Love Letter on a Napkin
The most important words you will ever say.38 total reviews
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Sally,
Oh my gosh - where is that six-star rating when you really need one?
This is an exemplary story! You are a truly gifted writer, my friend!
Your ending has me typing through misty eyes.
Only one question for your consideration: should fortysomething be hyphenated? (I think maybe so.)
Thank you so much for sharing your terrific work with us. I really enjoyed this read!
Jan
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019
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Hi Sally,
Oh my gosh - where is that six-star rating when you really need one?
This is an exemplary story! You are a truly gifted writer, my friend!
Your ending has me typing through misty eyes.
Only one question for your consideration: should fortysomething be hyphenated? (I think maybe so.)
Thank you so much for sharing your terrific work with us. I really enjoyed this read!
Jan
Comment Written 09-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and kind words. You are such a sweetheart! I saw fortysomething both ways, but I will take your good advice and hyphenate it. I appreciate you giving me so much of your time and attention. I am so glad to find you here on FanStory!
All my best,
Sal xo
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Hi Sal,
You are most welcome, my friend. I'm glad we (cyber) "met" as well. I appreciate you! :-) Jan
PS - I think hyphenated is "correct," as unhyphenated triggers spell check, for whatever that's worth. (I googled whether it should be hyphenated before making the suggestion, but came up empty on that.)
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Okay good, I just changed it about two seconds ago...
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written story with a lot of great descriptive words and great imagery from your words as well as the art work you chose. This is a great poem for story of the month contest. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019
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This is a very well written story with a lot of great descriptive words and great imagery from your words as well as the art work you chose. This is a great poem for story of the month contest. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 09-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much dear Teri. So glad you liked it and got the bonus goodies I just added two seconds ago. Yay! I hate those to go to waste. I appreciate the review and kind words.
All my best,
Sal :+)
Comment from Debbie Pope
That is definitely a tear jerker, Sally. You really have a gift for romantic fiction. I guess it comes from the love that you feel.
This is very well written. I bet that it goes up for story of the month. Didn't you win that not long ago?
Anyway, thanks for pointing out this post. Thank goodness it is fiction.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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That is definitely a tear jerker, Sally. You really have a gift for romantic fiction. I guess it comes from the love that you feel.
This is very well written. I bet that it goes up for story of the month. Didn't you win that not long ago?
Anyway, thanks for pointing out this post. Thank goodness it is fiction.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for excellent review and kind compliments. I am delighted that you liked it. It made my husband cry like a baby. He could hardly finish reading it. I knew I had succeeded. I appreciate your valuable time amd for sharing it with me. I know you have a full life.
All my best,
Sal xo
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I think that it is so sweet that your husband loves your work. Amazing.
Comment from Colleen Pinner
Well done! Even though I expected the ending, I still was hoping that somehow he would make it home. One of my brothers was a long haul trucker and in many ways you captured his life. I always knew he had deep feelings, but he could never express them. He always joked with everyone. A series of strokes ended his driving, but not his sense of humor. I'd like to think if he'd had a napkin to write on, he would have shared more with us.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Well done! Even though I expected the ending, I still was hoping that somehow he would make it home. One of my brothers was a long haul trucker and in many ways you captured his life. I always knew he had deep feelings, but he could never express them. He always joked with everyone. A series of strokes ended his driving, but not his sense of humor. I'd like to think if he'd had a napkin to write on, he would have shared more with us.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and insightful comments. I appreciate you so much. I wrote this to remind us all to say, ?I love you? to those we love and care about. I does sound like you brother was very close to the character of Brandon Rhoades. I am glad to hear he had a sense of humor.
All my best to you and yours,
Sally :+)
Comment from Chris Davies
I actually teared up. Nice use of emotion - not overdone, just right. The love letter was amazing, and until the very end, I kept hoping he's be somehow saved. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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I actually teared up. Nice use of emotion - not overdone, just right. The love letter was amazing, and until the very end, I kept hoping he's be somehow saved. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Thank you very much, Chris! I am honored and pleased with the outstanding review and compliments. I appreciate your specific thoughts on the emotional content. That helps me a lot.
All my best to you and yours,
Sally :+)
Comment from Earl Corp
Geez, this almost made me cry reading it. I hope if I get that opportunity when I'm buying the farm I can write something that eloquent and profound to my wife. If this isn't a contest entry it should BE. Excellent Job.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Geez, this almost made me cry reading it. I hope if I get that opportunity when I'm buying the farm I can write something that eloquent and profound to my wife. If this isn't a contest entry it should BE. Excellent Job.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much, Earl. My husband cried his eyes out. He could hardly read the ending. You are in good company. I had to do a sweet one for Valentine?s Day. Sometimes we all need to say it more than we do. I know I need to hear and say it everyday. I appreciate your kind words and outstanding rating.
All my best,
Sal :+)
Comment from Scarbrems
Oh, dear, what a weepie. I kept hoping he wouldn't die, even though everything pointed to the fact this wasn't going to end well. I was pleased, however, that he wrote the words he wanted to say on a napkin - at least she had that. It would be terrible to die without telling your loved one how you really feel. A real lesson here in saying how you feel, because you don't know what is around the corner.
The only thing I'd suggest to you is perhaps you need to 'show' more. The story is heavy on the 'telling' in places. For example, rather than tell us how the accident happened, show us through the character's experience, so that we feel his struggle to control the vehicle.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Oh, dear, what a weepie. I kept hoping he wouldn't die, even though everything pointed to the fact this wasn't going to end well. I was pleased, however, that he wrote the words he wanted to say on a napkin - at least she had that. It would be terrible to die without telling your loved one how you really feel. A real lesson here in saying how you feel, because you don't know what is around the corner.
The only thing I'd suggest to you is perhaps you need to 'show' more. The story is heavy on the 'telling' in places. For example, rather than tell us how the accident happened, show us through the character's experience, so that we feel his struggle to control the vehicle.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and critique. I appreciate your input on the wreck part of the story. I?ll see what I can do. You are a dear to help me with your safe advice.
All my best,
Sal :+)
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It is always my pleasure, and it's a great story. Lovely to read more prose, here.
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Okay, I just added to his over the cliff scene. See if you think it is more...appealing.
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Brilliant, I felt much more involved, there.
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Good. So did I and I am the writer...
Comment from susand3022
Hi,
Recently I was told that my reviewing basically sucks. So this week,
this is my review. I'm taking a survey... Would you rather:
A: Have a true review
B: Have a certain 5-star generic review
Choose wisely and be sure of your choice so I can save myself the
needless time and tears over those who don't want to hear them.
I'll make a list.
And remember... LEARNING IS EARNING!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Hi,
Recently I was told that my reviewing basically sucks. So this week,
this is my review. I'm taking a survey... Would you rather:
A: Have a true review
B: Have a certain 5-star generic review
Choose wisely and be sure of your choice so I can save myself the
needless time and tears over those who don't want to hear them.
I'll make a list.
And remember... LEARNING IS EARNING!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the excellent review. I hope you meant it, I wasn?t really sure. I would like a reviewer to be honest with me, and I hope that is always the case. I am honest in my reviews. I seek to help FanStory members become better writers, and hope they return in kind.
Have a true review is my vote!
All my best,
Sally
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Hi Sally, This was such a sad story! I hate to say it but I saw it coming...Could be because My ex was a trucker and we were on the road for 8 months! We didn't go through winter weather when it was comiing! It was so hard to continue reading when he turned off and I knew that he was headed to his end. I wanted to cry... I just don't have time! LOL
Comment from LovnPeace
Oh my gosh, so sad. This made me tear up. All the poor choices we make and the wrong decisions, though I could see this coming. I held my breath and hoped he would make it. Well done. Blessings. Barbara
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Oh my gosh, so sad. This made me tear up. All the poor choices we make and the wrong decisions, though I could see this coming. I held my breath and hoped he would make it. Well done. Blessings. Barbara
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the excellent review and tears. My husband cried as he proofread this, too. A lot of men have confessed their their tears and emotions after reading this. I wanted it to be a thought provoking and meaningful read. So glad you stopped by my poet friend!
All my best,
Sal
Comment from Kathleen Washnis
Wow Sally, this was so good! You drew me in with the way you wrote this and I felt like I was right there with the characters. Thank God for the Bic pen that worked in the freezing cold! (LOL!) We always want things to work out so it was a surprise ending that he died. But what a treasure he left behind on a napkin! Whether in a Hallmark Card or a napkin, the words we convey to one another is so important and the value of those words become priceless, especially after one dies. I literally was reading some cards the other day I saved that my mother gave me with her sweet comments within and they are by far one of my greatest treasures. I'm so glad I read this, thank you! : )
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Wow Sally, this was so good! You drew me in with the way you wrote this and I felt like I was right there with the characters. Thank God for the Bic pen that worked in the freezing cold! (LOL!) We always want things to work out so it was a surprise ending that he died. But what a treasure he left behind on a napkin! Whether in a Hallmark Card or a napkin, the words we convey to one another is so important and the value of those words become priceless, especially after one dies. I literally was reading some cards the other day I saved that my mother gave me with her sweet comments within and they are by far one of my greatest treasures. I'm so glad I read this, thank you! : )
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much for the superb review and support. I am so glad you liked it. I, too, have sweet cards of remembrance and notes. The words mean the most, penned and spoken, I am so glad you stopped by, I have missed you!
All my best,
Sal xo
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Thanks Sally for saying you missed me! I'm trying to do more reviews so I can earn points and post something new as it's been a while. Still looking forward to your next Catzilla with perhaps my sister's cat Pumpkin in it! 🐈
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Yes, a love story is brewing...
