haiku (snowflakes fall)
haiku51 total reviews
Comment from Heather Knight
Haikus are difficult to write. Not enough words in my opinion. But you've managed to paint a very effective picture here. I particularly like the last line.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Haikus are difficult to write. Not enough words in my opinion. But you've managed to paint a very effective picture here. I particularly like the last line.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you aria for your thoughtful and encouraging review. Writing haiku is fairly new to me. It is quite a challenge.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from dragonpoet
Good luck in the contest with this haiku that reminds us of the beauty that awaits us when the snow melts as Winter changes to Spring.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Good luck in the contest with this haiku that reminds us of the beauty that awaits us when the snow melts as Winter changes to Spring.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you Joan for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
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No problem, Janet
Joan
Comment from mermaids
Your haiku form creates a clear picture of nature. "Sleeping beauties" is a wonderful last line that shows how winter eventually leads to beauty. Excellent use of words that creates a winter scene.
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Your haiku form creates a clear picture of nature. "Sleeping beauties" is a wonderful last line that shows how winter eventually leads to beauty. Excellent use of words that creates a winter scene.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I appreciate your kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Maudaline Montes
Jmf4119,
Nice piece of writing! You've created some peaceful imagery here. The picture is a very nice representation of the poem too. Well done! :)
-Maudaline Montes
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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Jmf4119,
Nice piece of writing! You've created some peaceful imagery here. The picture is a very nice representation of the poem too. Well done! :)
-Maudaline Montes
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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First, welcome to FanStory Maudaline.
Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Artasylum
Hey jam4119... this is a lovely haiku written in perfect form... I love sleeping... which let my thoughts to sleeping beauties... Looking forward to 2019... yours, diana
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Hey jam4119... this is a lovely haiku written in perfect form... I love sleeping... which let my thoughts to sleeping beauties... Looking forward to 2019... yours, diana
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you diana for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Treischel
A lovely seasonal haiku for a perfect kigu about the snow falling on the flowerbed. It fully captured the difficult requirements of that Japanese format. I felt the artistic flourish within that satori. Well done! Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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A lovely seasonal haiku for a perfect kigu about the snow falling on the flowerbed. It fully captured the difficult requirements of that Japanese format. I felt the artistic flourish within that satori. Well done! Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I appreciate your kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku about the snow that cover the flower bed make the flowers to have their beauty sleep until spring comes back again. The first snow of the season is always the best one.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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A very well-written haiku about the snow that cover the flower bed make the flowers to have their beauty sleep until spring comes back again. The first snow of the season is always the best one.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you Sandra for your encouraging review. I agree, the first snow of the season is the best.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from patcelaw
Jm, this is a very well written haiku that meets the requirements for the contest. I am just thankful I do not live anymore where we see snow. Patricia
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Jm, this is a very well written haiku that meets the requirements for the contest. I am just thankful I do not live anymore where we see snow. Patricia
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you Patricia for your encouraging review. I've moved from northern PA to NC. We get snow here but not much and not for long. That suits me fine. (smile)
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Insider98
This is so perfect for this season. I like it very much! You paint a great picture, thanks to your perfect choice of words.Amazing job! Cheers!!!
Insider98
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This is so perfect for this season. I like it very much! You paint a great picture, thanks to your perfect choice of words.Amazing job! Cheers!!!
Insider98
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Claire Hardin
I love the simplicity of this haiku. It creates a beautiful picture in such a simple way that is hard to convey. The color and picture choices are very nice, too. Well done.
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I love the simplicity of this haiku. It creates a beautiful picture in such a simple way that is hard to convey. The color and picture choices are very nice, too. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you Claire for the thoughtful and encouraging review. I greatly appreciate your kind comments and the extra special stars.
Blessings
Janet
