Smuckatelly Rides Again
Based on a true story16 total reviews
Comment from Insider98
A very well written story. A weapon is serious business, so you can't really joke with them, whether they are yours or somebody else's. Great job!
Insider98
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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A very well written story. A weapon is serious business, so you can't really joke with them, whether they are yours or somebody else's. Great job!
Insider98
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from SLMorrical
Very good. I could picture the weapon taking, and the confrontation with Smuckatelly. This is well written hope you win the contest. I also have to say a name like Smuckatelly is a dead giveaway of a smuck. Well done. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Very good. I could picture the weapon taking, and the confrontation with Smuckatelly. This is well written hope you win the contest. I also have to say a name like Smuckatelly is a dead giveaway of a smuck. Well done. Keep writing.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Thanks, but since this is a true story they disqualified it from the contest. Which is cool that's not why I do this. Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Whether a trainee, apprentice or a professional, keeping weapon is a responsibility, else there is chance of wrong or misuse of weapon causing accident; well said, well done. Write inspire change for 1234 Years--- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Whether a trainee, apprentice or a professional, keeping weapon is a responsibility, else there is chance of wrong or misuse of weapon causing accident; well said, well done. Write inspire change for 1234 Years--- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was really good. Sometimes pranksters go way over the top and get people in trouble, and they still do it thinking it is so funny. Excellent flash fiction story, I wish you much luck int e the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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That was really good. Sometimes pranksters go way over the top and get people in trouble, and they still do it thinking it is so funny. Excellent flash fiction story, I wish you much luck int e the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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I was actually disqualified from the contest because it wasn't a work of fiction. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
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That's a bit cruel, I've seen many true stories put into contests and that have won. Next time don't mention it's true if it is. :(
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word flash fiction story, Smuckatelly Does It Again, reminds me, not in exactly the same vein, of Private reid. He was blamed by the Drill Instructor for everything, even if he wasn't to blame.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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This one-hundred-word flash fiction story, Smuckatelly Does It Again, reminds me, not in exactly the same vein, of Private reid. He was blamed by the Drill Instructor for everything, even if he wasn't to blame.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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You got the point of Smuckatelly. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Mastery
Good one, Earl. You have a plausible story here in just 100 words. Pretty good . I like the name. where in the name of hell, did you get it? Usually we fall back on people we have met for these stories. Good luck in the contest. Bob
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Good one, Earl. You have a plausible story here in just 100 words. Pretty good . I like the name. where in the name of hell, did you get it? Usually we fall back on people we have met for these stories. Good luck in the contest. Bob
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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The drill sergeants used Smuckatelly as a generic term for a rag bag. I apply it in my stories as needed, shhhh don't tell anyone. My wife was disappointed that there was no Smuckatelly. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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Always, Earl. :) Bob
Comment from Artasylum
This made me laugh out loud... funny stuff and this Smuckatelly had it coming to him... He got off light if you ask me... I'm enjoying everything I've read from you... looking forward. Yours, diana
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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This made me laugh out loud... funny stuff and this Smuckatelly had it coming to him... He got off light if you ask me... I'm enjoying everything I've read from you... looking forward. Yours, diana
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much Diana for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from William Ross
Yes yes, as a Marine I can say this is for real, I remember a Marine who misplaced his rifle on the rifle range, he never heard the last of it for sure. Good luck and have a great day
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Yes yes, as a Marine I can say this is for real, I remember a Marine who misplaced his rifle on the rifle range, he never heard the last of it for sure. Good luck and have a great day
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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You're absolutely correct, this is very real. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Rob Caudle
Earl wow!! flash fiction I see a lot of it here on fan story I just say anyhting in under 1000 words god job here. you painted a picture that is familar to me but for me I was pushing away washington
Rob
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Earl wow!! flash fiction I see a lot of it here on fan story I just say anyhting in under 1000 words god job here. you painted a picture that is familar to me but for me I was pushing away washington
Rob
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Regardless we were pushing somewhere away. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your 100 word story, Earl. I enjoyed reading it. There is good flow, you have a setting and a problem, and a resolution. Also you have described the characters well. Best wishes. Jan
he was a junior drill.[ add a space here ]One day it rained
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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You did a good job with your 100 word story, Earl. I enjoyed reading it. There is good flow, you have a setting and a problem, and a resolution. Also you have described the characters well. Best wishes. Jan
he was a junior drill.[ add a space here ]One day it rained
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thanks Jan for your kind words and pointing out the error. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
