair, I might stare, but only out of admiration. As someone who enjoys good poetry, I definitely enjoyed your work. Good luck.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thanks - Glad you enjoyed it .... ;o)
Comment from susand3022
Dear Author, I did love your poem, Don't Stare at My Hair. I found it to be a well put together little anecdote with all of those words rhyming with "hair." Where on Earth did you find that picture??? Sigmund and the Sea Monster??? LOL
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Dear Author, I did love your poem, Don't Stare at My Hair. I found it to be a well put together little anecdote with all of those words rhyming with "hair." Where on Earth did you find that picture??? Sigmund and the Sea Monster??? LOL
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thanks - Glad you liked this poem. The girl in the picture is actually a Dryad, who lives in the woods and communes mostly with animals. I found the pic a long time ago and was fascinated by her hair. Appreciate your thoughts ... ;o)
