Love Letter on a Napkin
The most important words you will ever say.38 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Oh goodness, this story has brought tears to my eyes. What a beautiful love letter written in snow but probably remembered in stone. We are having that kind of weather here now. I couldn't help to think about the travelers on the roads during the holidays. Sally, your stories are wonderful.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Oh goodness, this story has brought tears to my eyes. What a beautiful love letter written in snow but probably remembered in stone. We are having that kind of weather here now. I couldn't help to think about the travelers on the roads during the holidays. Sally, your stories are wonderful.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2019
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Sorry Im so late with my reply, Rosemary. I'm delighted you enjoyed this. This is actually my husband's all time favorite story of mine. I'm glad you had a tearfully good read. Your sweet compliments mean so much.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xoxo
Comment from nuzhatshireen
Every word of the story is a pearl showing deep love. When beautiful emotion is at peak then such kind of writing appear and travel to the hearts of other people. The story is still in my mind, just like a beautiful movie.
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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
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Every word of the story is a pearl showing deep love. When beautiful emotion is at peak then such kind of writing appear and travel to the hearts of other people. The story is still in my mind, just like a beautiful movie.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate it so much.
Comment from moongirlwriter
Sally, I missed this story in January. OMGsh. . .this story so moved me, it filled my heart and brought tears to my eyes. So beautifully written with all the love that could be expressed thrown in between the lines. No wonder it won story of the month! Congrat. . .6 months later. :)
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2019
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Sally, I missed this story in January. OMGsh. . .this story so moved me, it filled my heart and brought tears to my eyes. So beautifully written with all the love that could be expressed thrown in between the lines. No wonder it won story of the month! Congrat. . .6 months later. :)
Comment Written 01-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2019
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Well, if this is not a wonderful surprise! Thank you so much for taking the time to read?it is a bit long! I am so honored by your review and six stars.
Always my very best to you and yours,
Sal xo
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:)
Comment from Sandra Montanino
A very tender, poignant and beautiful story. Great job. It's funny, my husband never said he loved me very often, but now that we've been married over 50 years, he tells me loves me every morning, night, and at the end of every phone call.
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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A very tender, poignant and beautiful story. Great job. It's funny, my husband never said he loved me very often, but now that we've been married over 50 years, he tells me loves me every morning, night, and at the end of every phone call.
Comment Written 09-May-2019
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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Thank you, Sandra. I am pleased you went way back to January to visit my story of the month entry. I am glad you enjoyed it. It is my husband?s favorite of all time. I am glad to hear your husband declares his love for you every day.
Always my best to you and yours,
Sal :+)
Comment from Tina Crute
Oh my gosh! What a tearjerker! But how sweet the love between Branson and Maria. My heart is melting,lol.
This is great writing!
I am friends with a pro!
I'm still out of sixes....but this deserved it!
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
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Oh my gosh! What a tearjerker! But how sweet the love between Branson and Maria. My heart is melting,lol.
This is great writing!
I am friends with a pro!
I'm still out of sixes....but this deserved it!
Comment Written 12-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
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Girl, you went way back! So glad you liked it. My husband was crying so hard, he could hardly finish proofreading. I appreciate the excellent review and kind encouragement. Thank you for taking time to read this, it was long.
All my best,
Sal xo
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It was worth my time! The
title caught my eye!
I will visit your page again
from time to time!:)
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Sally, I can understand how this won Story of the Month - totally deserved it. It is a sad story and really does make one want to say - I love you - everyday with meaning. Please accept my virtual 6 star â?•¸? â?•¸? â?•¸? â?•¸? â?•¸? â?•¸? ~DD
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Sally, I can understand how this won Story of the Month - totally deserved it. It is a sad story and really does make one want to say - I love you - everyday with meaning. Please accept my virtual 6 star â?•¸? â?•¸? â?•¸? â?•¸? â?•¸? â?•¸? ~DD
Comment Written 05-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much DD! it was so good of you to stop by with a review of my love story. I am so glad you liked it. My husband loved it. It is one of his favorites.
All my best,
Sal :+)
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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 A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for the recognition this post has received from the FanStory community. While this was not a Contest Committee decision, the committee recognizes this achievement with a seven star review. |
Comment Written 13-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Thank you, thank, thank you! I am honored, my dears. I appreciate you all so much.
All my best,
Sally Law :+)
Comment from Brigitte Elko
Oh my goodness, I was literally on the edge of my chair reading this ,hoping against hope for a happy ending. This was riveting to say the least. Well told and detailed enough to carry the reader right into that truck bed. This has my vote for sure. Thanks for sharing.
Blessings,
Brigitte
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Oh my goodness, I was literally on the edge of my chair reading this ,hoping against hope for a happy ending. This was riveting to say the least. Well told and detailed enough to carry the reader right into that truck bed. This has my vote for sure. Thanks for sharing.
Blessings,
Brigitte
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Oh, dear Brigitte, thank you. I am so glad you enjoyed the suspenseful read. I am deeply honored by the six and kind words. Thank you so much for your time and vote, too. It?s readers and reviewers like you that make my writing so rewarding.
All my best,
Sally :+)
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You are a talent not to be ignored. My pleasure.
Brigitte
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Thank you so much. I just fanned you.
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I am honored.
Peace and blessings,
Brigitte
Comment from robyn corum
Sally,
What a sad and horribly tragic story -- with several messages for the reader. I'm not sure if that was what you intended or not, but they sure came across. One, be sure to tell the people who matter most what you really feel while you have the time to do it. Second, follow your instincts and the good advice of the people who love you.
This was a really tense story and though I knew something was going to happen, I didn't know when or how. You had me glued to the screen - you wicked, hateful writer. *smile* Beautiful job and makes it clear why this was chosen as a SOM entry.
I did see some places that may need further attention:
1.) He was forty(-)something with graying hair, actually,
2.) He was fortysomething with graying hair, actually, more gray than brown.
--> this isn't really necessary since you didn't really even mention the brown to begin with and then the brown is so little...
3.) He adored his wife and only son, and (they were) known to travel with (him) in his younger days.
--> I don't think you should say HE traveled with THEM
4.) Branson scolded himself, "(W)hy didn't I say--something...poetic, deep, sexy...anything(?)"
5.) (")He really loved you, Ma'am.(")
--> because it's the opening of a new paragraph where the character is still talking, you need opening q-marks, too.
Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019
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Sally,
What a sad and horribly tragic story -- with several messages for the reader. I'm not sure if that was what you intended or not, but they sure came across. One, be sure to tell the people who matter most what you really feel while you have the time to do it. Second, follow your instincts and the good advice of the people who love you.
This was a really tense story and though I knew something was going to happen, I didn't know when or how. You had me glued to the screen - you wicked, hateful writer. *smile* Beautiful job and makes it clear why this was chosen as a SOM entry.
I did see some places that may need further attention:
1.) He was forty(-)something with graying hair, actually,
2.) He was fortysomething with graying hair, actually, more gray than brown.
--> this isn't really necessary since you didn't really even mention the brown to begin with and then the brown is so little...
3.) He adored his wife and only son, and (they were) known to travel with (him) in his younger days.
--> I don't think you should say HE traveled with THEM
4.) Branson scolded himself, "(W)hy didn't I say--something...poetic, deep, sexy...anything(?)"
5.) (")He really loved you, Ma'am.(")
--> because it's the opening of a new paragraph where the character is still talking, you need opening q-marks, too.
Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 09-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and critique. Yep, made everybody cry on this one. My husband was crying so hard he could hardly finish. Maybe he would have noticed my lack of quotation marks at the very end. He is my proofreader! Oh well, I have outstanding reviewers like you. I am very appreciative. I am glad you cried your makeup off.
All my best,
Sal ;+)
Comment from pome lover
well...I'm afraid to ask if that's true. Your bio picture looks so happy - I hope it is current.
You wrote this story well, made it real. The one thing that makes me think it's fiction is you include his thoughts which you couldn't know if the story were true.
(just thought of that - whew)
Anyway, it is a good story with a sad but lovely ending.
Katharine - pome lover
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019
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well...I'm afraid to ask if that's true. Your bio picture looks so happy - I hope it is current.
You wrote this story well, made it real. The one thing that makes me think it's fiction is you include his thoughts which you couldn't know if the story were true.
(just thought of that - whew)
Anyway, it is a good story with a sad but lovely ending.
Katharine - pome lover
Comment Written 09-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019
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Dear poet, thank you for the outstanding review and concern for my welfare. No, this is not a true story, although it could be similar to many true stories of loss. I appreciate your time and your encouragement of my work.
All my best,
Sal :+)
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you're most welcome.
It just dawned on me when you said, "Dear Poet" - that you might be VERY KINDLY letting me know I'd misspelled "poem" in my pen name.
( though probably you weren't)
anyway, it's just being quirky (silly)
Katharine - pome lover
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No, I just called you the poet dear to me is all. ;+)
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thanks, though Heaven knows, I'm not saying I don't ever misspell :)
