A Cleared Vision
A Terza Rima Sonnet6 total reviews
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Oh, we do live in a society that has a "hurry up and wait" mentality. I love your sentiment that we should try to remember that patience is a virtue. Rushing decisions may cause us to forego our true potential. A nicely formatted poem for this contest. I wish you lots of luck.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Oh, we do live in a society that has a "hurry up and wait" mentality. I love your sentiment that we should try to remember that patience is a virtue. Rushing decisions may cause us to forego our true potential. A nicely formatted poem for this contest. I wish you lots of luck.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Hi Cindy Thanks for reading my poem , and yes sometimes rushing can be detrimental also I am learning patience while waiting in shop cues and traffic LOL Cheers
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Patience is a virtue, but patience does not mean mere waiting for something, but it is purposive and specificity committed to an object; well said, well done. Write inspire change for 1234 Years--- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Patience is a virtue, but patience does not mean mere waiting for something, but it is purposive and specificity committed to an object; well said, well done. Write inspire change for 1234 Years--- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Hi Dr Alcreator, Thanks for yoir review and yes patience is something to have in certain situations and also when awaiting something special. Als when writing this is is not an easy style LOL Cheers
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I liked your philosophy here and your advice is something I should take because I sometimes make rash decisions, I loved your sometimes near rhymes and clever used of words, I am not familiar with this form and you made your words flow so perfectly, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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I liked your philosophy here and your advice is something I should take because I sometimes make rash decisions, I loved your sometimes near rhymes and clever used of words, I am not familiar with this form and you made your words flow so perfectly, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Hi Dolly, Thank you and ues I something do however neing a librian I sometimes procrastinate in decisions also LOL This style is quiteca difficult one when every line has to have 11 syllables but I perservered and hope it is right Cheers
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Terza Rima sonnet. It is alway better to wait patiently for what we like to have than to rush something and make a mess of everything or not able to finish the job.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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A very well-written Terza Rima sonnet. It is alway better to wait patiently for what we like to have than to rush something and make a mess of everything or not able to finish the job.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Hi Sandra Thanks so much I found this a little challenging to get it to flow and have 11 syllables each line but hopefully it sounds OK Cheers
Comment from Michele Harber
This is a very interesting poem and perspective, basically suggesting that each person should ultimately decide what he believes is worth the patience and the wait. I can see applying this to people in unsatisfying (or harmful) relationships, who choose to wait it out. You're absolutely right that we need to decide for ourselves what's not worth waiting for. You've adhered well to the difficult rules of the Terza Rima Sonnet Poem as described, and I wish you luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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This is a very interesting poem and perspective, basically suggesting that each person should ultimately decide what he believes is worth the patience and the wait. I can see applying this to people in unsatisfying (or harmful) relationships, who choose to wait it out. You're absolutely right that we need to decide for ourselves what's not worth waiting for. You've adhered well to the difficult rules of the Terza Rima Sonnet Poem as described, and I wish you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Hi Michelle, Thanks yoir for your time to read my poem and ues this is a difficult poem to write woth the 11 syllable count each line and rhyming scheme however i love a good challenge LOL Cheers for your luck
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It was my pleasure. I like a good challenge too, but I haven't been brave enough
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Oops, I hit ''Save" too soon. I meant to say that I love a good challenge too, but I haven't been brave enough to try this type of poetry. I respect you for doing it.
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next time have a go it was fun to try to get it reasonably OK LOL
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You never know. I started doing quaterns because I was impressed with all the ones Gloria... was posting.
Comment from phill doran
Hello Anon
I must compliment you on this: it struck me as a very difficult form and I think you have addressed it well, using feminine endings to make the 11th syllable. I tried one or two lines myself - and had to concede defeat!
The poem content is strong. It is an interesting and provoking thought - patience, as you imply, is not necessarily always a virtue.
In passing, maybe have a look at line 3: "...perhaps it's really what you then persue..." - I am not sure if you mean "pursue" ? The line itself also appears to be 10 syllables - it may be my reading.
I wish you well with this: you have make good on a difficult challenge.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Hello Anon
I must compliment you on this: it struck me as a very difficult form and I think you have addressed it well, using feminine endings to make the 11th syllable. I tried one or two lines myself - and had to concede defeat!
The poem content is strong. It is an interesting and provoking thought - patience, as you imply, is not necessarily always a virtue.
In passing, maybe have a look at line 3: "...perhaps it's really what you then persue..." - I am not sure if you mean "pursue" ? The line itself also appears to be 10 syllables - it may be my reading.
I wish you well with this: you have make good on a difficult challenge.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Hi Phil, Thank you and yes it is difficult to get the syllables right I kept checkimg with syllable counters and the annoying thing wascthat a few gave me dofferent results but I have hopefully corrected that line ( again Ha Ha ) I will patiently wait and see forca verdict Cheers
